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I Look forward to more chapters, I enjoy your humor and liked the names of your Chocolate Chips. Keep writing don't let the grammar and spelling Nazi's get you down and try to discourage "U"! I understood everything you wrote.
Keep writing and have fun, write to please yourself first, then if others like it thats good too!

Keep your bullets clean and your mind dirty, it much more fun that way, Luv G

Hiya
I really like how the story unfolds. It is very intersting and captivating.
Please do continue!?

I like thusnis cute and funny and has crazy/ sexy guys in it.

-.- what do you mean? under construction??? !#$@% woot, five letter cuss word.

This story is soooo cool! I absolutely adore it! Alex is such a cool character and I love the way he sees things.
Please please write some more!!

I love the idea behind this, will definatelt be reading more in the near future.

DOWN WITH THE TROLL MAY IT ROT IN THE DARKEST PITS OF THE UNDERWORLD!!!!!!
Seriously, if he didn't like the story than he shouldn't have bothered reading it. Personally I liked your story and found it easy to read. ;)

Hi there... I'm seeing heads roll in here; well, I wasn't ready for all that aggressiveness. I started reading your story because I like the main idea (summary), but it starts becoming kind of a headache to try and decipher when you change so many words for others. Such as "there" for "their" --- "threw" for "through" --- "Ether" for "Either" --- I don't care if you chop off my head or whatever, and I have already been hit by a car 3 times :D so whatever torture you have in mind for me... *shrugs* --- I just feel that if you left your story open for reviews, is because you are ready to receive constructive criticism. Yes, the idea is nice, but yes, you need to work on the eloquence and descriptive syntax of it all, or people is going to not read it, because there IS a difference between written dialogue, thought, and emotional/physical descriptions. Your story is missing the last two elements, you run from thought to motion description, then insert dialogue… and it becomes a bit bulky. Constructive criticism is not the one that only praises the good points, but the one that helps you improve your skills, and I do hope you improve them, because then your story, when polished, will be great and will get much more attention.

Laaerie

Hahahaha i love your carecter.. Hi's so funny!

Please update soon this chappie is soooo delicious but way too short.