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Wheee! I've checking for updates every day, I'm so happy to see this updated. But it's crazy how it just makes me want even more! It's interesting and angsty, though I honestly don't like the way the carriers seem to begin to like and want men that have badly abused them. Like, it happens a bit too easy. But I love the story anyway, and I hope you're writing fast. :)

amazing, as always <3

Am I going to have to wait for a month for each chapter now? But glad to get that much. Where is Jesse's head? I admired his bravado in the beginning. But now, he just needs to pick his battles. Like he said himself, it is just hair. Michael is much more than any man in this story. Jesse just keeps pushing him to the limit. They do need to find out each other's limits, but not like this. Anton is treating Havar like a wounded dog, which is what Havar is. I really don't know what to feel for him, anger and sadness are not enough. He is helpless. Reading a diary! I am curious to know what was in the diary? The good news is that your writing is decidedly better. The midparagraph shift in POV that confused me before is not there anymore. Are Clint and Sloane the happy ending in this story? It is almost the end of November, but the story does not seem to end here, I hope you don't end it in the next 9 days. Perhaps November shall be a name for a child?

I hate this world. I loathe it in a way that just contributes to my developing ulcer. I hate all of the pure males, yes, all of them. Micheal is only tolerable, and that's a near thing for a number of reasons.

They're all so disgustingly manipulative, ALL OF THEM. I can almost forgive Micheal the manipulation of Jesse by showing him Rowe House; understanding that if I had someone I desperately cared for, like a sibling, I wouldn't want them hurt and a little bit of coercion at such a delicate time might be necessary to avoid surreal disaster. Yet, when he whipped Jesse, I was filled with such a burdening disappointment in him. And now, HAIR?! Coming from a woman with an incredibly short pixie cut, I was trembling with my rage. It's a part of him, a portion of his person to do with as he pleases. Why shouldn't he question Micheal about something that ought to be HIS choice, especially when Micheal refuses to damn well give him reasons. Use logic to express how it might be better for Jesse to have long hair, or why Micheal might prefer it, but then admit that it is Jesse's choice, because it's Jesse's God damn body. Then again, we've seen how much dominion Carrier's have over their own bodies, haven't we? Raped, unwillingly impregnated, beaten, the list seems endless. Honestly, why give them any power at all? They're just Carriers.

I think that's the root of it all, isn't it? They're not humans anymore, they're things. Chattle to be primped and preened and taken out for show and whim. The independence and autonomy righted to all people has been stripped away. Havar had it, they're enslaved. They all expect them to be shoved into little cookie-cutter roles, and they know it, so Jesse fights. He likes who he is, he wants to be his OWN person, not some Stepford Wife. And it repulses me how so many of the suitors, after the abuse, the trauma, and violation, once they feel secure in their fucking OWNERSHIP, try to woo the Carriers over, as though it's all water under the bridge and they really are swell guys, it's just the extenuating circumstances, is all. You know how it is.

This just upsets me, so I'm gonna round of with the reiteration of the manipulative brainwashing the pure males use. James and Ortega: Stockholm Syndrome, anyone? Havar and Anton: abuse of trauma, more SS. Tiger and Miljan: abuse of his lonliness, niavety, and SS. Micheal and Jesse: in some ways, the worst of them ALL, Jesse, surrounded by such animosity and confusion and pain and so desperately wanting to be wanted for who he is, trusted him.

I'm pretty sure I've used the comparison before, but it's like a train wreck. A horrifyingly traumatic catastrophe, but you can't look away.
Nacht

these chapters are extremely short, but it's confusing, you jump around alot and i'm getting lost, maybe it would eb a good idea to organize the story a bit. But it is good so far, just kinda jumpy and short

Thanks for the chapter! I'm not sure why Michael acted the way he did, and I think Jesse does have reason to question him, although Jesse can be paranoid sometimes (rightly so). I rememebered a lot of signs of low to high abuse in this chapter...like Yavisk invading Havar's privacy, Michael turning things around on Jesse to make him feel guilty and like it's his fault, and Clint hitting Sloane again. I really thought Michael was a good guy, and here I wondered if he had some kind of ulterior motive meant for Jesse's safety and good, but now I'm not sure. And Havar is depressing, especially with how he is a bit of a nervous wreck now and listens to so many commands. The idea of him having diaries was interesting though; I wonder what he wrote in them and if any of it concerned Yavisk or something else about his life that is close to him (and how Yavisk might use it). And I'm curious about how Tiger and Miljan's relationship will continue. He's so young. Also, I agree with Jesse about the part where Eric and Joseph chat, it was kind of eerie but also pretty funny.

Gah I hope Yavisk and the others rot in their own loneliness from lack of proper companionship!! It'd be their own faults. (Although I do think Clint's already feeling it)

Oooh I love this story, it's killing me to wait for more, it really is. Still wondering how the new guys will tie in to the "original" storyline and characters. I want to see more of how they're doing. Lots more! ;)

awww! that last line from tiger just had me thinking of him saying it all cute like.

I really like this story. For so many reasons:) I'm glad that you've written it and posted it for the world to see:)

~lyn~

awww... sadness... only one chapter T.T oh well! One is better than none! I hope to see more soon ^.^

Oh look at all the new chapters!!! Hurrah!
*loves Brian*