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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
"So you're a law student now?"
"I'm a demon, Kara. It's not much of a leap," he said.
I love you. You are my new favorite person.
Dami's last name...hmm...what about Engel? Which is German for 'angel'...what can I say, I enjoy irony.
"I'm a demon, Kara. It's not much of a leap," he said.
I love you. You are my new favorite person.
Dami's last name...hmm...what about Engel? Which is German for 'angel'...what can I say, I enjoy irony.
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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
......speachless....... great two chapters and finally
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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is one of your best chapters. I loved the range of emotions - it was like I could feel each one myself as I read along. It was more thrilling than any action movie could be; matters of the heart usually are well done right.
I've always wanted to ask you if you have any favourite stories here on aff or anywhere else (like fictionpress)? Any recs?
Good luck with the rest of your exams and happy holidays.
I've always wanted to ask you if you have any favourite stories here on aff or anywhere else (like fictionpress)? Any recs?
Good luck with the rest of your exams and happy holidays.
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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was perfect. Where do I begin? I think it's so sweet that Kara's father is so protective of her because I guess his concerns are valid but at the same time even the angel saw how deeply in love Damien is with Kara.
Favorite Line: Something glittered in Damien's eyes. I don't intend to take any other mates, Kara. awwww that was so romantic!! He is so in love with her!And I love how he is like "okay we will just have 6 kids". LOL.
Lucifer must be so happy, I think he adores Kara and it will be interesting to see how powerful their kids will be.
Will Michael make another appearance? I wonder how he will feel when he finds out his great great great granddaughter is going to become mates with the anti-christ.
Why is Kara's father worried about the uprising? Is it because people will be killed and then Kara will have to choose sides?
Anyways, my dear, I love this chapter, I love your story, and I can't wait to read how Kara and Damien's relationship progresses because I am already gushing about all their interaction already...aww can you imagine them living together?!? It's too cute.
Bee
Favorite Line: Something glittered in Damien's eyes. I don't intend to take any other mates, Kara. awwww that was so romantic!! He is so in love with her!And I love how he is like "okay we will just have 6 kids". LOL.
Lucifer must be so happy, I think he adores Kara and it will be interesting to see how powerful their kids will be.
Will Michael make another appearance? I wonder how he will feel when he finds out his great great great granddaughter is going to become mates with the anti-christ.
Why is Kara's father worried about the uprising? Is it because people will be killed and then Kara will have to choose sides?
Anyways, my dear, I love this chapter, I love your story, and I can't wait to read how Kara and Damien's relationship progresses because I am already gushing about all their interaction already...aww can you imagine them living together?!? It's too cute.
Bee
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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I still love this story. I can't wait to see what happens next with the family. I think it should be interesting to see if Damien could get jealous of the half angel again.
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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very nice! Damien's so suave, yet still slightly immature. Cute.
Btw, I love your username! Go Gatsby!
Btw, I love your username! Go Gatsby!
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November 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Word!
Things to say in order...
1. Sorry I haven't reviewed the last couple chapters. Life caught up to me and I wasn't able to check on the story as often as I had been. Of course, I had been getting slightly obsessive about the story before, so perhaps that is a good thing :)
2. The story is still incredibly awesome. I love all the detail you put in it, I love how unusual the story is. You have a great voice for telling a story, and I appreciate that you post here. As for this being your first romance - you have a talent for romance, and might want to consider trying to publish in that genre.
3. About having a explicit sex scene... Well, I won't lie - I want one. The relationship between our fav twosome has me completely caught up, and your writing about them thus far has just been so sexy and sensual, I am just revved up to see it come to that conclusion, and I have a feeling that it would knock me over.
However, you are the author, and it is your story. This is what I want to know - are you not planning on writing a sex scene because you have the story sorta figured out in your head, and in your story, the sex scene just doesn't fit. Or are you not writing a sex scene because you've never written one before and don't want to chance it, even though in the back of your mind, you'd really like to include one.
If its the former, then you shouldn't write a sex scene. Yes, there will be disappointment and possibly a lost reader or two, but in the end, you can only write for yourself. So far your instincts have been working well.
If its the latter, though, then I ask you to push the uncertainty away, and write the darn scene! I would commend you on realizing how hard it is to write a good sex scene (which is not only hot sex, but exposes new dimensions to the characters and their relationship) but you shouldn't let that nervousness stop you from writing it.
Whatever you decide, I will continue eagerly following your story, and wishing you only the best.
Bathory
Things to say in order...
