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August 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
ahaha "amber eyes and resounding huff were the shokan version of ‘same to you, asshole.” i laughed so hard on that hope to see more love this story and can't wait to find out just how long max was "sleep"
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July 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh I love this story, just reread it again for the 4th time now? Lol
Oh please update soon!
Oh please update soon!
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June 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This story is...brilliant, certainly. You are an incredible author. The world seems so real, so life-like. Your descriptions keep the element of sci-fi, but it's not the plot. It's a means to an end in the plot, and it makes a world of difference. I hope you update soon; I avidly await!
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June 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This story is so good!! I so happy that Max found Kasan. I can't wait until the moment Max confesses his love for Kasan. I hope you update soon, I really want to know what happens next!!
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May 28, 2012 at 12:00 AM
It's been over six months since I've peeked in at this story and I'm glad I did! I realize you updated in January but still, it was new to me xD Anyways, I love love love this story and can't wait for more! The hilarity of Kasan and his companions' reactions to the Shokan always have me grinning like an idiot while I read. You're awesome! Stay awesome! And I hope you update soon!
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May 27, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Love this story! Please write more. I hope Kasan and Max do the mates for life ritual
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May 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I am still in love with this story. Every time I read it, I seem to like it a little bit more. I can't wait for more. :)
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May 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
chapter 34! Woot! thanks so much for the update! I'm glad to know that all is well... well, doing better on your end. :p thanks for the hard work and keep it up! i'll be cheering for ya!
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May 1, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I never thought alien creatures in fantasy can be so adorable, and now I just finish reading half of the tale. I must admit you superbly create such a marvelous and extensive yaoi-dimension in which one can extract much fun effortlessly. Well,and concordantly I do have some justified misgivings. Foremost, just the first day of their marriage can take about 200 pages, it is only natural I would dread its potentially vast proportion should be somehow aborted. Or rather I suppose you prefer to make story consist of mutiple epitomes of certain stages with sharp transitions as to keep the story in a mamanagealbe scale.
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April 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Such an amazing, incredible story!! I found this story by checking out the recommended authors on Art-Monkey's AFF profile page a couple of months ago and fell in love with it. So here are (is?) some official props to give you motivation to write more, please!
The prose is so well written and detailed. Characterisation is excellent--I love Zonta and Aosh, particularly, but the rest of the supporting case besides Kasan and Max, as well. I love the intricate world you've created for the story, including the rich backstory and little plot flourishes here and there that really give the narrative depth and colour (e.g. Max seeming to be essentially modern day human-give or take a couple of decades- who was apparently in cryo-sleep for what must be hundreds of years, the whole 'find Max's colony' bit, Max smelling like a shokan puppy, Kasan's Aunt being in the brothel on Tien'sa, Aosh feeling restricted by the technology limits in the citadel, Max translating the ancient texts etc). And I don't need to tell you that the intimate scenes are delectibly hot and steamy (just like I like it!). The sexual prose is some of the best I've read--poetic, expressive, finely executed--and, not to boast, but I have pretty high standards. (I'm actually re-reading The Last Pure Human for inspiration for my own work--it never hurts to add to the list of... 'sexy things' adjectives/nouns. So many colourful synonyms! So, thanks ;D)
But! Please don't pair Leero with Kyoru! I want to see Leero with Zonta: they would be so cute together. Some more female characters would be nice, too, maybe even a lesbian pairing (to balance things out a little with the male/female and male/male pairings already featured). And PLEASE make Kasan finally realise that Max isn't as fragile and helpless as he thinks he is! He keeps treating Max like he'll break at any moment, the silly boy. Sure Max short, but Kasan is way too overprotective. He's going to worry and fret himself into an early grave if he's not careful. Also, grammar-wise, don't be afraid to use colons and semi-colons more. There are a couple of instances where they would work better than the punctuation you've used. And I probably don't need to tell you that there are a handful of typos mixed in, not that it's that big of a deal. The narrative is good enough to be published at one of those niche market slash romance online publishers (you should look into it!), but if you wanted to do that you'd need to edit those little things out a bit first.
Conclusion: I love, love, love your work. Please update soon! I want that sappy ending, gosh darn it! Declarations of love! Promises to Join! Human colonies saved and happy! Androcles and Cleo having a litter of little shokan running around! Exclamation mark!
The prose is so well written and detailed. Characterisation is excellent--I love Zonta and Aosh, particularly, but the rest of the supporting case besides Kasan and Max, as well. I love the intricate world you've created for the story, including the rich backstory and little plot flourishes here and there that really give the narrative depth and colour (e.g. Max seeming to be essentially modern day human-give or take a couple of decades- who was apparently in cryo-sleep for what must be hundreds of years, the whole 'find Max's colony' bit, Max smelling like a shokan puppy, Kasan's Aunt being in the brothel on Tien'sa, Aosh feeling restricted by the technology limits in the citadel, Max translating the ancient texts etc). And I don't need to tell you that the intimate scenes are delectibly hot and steamy (just like I like it!). The sexual prose is some of the best I've read--poetic, expressive, finely executed--and, not to boast, but I have pretty high standards. (I'm actually re-reading The Last Pure Human for inspiration for my own work--it never hurts to add to the list of... 'sexy things' adjectives/nouns. So many colourful synonyms! So, thanks ;D)
But! Please don't pair Leero with Kyoru! I want to see Leero with Zonta: they would be so cute together. Some more female characters would be nice, too, maybe even a lesbian pairing (to balance things out a little with the male/female and male/male pairings already featured). And PLEASE make Kasan finally realise that Max isn't as fragile and helpless as he thinks he is! He keeps treating Max like he'll break at any moment, the silly boy. Sure Max short, but Kasan is way too overprotective. He's going to worry and fret himself into an early grave if he's not careful. Also, grammar-wise, don't be afraid to use colons and semi-colons more. There are a couple of instances where they would work better than the punctuation you've used. And I probably don't need to tell you that there are a handful of typos mixed in, not that it's that big of a deal. The narrative is good enough to be published at one of those niche market slash romance online publishers (you should look into it!), but if you wanted to do that you'd need to edit those little things out a bit first.
Conclusion: I love, love, love your work. Please update soon! I want that sappy ending, gosh darn it! Declarations of love! Promises to Join! Human colonies saved and happy! Androcles and Cleo having a litter of little shokan running around! Exclamation mark!