rate_review Reviews

I love this story!!!!

Just found this - WOW, this is great! You're a very talented writer! The story is quite imaginative and captivating. Looking forward to an update!

You know, you write very well and your imagination is quite, hmm, fecund, in the old fashioned sense of the word - and I mean that to be flattering! However, you do make the occasional grammatatical or otherwise word-usage mistake that makes old school purists like me cringe a bit (do they not teach the difference between lay/lie and their different forms anymore?) Your other errors are probably editing oversights in proofreading (e.g. "whole" when you meant "hole"), but the lay/lie thing is consistent throughout your writing. Given the frequency it would appear in *adult* subject matter, that is unfortunate. Still, the delightful light touch and wicked characterization keep me consistently hooked so I feel like a curmudgeon to complain.
This original story is facinating. I particularly like Max's quite reasonable response to his situation - although I can't help but think that his professional - and childhood - training would have had him attempting to communicate/decipher Hinta a bit sooner. Still, it's only been two days, much of which he has slept through, so I'll concede on that point.
As in another email regarding your treating Miroku as "small", I find myself objecting on behalf of my gay friends who "bottom" everywhere; somehow, it challenges their masculinity in a way that makes me sad. On the other hand, in your most recent chapter you had Max neatly evading his pursuers; I'd like to see you building on that competency, and anything else you can throw in to assuage the poor boy's ego. Damn it, there are compensating advantages over pure bodily strength, and while it may take a young man used to holding his own size-wise some time to recognize it, it seems to me your Max (as well as Miroku) is wise enough to seek out any advantage he can find!

Do post again soon to whatever of your stories; I'm an aged deviant recently returned to the academic cradle (law school, this time) desperately seeking diversions...

Thank you Thank you Thank you for updating. I've been wondering when you would update. Please update soon I really love this story.

yeah well i can't wait for the second part of the first meal chapter. This story is so damn cute i love it!

Poor Max - he's evaluating everything that is happening in terms of becoming a sex slave. Of course, because of the langauge barrier and Kasan having his ass contributes to that conclusion...lol He really has talked himself into hysterics. Hmmm...a secret fantasy of Max's...where perhaps he is the one 'having his way' with a female sex slave or in a whore house come true...lol...no wonder he's freaking out!! Yup, he's not in starring role he had in mind if that's true - he's on the receiving end instead as the 'Girly Guy'. I really enjoyed the contrast between what Max thinks is happening and what we learn is really going on through the other characters from their speech. It's just great!! I hope you make your May 31 deadline and all goes well for you. Thank you for sharing what you have written so far; waiting for the next chapter is just part of the fun - waiting gives us plenty of time to try and imagine what Max is supposed to be doing once the gathering starts!

i love it!!!

I have truely loved your story so far! its ecxiting and awesome fun! Please write more soon as Im will be waiting to know what happens to Max and Kasan! and all the other freeking huge cat bastasds that want to rape Max's skinny pink ass! LOL...

it was very thoughtful of you to post espeially with everything you seem to have going. poor Max...first he thinks he was handed over to Leero now he's suspicious about the Uncle.

Aaaargh. Too little, but funny. Another week? Can't wait.