1. Sorry I haven't reviewed the last couple chapters. Life caught up to me and I wasn't able to check on the story as often as I had been. Of course, I had been getting slightly obsessive about the story before, so perhaps that is a good thing :)
2. The story is still incredibly awesome. I love all the detail you put in it, I love how unusual the story is. You have a great voice for telling a story, and I appreciate that you post here. As for this being your first romance - you have a talent for romance, and might want to consider trying to publish in that genre.
3. About having a explicit sex scene... Well, I won't lie - I want one. The relationship between our fav twosome has me completely caught up, and your writing about them thus far has just been so sexy and sensual, I am just revved up to see it come to that conclusion, and I have a feeling that it would knock me over.
However, you are the author, and it is your story. This is what I want to know - are you not planning on writing a sex scene because you have the story sorta figured out in your head, and in your story, the sex scene just doesn't fit. Or are you not writing a sex scene because you've never written one before and don't want to chance it, even though in the back of your mind, you'd really like to include one.
If its the former, then you shouldn't write a sex scene. Yes, there will be disappointment and possibly a lost reader or two, but in the end, you can only write for yourself. So far your instincts have been working well.
If its the latter, though, then I ask you to push the uncertainty away, and write the darn scene! I would commend you on realizing how hard it is to write a good sex scene (which is not only hot sex, but exposes new dimensions to the characters and their relationship) but you shouldn't let that nervousness stop you from writing it.
Whatever you decide, I will continue eagerly following your story, and wishing you only the best.
Bathory
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November 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love this story so much! I am currently reading Paradise Lost, and when I am reading I can't help but think of this story, I can't wait for more! You should try to get published!
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November 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow...when I suggested this story to Yora' I knew she would like it but I didn't know she'd love it enough to review. You should feel honored. Since she is even pickier then me (not an easy feat) and the last time she reviewed it was...(What year is it again?) when I was in the middle of my story that I started in '03/'04.
I can’t wait to see what else you have planned. (We almost to the end now, yes?) Even if her dad didn’t see what happened, I’m sure he heard her hit the wall; Demonic hearing. (I wonder if sticking with telepathy gave them an edge...) Now we venture into Kara announcing her choice (just to be official about it...Or did they count when she said Damien's name that first time? Because I thought she was just pausing between menced words.) as well as the explanations of why her dad disapproves of her choice. (Guess he should have said – "My daughter can have anyone she wants" except Damien. This has to run so much deeper than that slicing her head before she knew about her healing powers thing.) Makes you wonder if Lucifer didn’t put this as a possible plan all along. (He does dislike Bax'liyn having him at a disadvantage.) Ooo...is that why Bax'liyn doesn't want her to be with Dami? He loses his edge if she does? But we will all get to that in good time, yes?
I know she said she didn't want Hell to know she was sleeping in his bed but didn't they already think that? I mean after what happened with Ianev (twice!) it was already assumed by all that she was well.."his" right? Ianev practically said as much. Good luck with your work. All that stuff comes first, I'm sure everyone understands about that. And I have already told you my stand on the lemon issue.
So...Kara planning on cashing in the offer of a dinner in Italy Dami promised her?
I can’t wait to see what else you have planned. (We almost to the end now, yes?) Even if her dad didn’t see what happened, I’m sure he heard her hit the wall; Demonic hearing. (I wonder if sticking with telepathy gave them an edge...) Now we venture into Kara announcing her choice (just to be official about it...Or did they count when she said Damien's name that first time? Because I thought she was just pausing between menced words.) as well as the explanations of why her dad disapproves of her choice. (Guess he should have said – "My daughter can have anyone she wants" except Damien. This has to run so much deeper than that slicing her head before she knew about her healing powers thing.) Makes you wonder if Lucifer didn’t put this as a possible plan all along. (He does dislike Bax'liyn having him at a disadvantage.) Ooo...is that why Bax'liyn doesn't want her to be with Dami? He loses his edge if she does? But we will all get to that in good time, yes?
I know she said she didn't want Hell to know she was sleeping in his bed but didn't they already think that? I mean after what happened with Ianev (twice!) it was already assumed by all that she was well.."his" right? Ianev practically said as much. Good luck with your work. All that stuff comes first, I'm sure everyone understands about that. And I have already told you my stand on the lemon issue.
So...Kara planning on cashing in the offer of a dinner in Italy Dami promised her?
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November 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sorry about taking up two slots. I hate when it happens...but I forgot something. Don't feel bad about writing the Antichrist as the lead. I mean we all love it don't we? We ask for more. We say he is our fave. We choose him over the angel!!! (Count the reviews.) So what does that say about US...? I mean he said that he didn't want their (love) relationship to be demonic. Can the Antichrist say anything sweeter and more caring than THAT?!