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YOUR SO MEAN I WANT A LEMON!! CANT YOU CHANGE THE RATING PLEASE I BEG YOU I WILL EVEN SETTLE FOR YOU TO JUST SEND ME A LEMON I WOULD LOVE YOU!!!! THIS IS A GREAT STORY AND YOUR DOING SOOOO WELL WITH THE ROMANCE I THINK YOU SHOULD JUST GIVE THE LEMON A CHANCE PLEASE!!! plus its not like they really care much iv read the lowest rating and it had lemon hell im not even sure if i rated my storys and they have sex in it please please give us a lemon!!!

I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"I blushed, felt my lips part, but my mouth was too dry. I stuck to telepathy. We were really massaging our link back to health. If we could use it while we kissed, we could use it during… I shook myself. You never said anything, I said. Well, not explicitly. Not anything my dense brain had been able to pick up on." LOL. I thought you were foreshadowing how their telelink would intensify when they they actually made love with eachother and then I noticed your note at the end. You need to write whatever you are comfortable with, so don't worry about losing readers. And you are fantastic at writing a romance that I'm sure if you ever feel comfortable, you would write a pretty fantastic lemon...I mean the way you described their kiss was muy caliente..very very hot!!
Oh my god and getting caught by her father at the end?!? What a cliffhanger...I wonder what her overprotective dad is going to say....
I cannot wait until the next chapter and I'm totally devoted to your story! It's one of my favorites!!

So, I don't normally a) read original fics for anything other than sheer laugh factor and b) comment. But I really love this fic. It's not the most amazing thing ever, I won't lie, but it has something too it that's very endearing and memorable. I keep coming back pretty much every day to see if its updated and it hasn't, so I really want to comment and say OMG PLEASE UPDATE SOOOOOON.
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I've read over three hundred fanfics and books and very few of those have hooked me like this. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE keep updating! It's one of the best stories I've ever read; kinda romantic and funny enough to make me cry of laughter! Can't wait for next chapter!

You know you've got a gift when you can make the interaction between two of your characters totally intimate and heart-touching, even if one of those characters is comatose. I loved this chappie, and after I read the last sentence of it, I was like, "NOOOOOOOO, as if you end the chapter there!!" Hehehe, if you can't tell, I'm ridiculously eager for the next chapter - this relationship between Kara and Damien is so wonderful, and the dynamics of it have been carefully and well written. That said, I realise a couple of your reviewers have been asking for some, ah, 'graphic interaction', but I'm not too sure how I'd feel about that. Yes, sex is well and good (fantastic, lol), and it's obviously another step to Kara and Damien's relationship, but I'm afraid that it might end up tarnishing the fic... or, whatever. I dunno. That's just a concern. Obviously, it's you as the author who decides what's what and what gets put into the story. I will just trust (keep on trusting) that you'll maintain the absolute brilliance of this story.

Can't wait for the next chapter - oh how I wish you'd update soon!!!

Okay, first off, hi Precious. Suprised to see me reviewing again?
Secondly, YUM. Your point of view with the demons in your story is absolutely fan-effing-tastic! I love Damien, even if he's a bit of an asshole. But as with Precious, I like assholes. (Just not as "in-depth" as she, shall we say, hehe.)

Ahem. I clicked the review button like an idiot. Anyways...
As I said, I love the point of view in which you've written. I hardly see any stories about these subjects, especially ones so well-written! I have no problem at all piecing together the events and characters. They are very, for lack of a better word, real. I am relieved Damien and Adrian didn't go at it over Kara; I think it would be a tough battle to write out. Finding out that Kara has a half-angel for a Guardian and that she, herself, is part angel was certainly a wonderful twist. I don't see how Damien could love her any less because of it, especially since she wont be sprouting wings and trying to purify him now that she is aware of her full heritage.
Also, I feel bad for the Serpent! :( Poor Serpent, it isn't his fault he has no legs...
Anyway, please continue writing! If you need some extra praise to spur you onward, I will gladly give it! To you, darling, I five five full stars and two thumbs way up.

Thanks and your welcome. At times like this it makes me happy that I helped you catch these things now so that you can tweak the chatpers as needed verse after the fact where it would be tricky or to much trouble to add information in. I feel really bad for Kara. She thinks that he'll hate her for the way she was born? He liked her before. (How many times did they say that their was nothing wrong with their love and that it was pure even if he wasn't?) Knowing she has an angelic background won't change who she is unless she lets it. I suppose it was a good thing Damien was out for those few months. Kara realized she loved him. And he wasn't awake to see Adrian's possessiveness...er-...I mean guardian instincts. While I'm thinking about it, Lori slapped her. When I was reading it didn't seem so out of line but after I glanced back at the whole chapter again it was a little shocking. Someone did need to tell her though. It wasn't her fault. I just can't figure out why Gabriel hit Dami. I mean if he was watching then he should have seen that Adrian wasn't in trouble. I don't think Kara and Damien's conversation was whispered. Perhaps he was just not paying them any attention. I have to agree with her, Michael fussing at her about his blood was NOT funny at the time but when you take it out of context well...What demon wouldn't laugh? It will probably be a running joke for a few decades. I have been wondering two things though. One, once she chooses to be with Damien does she like lose her right to have a guardian angel or does it fall under she's not doing anything bad so it doesn't count? Will Adrian actually listen to the powers that be if they tell him to stop protecting her? And her mom, knows nothing about all of this. How are they going to explain it? She is just going to disappear for a while then pop up pregnant with no explaination? Because it was quite clearly stated that they will not be married but they would be together. (Wonder if she will allow him to have other mates...) But the only way to cement that would be with a child, otherwise this whole thing will start over again at some point, yes? I mean they are demons. They are made to be greedy, reckless (enough to bare torment) risk takers, right? Nice job on the ending. A happy-mean cliffhanger. I wonder if he actually heard everything she said and/or thought. Plus it was good that she had time to get over the physical shiness. So when are they going to give her some teleportation powers? I know it has to be a time cruncher for whomever has been taking her back and forth all these months. Oh yeah random comment here (like the whole review hasn't been...) but I think I like Mephistopheles. (Did I spell that right?) I'm not sure why though. I mean what girl doesn't like a smart, quietly charming, and darkly handsom guy? But I still can't put my finger on what exactly it is I like about him. Is that what you were going for when you made him? Her dad is realy sweet too. So when is he going to (demand) give her a little training so she can defend herself? No father want's his little girl at the mercy of someone else.

I really love this story! And the way you depicted Lucifer.. absolute brilliance! Keep up the great writing! (Im so happy Damien's awake!!)

OMG. I can't believe you stopped there! Ahhhhhh!!!

I hope life gets less busy so you can update again soon! :)