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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is a great! I just love your story! I’m hooked already!
I think Alic’s mother is unbelievably cold. How could she sell her own daughter this way -- for money no less? Does she have something against Alic, or is it that she only cares for her sons. What a bitch. Obviously, there is no lost love between her and Alic.
Kein is an interesting mix isn’t he? One minute he’s telling her he will break her, then the next he says he’s a nice guy. Somehow I don’t think Alic believes him. Of course I love all this domination stuff. Lol
By making her strip, I can see he wants to mentally dominate her as well as physically. He certainly won’t allow her any slack will he? And now he’s putting a collar on her. I’m sure she loves that one. I have to admit though it is rather sexy.
That was a gutsy move for Alic to escape like that. I had a feeling though that she would eventfully get caught. It looks like he spanked her pretty hard and oh that is so cruel to take away some of her pronouns. How can she even speak without the words, I, me, our, and us? She’s going to be naked all the time isn’t she?
So now Alic has taken her to the groomers to get a tattoo and some piercings. Yikes! I’m cringing already. I hope they won’t be too horrible.
I think you can do so many things with this, it really is a great start. I keep wondering if the fiancée will show up later and try to save her, or will she even want to be saved after Kein has mastered her. Kein must know that if he breaks her, it’s not true submission. Only Alic can give him what he truly craves. Without her consent, his victory is hollow. It is a very interesting power struggle though. Keep up the great work and please update soon!!!
I think Alic’s mother is unbelievably cold. How could she sell her own daughter this way -- for money no less? Does she have something against Alic, or is it that she only cares for her sons. What a bitch. Obviously, there is no lost love between her and Alic.
Kein is an interesting mix isn’t he? One minute he’s telling her he will break her, then the next he says he’s a nice guy. Somehow I don’t think Alic believes him. Of course I love all this domination stuff. Lol
By making her strip, I can see he wants to mentally dominate her as well as physically. He certainly won’t allow her any slack will he? And now he’s putting a collar on her. I’m sure she loves that one. I have to admit though it is rather sexy.
That was a gutsy move for Alic to escape like that. I had a feeling though that she would eventfully get caught. It looks like he spanked her pretty hard and oh that is so cruel to take away some of her pronouns. How can she even speak without the words, I, me, our, and us? She’s going to be naked all the time isn’t she?
So now Alic has taken her to the groomers to get a tattoo and some piercings. Yikes! I’m cringing already. I hope they won’t be too horrible.
I think you can do so many things with this, it really is a great start. I keep wondering if the fiancée will show up later and try to save her, or will she even want to be saved after Kein has mastered her. Kein must know that if he breaks her, it’s not true submission. Only Alic can give him what he truly craves. Without her consent, his victory is hollow. It is a very interesting power struggle though. Keep up the great work and please update soon!!!
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July 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey there! I'm still here and I still like your story!
You should write more... The whole idea is nice and although Alic's behaviour will worsen her situation, I like the fact that she speaks her mind... although after that last punishment I think her spirit might break...
You should write more... The whole idea is nice and although Alic's behaviour will worsen her situation, I like the fact that she speaks her mind... although after that last punishment I think her spirit might break...
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July 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for FINALY updating, please i want you to continue this.. please update soon x
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June 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Loved it! more soon
Jayna
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Jayna
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June 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
PLEASEEE PLEASEEE CONTINUE THIS
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May 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEE UPDATEEEEEEEEEEEEE SOOOOOOOONNNNNNNNNNNN
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May 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter! I can't wait to see Alic get creative and try to figure out ways to escape from Kein. Right now she's in shock, but once she settles down, I know she'll give him a run fo rhis money.
Good work...update soon!
Good work...update soon!
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May 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like the story so far. Wow, what a horrible mother Alic has and what is her step-brother's problem. I really cann't think of a way she can get away for this guy, Kein, but I want to she how it turns out. Please give us the next chapter, thanks.
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May 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow this story is sooooo goodddd
pleaseee can u update soooonn
and try and make the chapters a bit longer
keep up the good work
PLEASE UPDATE SOON
pleaseee can u update soooonn
and try and make the chapters a bit longer
keep up the good work
PLEASE UPDATE SOON
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May 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, I really like it. It keeps getting better and better. I really don't like Kein's plan and I hope he'll find his match in Alic's face. I just wish she won't break too fast.
Suzie
Suzie