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August 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, other than the he said, she said slips, it was great and your evil. I think we both know why.
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August 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I think it's pretty good! please continue
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July 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Gahaha.
That was hawt.
For some reason, I find father/daughter fics so arousing.
Anyway, update soon.
<3
That was hawt.
For some reason, I find father/daughter fics so arousing.
Anyway, update soon.
<3
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very good updates! I read for the story and structure, perfect English and grammer come later. Very enjoyable read!
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July 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
My eyes hurt... I just have one piece of advice for the author "PLEASE, PLEASE take some writing classes!!!!!!" It is not the incest that is offensive! It is the grammar, the spelling and the whole sense of there being nothing to it!!!
There is a BIG – ENORMOUS- difference between using bad language to describe the character’s attitude, and using BADLY thought language to describe the story! --- well, if there WAS a story! Because as far as I see in this you have one girl who one moment wants to be a saint and the next she is pleading to be called and be talked to as a slut, yeah, right on!
----- She jacked off to her dream last night; she just hoped her father didn’t hear her. < ---- alloooo, girls masturbate, nothing there she can jack off.
----- Her vagina felt a bit stretched and soar. < ---- yeah, like a frigging soaring (elevated) eagle!!! SORE!!!!
----- “Bound my wrists, daddy.” < ---- kinda like BIND isn’t it? Talk about jumping to past to present to WTH?
----- with flower pedals all over the place < ---- and flowers go along with bicycles? PETALS not PEDALS
----- He could heel her panting as he inserted his fingers into her. < ---- if he could FEEL her panting
----- “I’m you’re slut, daddy.” < ----- YOUR? Right?! Or is it that her daddy is her slut? --- Philosophically speaking… I am, You are, slut, daddy…. Righty!!
I can understand mistakes done at 2 am, but maybe you should take your time and proofread things before you publish… it is not just the he/she that needs help!
A concerned reader.....
anooojustme
There is a BIG – ENORMOUS- difference between using bad language to describe the character’s attitude, and using BADLY thought language to describe the story! --- well, if there WAS a story! Because as far as I see in this you have one girl who one moment wants to be a saint and the next she is pleading to be called and be talked to as a slut, yeah, right on!
----- She jacked off to her dream last night; she just hoped her father didn’t hear her. < ---- alloooo, girls masturbate, nothing there she can jack off.
----- Her vagina felt a bit stretched and soar. < ---- yeah, like a frigging soaring (elevated) eagle!!! SORE!!!!
----- “Bound my wrists, daddy.” < ---- kinda like BIND isn’t it? Talk about jumping to past to present to WTH?
----- with flower pedals all over the place < ---- and flowers go along with bicycles? PETALS not PEDALS
----- He could heel her panting as he inserted his fingers into her. < ---- if he could FEEL her panting
----- “I’m you’re slut, daddy.” < ----- YOUR? Right?! Or is it that her daddy is her slut? --- Philosophically speaking… I am, You are, slut, daddy…. Righty!!
I can understand mistakes done at 2 am, but maybe you should take your time and proofread things before you publish… it is not just the he/she that needs help!
A concerned reader.....
anooojustme
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July 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story is one of the best incest stories I've ever read! Please, continue writing it! :D
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June 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Never read a story like this before, but it was good. Keep it up!
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May 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Pretty awesome story. You should continue the story. Plz let me know if you are!!! TTYL!
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May 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very good! I too hope you continue!