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August 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thank you so much for the update, even though it feels incomplete something is better than nothing right? Besides, I can't complain since I have been waiting for an update on LPH for so long that this is enough to keep me going until the next chapter....I do wonder though, what's up with the dog(s) it's cute and disturbing at the same time, oh well, thank you and I keep up the good work please! ;}
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July 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
^_^ I am so glad I found this story! Stared reading it yesterday, and I love it so far~ Max is adorable, and Kasan is so yummy~ <3 I can't wait to read another chapter and see how the First Meal goes~ xD
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July 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i like this story, but i'm having some thoughts while reading it. please please, i mean for it to be constructive. after all it is /your/ story, and you're the boss.
it's a little difficult to keep concentrated for a few reasons. the really daunting one is that Max is supposed to have a Phd. and be a linguist, and have traveled to many weird and exotic places.. and in the situation he's in now, (albeit I get the whole "overwhelmed & totally out of his element" element - tails and ears of huge men can leave a fellow rather cross-eyed and confused..), but I can't help feel he's not referencing practically /any/ of the traits that should come to him naturally in a situation equaling "fish out of water surrounded by huge cats". I think it's a little glaring. I just can't help but think that he'd be trying to cope more rationally... but then.. he /has/ been locked away on a far away planet filled with a species known for it's 'emotional wreck' approach to dealing with situations outside of their grasp........ *sigh* I think I just negated by own suggestion... bah.
secondly, and this is personal opinion, it reaaally drags things out a little too much when there are two main pov's and when switching from one to the other you go BACKwards in the story to re-hash what has already happened with the other's pov. There is so much of this in these types of stories, and I can't help (really can't help) skipping a LOT of parts just to get on with it. I'd like to offer a few theoretical suggestions: Instead of going back and writing the scene that just transpired "over" again via the second pov., I think it would work as well to continue pretty much from where the last scene ended and keep moving forward with the plot/story. the character can always reference back to a key moment, but doesn't have to re-play the whole ordeal, since the reader (if they have any peas between their ears) can imagine/empathize what said character was probably feeling/thinking 'during' that time. It's filler, and like every repeat or filler episode (either in anime/tv), we wanna skip past it and move onto the *new* stuff.
There's also the choice of not separating out their actions so completely. Explain each one's side as the action proceeds, so the rewinding effect is minimalized .... I'm really sorry to seem to picky.... I LOVE your stories, but I'm struggling with this one.. Mainly, it's a pet-peeve. I've read SO many stories where authors try to segregate sections/chapters devoting them to a single character's pov. at a time (there's an InuxSess fic I'm readin' now that's doing it too.. >_<)......... it's challenging to pull off. More often than not however, I just end up skimming over the second time around, otherwise I find myself falling asleep... keyboard face follows.
You're a talented writer though.. I've read some (and will continue to) of your other fics, the latest being "Ice Wind's Bride" and I absolutely LOVE that one.
Like I said, I hope this was constructive criticism. I can't tell you what to do with yer own fic, I just hope I can provide a little incite. I can't help but respect those that can realize their fictional visions. It's inspiring.
**hands you a BIG bouquet of DAISIES**
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[just normal comments]
I keep thinking, Kasan isn't really approaching this well either. Neither of them are actually. And here at chap.9, I'm trying to piece together what the heck happened to Max? 'Cuz the title sais he's the "Last Pure Human", but he's from earth, and didn't mention any mixed breeds (obviously the kid has NEVER had ANY contact with ANY weird human/alien mixed breeds), which leads me to think either 1. he's been in chryo for a REALLY really REALLY long time, where 'now' humans are a thing of the past, or 2. no one knows about earth ....... which is really frustrating... speculation~~~~ *groans*
heh
OTHERWISE, :) it's interesting. I like the world you're building up. Originally thought they were werewolf like, but kat'ppls are good to. Ears, tail.. hee~ XD
Poor Max.. Stubborn, in-denial, poor Max. See the light boy, see the light.
