rate_review Reviews

Saw one of your posts on the forum talking about this story and so I thought I would take a look at it, and I'm really glad that I did, as I passed it over quite a few times while scrolling through the archives. I have to say that I really enjoy your tone and style throughout this tale. It's refreshing, not too bogged down with detail and prose, but with just enough descriptors to convey not only settings, but the internal conflict and turmoil within your main character. That you've set the entire story within the realm of the dream world is also unique and innovative and most definitely not cliche. I believe one of your previous reviewers mentioned it, but I'll just echo what was written -- the use of the dreamworld is such an interesting way to explore the deep-buried desires and longings within your main character's soul (or psyche, I suppose, if you want to get Freudian about it), and I like how you navigate your way through each scenario, and how the intensity grows and shifts with each dream and setting. Oh, and of course, the sex scenes are extremely well-written, steamy, and, well, perfect, of a caliber that I'm not used to seeing in most erotica stories. Just as a side note, and then I'll end it here, this tale calls to mind the 17th century philosopher, Rene Descartes, who wrote a bit here and there about dreams and their ability to seem just like real life. This is definitely an interesting tale, and I will be looking forward for an update in the event that another dream comes to you!

This story is comming along nicely. I am interested to see where it goes. Very good cliffy at the end- It makes me wonder who the person is who came out of the stall next to you two... And I am also wondering what will happen with the fiancée. I asume in the end he will have to choose between Josie and her. Good work, keep it up. ^_^

Beautiful writing, intriguing plot...I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this, as well as looking around at your other works. I really like your writing style, everything flows smoothly and the slight psychological twist using the dreams pulls you in right away. Looking forward to an update. Keep up the good work.

I am really impressed and am always looking for an update! Usually a story is so PWP that it almost gets repetitive, and most plot-based stories are tough to follow. I have only read one other true story that got my attention as well as this one did. It's also tough to find men that write in this style and with the precission of a true writer. You really stand out and hope to see more great stuff in the future!

Wow. This is my first time reading a story like this, but I found that I enjoyed every word of it! I can't wait to see your later chapters.

Very good. A very intriguing idea, and your characters are excellent.

Wow, that really was a bombshell! You totally threw me with that chapter. I expected something much different...probably a lot more cliche, too. But cliches turn me onto a lazy reader. Props for keeping me on my toes.

Well, now I don't know who to cheer for. I'm as confused as your characters are. Awesome plot device, giving the fiancee more depth. I started seeing her as "the other woman" and not Josie...I believe Josie was, too. She's actually (in a small way) starting to remind me of Scarlet O'Hara. You know, using manipulations to get what she wants so that she won't be alone. Josie's manipulations are less calculating and more emotion driven, but she has the same "I deserve him more" mentality that Scarlet had.

I really have nothing to add on the technical end of things...your grammar is near flawless.

Anywho, thanks for another great chapter. I'm really excited to see where this goes.

I hardly ever give detailed reviews...I mostly just say I like the story and ask for more updates. But I'm pretty impressed with your writing, so I thought you deserved a lengthier review.

This is a really well-layered story. If you take it at face value, it is basically about sex. Peel that away and you find deep characters and an even deeper plot. The premise that dreams and fantasy are a reflection of our secret wants and desires creeping into our reality is quite interesting. It's a very psychological spin that I didn't expect (unless I'm reading too much into things).

Also, you've managed to successfully use sex as a way to develop your characters without ruining the plot. Not easy to do. Some stories on this site (excluding a bunch of very well-written ones) get so bogged down with sex that it's hard to remember what they were about. Each chapter features your main character in a sexual situation with Josie, but I took away more from the chapter than just some nicely written smut. I think that is the mark of a good writer.

Before you start asking yourself if I'll ever shut up, I'll end this quick. I look forward to the next chapter and hope this review wasn't a waste to read.

Thank you for sharing you story!

Great as always!:)

Suzie

That was a terrific update! Keep it up!