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for Territory Slaves

by SierraLuna

schedule May 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Have a feeling you're buttering us up for a fall...

So much sweetness just has to mean something awful is coming.

Of course, we still haven't seen a good side of Mirje...
schedule April 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I've owed you a review...

I've enjoyed all the chapters of torture and was ashamed to admit it. Now that plot is back in the works, I breaking down the barrier.

Well done.
person Ryan83
schedule April 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was fantastic! i've really enjoyed it..keep up the good job
schedule April 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 3
Hi, SierraLuna,
You do update fast! Thank you:)

I like this fic more and more, you did develop a good plot. All the events are interesting; torture and rape scenes are really well written and pretty scary. I could feel Jahhan's despair there. The guy was a well-known actor, right? That is why he was sold out against his will? He never would imagine entertaining people through being tortured, though.

You seem to have a tendency to not give descriptions on main characters, hehe. I got this feeling that Rylam will be one, but, ones again, no idea about his looks, age, mannerismes. If you absolutely unable to insert that into the story, then a short page of character descriptions in the beginning could be a good idea. I don't like those description pages in stories, but would rather have that than nothing!

Overall I really like it and would like to see more:D
schedule April 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
yeah!!! a new chap....i love tha fact that he wants more to be with his punisher....than others....hopin for more
person JaceQuin
schedule April 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It must be good if Jace actually gets off his lazy butt to review it. Therefore you should take this little message as a compliment even if I can't say why I like it particularly. I just think it's good. *cuddles it* Please write more?
schedule April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 1
Hi, SierraLuna,
Pretty good first chapter. You don't seem to have anything else posted so, just in case: WELCOME:)

This chapter did get my interest, it's complex and introduces many characters.
I would like to get some description on Jahhan because I can't visualize him. What does he look like? How old is he? According to the chapter he could be anywhere from 30 to 50.

This story doesn't have M/M, M/F or any other indicators. So, is it all about torture? I read predominately Slash but would read a good M/F story:)

Will be reading the next chapter to find out more about Jahhan's ordeal.
Thank you

schedule April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter one is fascinating - and so well done.

You've created a world that resonates with turmoil and emotions.

Really looking forward to subsequent chapters!