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September 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
One liners spaced off by themselves are alright once in awhile but paragraphs are 3 sentences and no less. I would take the dramatic spacing out of this story even if it does take it down to 2 chapters in length.
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August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i like it, but the chapters are SOO SHORT , lol hope u write more