Gotta keep pushin’ on (only finished w/ chap.9)~~~~~ <3
it's a little difficult to keep concentrated for a few reasons. the really daunting one is that Max is supposed to have a Phd. and be a linguist, and have traveled to many weird and exotic places.. and in the situation he's in now, (albeit I get the whole "overwhelmed & totally out of his element" element - tails and ears of huge men can leave a fellow rather cross-eyed and confused..), but I can't help feel he's not referencing practically /any/ of the traits that should come to him naturally in a situation equaling "fish out of water surrounded by huge cats". I think it's a little glaring. I just can't help but think that he'd be trying to cope more rationally... but then.. he /has/ been locked away on a far away planet filled with a species known for it's 'emotional wreck' approach to dealing with situations outside of their grasp........ *sigh* I think I just negated by own suggestion... bah.
secondly, and this is personal opinion, it reaaally drags things out a little too much when there are two main pov's and when switching from one to the other you go BACKwards in the story to re-hash what has already happened with the other's pov. There is so much of this in these types of stories, and I can't help (really can't help) skipping a LOT of parts just to get on with it. I'd like to offer a few theoretical suggestions: Instead of going back and writing the scene that just transpired "over" again via the second pov., I think it would work as well to continue pretty much from where the last scene ended and keep moving forward with the plot/story. the character can always reference back to a key moment, but doesn't have to re-play the whole ordeal, since the reader (if they have any peas between their ears) can imagine/empathize what said character was probably feeling/thinking 'during' that time. It's filler, and like every repeat or filler episode (either in anime/tv), we wanna skip past it and move onto the *new* stuff.
There's also the choice of not separating out their actions so completely. Explain each one's side as the action proceeds, so the rewinding effect is minimalized .... I'm really sorry to seem to picky.... I LOVE your stories, but I'm struggling with this one.. Mainly, it's a pet-peeve. I've read SO many stories where authors try to segregate sections/chapters devoting them to a single character's pov. at a time (there's an InuxSess fic I'm readin' now that's doing it too.. >_<)......... it's challenging to pull off. More often than not however, I just end up skimming over the second time around, otherwise I find myself falling asleep... keyboard face follows.
You're a talented writer though.. I've read some (and will continue to) of your other fics, the latest being "Ice Wind's Bride" and I absolutely LOVE that one.
Like I said, I hope this was constructive criticism. I can't tell you what to do with yer own fic, I just hope I can provide a little incite. I can't help but respect those that can realize their fictional visions. It's inspiring.
**hands you a BIG bouquet of DAISIES**
***
[just normal comments]
I keep thinking, Kasan isn't really approaching this well either. Neither of them are actually. And here at chap.9, I'm trying to piece together what the heck happened to Max? 'Cuz the title sais he's the "Last Pure Human", but he's from earth, and didn't mention any mixed breeds (obviously the kid has NEVER had ANY contact with ANY weird human/alien mixed breeds), which leads me to think either 1. he's been in chryo for a REALLY really REALLY long time, where 'now' humans are a thing of the past, or 2. no one knows about earth ....... which is really frustrating... speculation~~~~ *groans*
heh
OTHERWISE, :) it's interesting. I like the world you're building up. Originally thought they were werewolf like, but kat'ppls are good to. Ears, tail.. hee~ XD
Poor Max.. Stubborn, in-denial, poor Max. See the light boy, see the light.
Gotta keep pushin’ on (only finished w/ chap.9)~~~~~ <3
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July 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love your story. It's so awesome I can't begin to describe it. I'm very much looking forward to your next update. I love all your characters. Your absolute brilliance in making this story shines like a star. Once again looking forward to the next update.
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July 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I Love This Story!!!
Cant wait for more.
Cant wait for more.
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July 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very enjoyable read. Hope there's more soon. Thanks for sharing.
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July 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMGSH . . . omgsh omgsh omgsh
I am actually in love with you!
It's amazing! Kasan is so lovely and sweet and Max is really cute and . . . I can't even express it i just LOVE you!!!
:D:D:D:D:D
Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease update
I am actually in love with you!
It's amazing! Kasan is so lovely and sweet and Max is really cute and . . . I can't even express it i just LOVE you!!!
:D:D:D:D:D
Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease update
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June 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm still enjoying your story... can't wait 'til you get the next chapter posted. Hopefully soon?
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June 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
great story!funny,sweet and sexy as hell! your characters are so well defined,I love them!
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June 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG! this is one of the best stories I have ever read. It is so funny, it makes me laugh aloud at almost every chapter. Well done.