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I absolutely loved this chapter!!!
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M

Another update! and November is ending! Is the story ending? This just looks like the climax. The Clint and Sloane part was funny especially the 'bestest friend' line. Why is Clint so opportunistic, does he not know forgiving is not easy, especially in less than one week. I don't why but I am not worried about Sai like I was with the others, could it be that he was overshadowed by Havar. "It hurt" was he raped? I was actually scared when "yavisk opened one eye". Honestly sex for food. Isn't that prostitution. I shall from now on no longer capitalize yavisk. The doctor is awesome, but he can't exert any influence on yavisk. Why does he live with them. Tiger and Miljan are good, they are funny. Why does Miljan not rub off yavisk? I honestly hope Havar gets pregnant and dies. I am happy for Jesse and Michael, but something is coming their way.
I am still astounded to how powerless the carriers are. They are sent to school, they obviously read books, they are men. Why are they so powerless? How did they become so powerless? Was it with the decline of families, with the decline of holidays, and with them the gatherings and the joys of a crowd of people?

Fast updates yay.

I love this story, thank you for the three new chaoters in such a short time! My heart goes out to Havar, Tiger and Miljan are so great together... I really like all of them. There are onely 5 days left in november, I hope that doesn't mean the story is coming to an end?

If these last few chapters haven't been the tone swing of the century. From a purely functional standpoint, I'd like to congradulate you on your balance of character focus and plot movement, it's steady but no t perdictable. Otherwise, I wish I could put forth my usual vigor, but I'm really not up to it today.

Still don't like James or Clint. I'm thrilled with how upset and frustrated Clint seems, cause he damn well earned the situation he finds himself in. How dare he presume he can be nice and doting for a fucking week, seven days people, and just magically fix such a dysfunctional and unequitable relationship. Last I checked, he wasn't God, so he doesn't get any Sabbath day to rest his happy ass on. Seven days. Are you joking?! He should feel blessed if Sloane ever readjusts at all, and we all know how the collective feel about Sloane so that's got to say a lot.

Micheal....I feel rather ambivilant toward. I certainly don't hate him, but I don't really like him all that much either. Probably partially cause I feel and empathize so strongly with Jesse, but also his assurance to want to help the carriers, that he knows how wrong it is, and the earnestness comes of almost placatingly. He can't know, he never could. Just as I, blessed God above, will never truly know though I even have a better idea. I'm not saying he's insincere, I'm sure he does want to help, but....well. It's something. I don't hate him though, and I understand the function behind his and Jesse's relationship becoming permanent, even while aching and agreeing with Jesse's sentiments regarding the matter. Jesse is going to be allowed(can't even believe I have to USE that word) to use contraceptives, right? I don't see him wanting kids anytime soon, if at all, but knowing the shitheads that run things the "husband" would have to approve and even then you'd probably have to go through a private physician as the government doesn't want to "encourage such action".

Yavisk is Satan with a funny accent. End of song. He's sick and controlling and hasn't listened to a damn word the doctor's said.

The doctor rocks my world, what I've seen of him.

Glad to see my feelings on Miljan are holding: He's scary as hell but no evil, not like Yavisk. The fact that he's going to use contracaption automatically raises him 20 points on the scale. I was amused by the bed fight, cause they both just seem so exasperated and Miljan just wants sleep. Tiger is feisty and I love him to bits.

Sai. DammitdammitdammitdammitdammitdammitDAMMIT!! Come ON! One word: Iodine, seriously. It fixes just about everything, you just flush yourself out with it. You may cause damage if you use it too frequently and for too long, though.

Working through your story is an interesting trial, but the trick is to keep breathing.
Nacht

Ah so many things happened! Miljan and Tiger's relationship is turning out to be very interesting. Tiger isn't afraid of him, and that makes their relationship seem more normal. I felt sorry for Havar, though. I thought that Yavisk would shape up after being reprimanded by the doctor, but he's still playing mind games with Havar. It was honestly scary when Yavisk "opened one eye", and then I guess the guy who said "It hurt" is Havar? I hope that one day Yavisk feels very, deservedly guilty for all the bastardy things he's done to Havar. Also, Sai and Broussard's relationship is just rollicking on by; whenever I read his sections I feel like there's a danger game quality to it all, and Broussard comes off playful but also a little dangerous, and I think that shows with the outcome of what he and Sai did together. And I sympathized with Jesse in this chapter, it really explained what he's been thinking, and I hope he can still succeed in trying to make some changes. Also, Sloane and Clint's part was funny, and I think it's sweet that Clint is really trying to make it better. However, I think Sloane is smart to be suspicious; I think that if he gave in too soon Clint really would start reverting back to his old ways.

Anyway thanks for the quick update again! It makes my day, honestly.

Who said 'It hurt'? Was it Havar? Was it Sai?

Will Sai get pregnant? Will Havar get pregnant or commit suicide? Will Jesse get pregnant or will he say no to Michael? Will Miljan and Tiger's relationship get even more hilarious?

WILL THIS STORY HAVE A HAPPY ENDING?

Awesome, an update so soon! I'm interested in seeing how Sai's arc works out. I love Broussard's French accent, and it surprised me that Sai was on drugs. Also, I'm very happy for Jesse, although I'm a little confused because Michael and Jesse seem to have all these problems--like when Jesse threw his napkin or something at Michael before and said that if he was a liability, then Michael should get another carrier--that don't seem to really resolve themselves. (Or did they talk after that? I'm not sure.)

Anyway thanks so much for the update! Really looking forward to the next one!

Tega breaks my heart. I wonder if he is going to lose it and kill himself and the baby too. I really thought Havar was pregnant. That was a pretty extensive list of injuries. I wonder if Anton will change his habits. I want to know what Miljan said to the Doctor. The doctor was a nice fellow. He is a doctor, was he only being nice to a patient or was he truly sympathizing. It seemed to be the latter. I will now read the next chapter.

That was a quick update and it was sweet. Very much better than the last chapter. I did not even feel bad about Sai's situation. Michael is a sweetheart, he cared enough to ask JESSE. You now have a lot of characters, will you be able to write about them all. About Col. B., "this will only take a second" Scotty said that too. Is he only going to do anything funny, or just follow the protocol. I want to see Tega and James interact, and I desperately need to know what Havar is feeling about being pregnant. If he had been pregnant, Anton would have been nicer to him. But I suppose the new developments are even better.
I know Tiger is 17, isn't he suppose to attend school or something, especially since the other carriers, the older carriers, have classes?