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Yay! Sorry. I'm glad the story is following its basic lines... everything is good for very little time and then BAM! something happens =D I'm just sad that Sex didn't have time to bitch Vladimir out in Russian =P Looking forward to the next chappie very much.

Go for it Chippy!!! The girls are cool!

My imagination runs wild about the little fangs ganging up with the little (wolf-)fangs.

My poor Hades! I'm tempted again to send someone over just for him; someone who want's him as jukebox and is not Liam.
A lot of baby-fangs, hmm - Hades as babysitter. As shepherd he should be used to it and he rised Liam several times. Uncle Cilly. One babyfang just for him (when grown up)? No? I want him to be happy!!! And where was he when mayhem started out? Surely he didn't got that far after Sex dismissed him from sight.

This day isn't Sex's at all and the pack is a little odd. Let him rest a while and get X on screen and Armor. I miss the big monkey.

Thank you for the lovely chapter! Go on!

Let me start by saying that I really do enjoy reading your story and I have been lurking here for quite some time reading all three volumes. I particularly enjoy the more plot driven second and third volumes so it was great to get another plot chapter (not that I have too much against vampire bunnies but you can have too much of a good thing). I also very much like the character of Sex in this volume, he has been allowed to mature remarkably compared to volume one and I think he is really the best of the brothers. :)

Anyway I have a couple of things I wanted to point out, one of which has been bugging me for a while.
1) Matiu is not a maori name, it is the maori version of Matthew. It is common for a european name to be altered but it is not traditional maori. Also the moko is not a tattoo. It is made by carving into the skin with a type of chisel and then applying ink rather than simply injecting ink like a tattoo. A full moko is rather uncommon these days (it is quite painful) and usually applied in the traditional way rather than at a tattoo parlour (unless you are in a gang). It is a sign of wisdom and respect to have a full moko so I am sure your New Zealand lycan (well in touch with his cultural heritage) would have got it the traditional way.

2) This is not about Caramel but Cinnamon and I am only bringing it up because you have discussed publication. The medical information on hypermetabolism you use is overkill and on the slippery slide to plagiarism. It is overly difficult to read for a lay audience and distracts from the plot. I would suggest that you could cut the technical jargon and just give a nice summary. Only a very bad doctor (or a research scientist) would throw so much technical information at a patient.

Anyway I hope you don't mind the criticism.
Keep writing more good plot :)

wow ok. when did Claudia go to the doc for the ultrasound? im loving the whole Vladimir problem; he is quite pushy, no? so the trio is slowly burning out, huh? please please dear god dont kill them off. ill be really pissed...kudos XOXO

Sweet ACTION! And I don't mean the kinky kind either. Mm.. I love seeing the Brothers in action. I love this chapter a lot. Claudia is PERFECT. She's so considerate, but not possessive.. and so understanding and sweet. Damn, I can't think of a single bad thing in this chapter. You're amazing, truly.

I finally caught up to you! Wow... there is no way I can put into words how much I love this story. You have managed to keep me on my toes and interested for 111 chapters. I don't think I own any published book series that have kept me interested for that long. It is truly a masterpiece that you have written here. I bow before you and eagerly await the next chapter.

XOXO
DemonAkasha

Chapter 21 - Did I say that I thought Vladimir would like Sex in that way? Because I did say something like 'I bet Vlad is going to be Sasha's rival' in my head. Oh well. I MEANT to say it. But pfft. Sex loves Claudius so much NO ONE could be his rival. No one. But poor Sex! Getting even sadder because he dominated Vladimir. Aww. He should of stuck around or something. Maybe he can hear from Vlad that he didn't hurt him. Sex asking Armor to rape him shocked me. Is it safe to say that Xavi would have a fucking fit? I think so. Maybe not even a fit. Maybe he'd go Azrael on everyone. Old Az.

Chapter 20 Alpha

Wow!
The coming war with Britta is freaking me out!!
Sex being freaked out, is FREAKIN me out!
Whew! Very intense chapter has left me...
yes... freaked out!!!
Thanks!
R

very sad chapter and cute too !!! definitely love this story...

Will you ever cease to make us cry? I hope not. The mood of the chapter was perfect.

To Vlad - 'Tebje nelsja wuisuiwatch Sashu. Ponjal!' (You are not allowed to challenge Sasha. Understood?!)

Haley as top-dog is gross. Somehow Vlad doesn't seem to be the type easily tolerating domination from the hand of a pup. I try to keep the heat-thing in mind. Maybe Ping's surprise is a whistle, so that Haley can call for help ... just kidding.

I'm really worried who received the mysterious call from Shayne. Is there any PA left? Lanseng?

Hades wasted an excellent opportunity to rise in Sex's esteem. He should have told him about the Ferris-wheel but this way I can imagine everything I want and I want him crying, grieving and regretting; the latter involuntarily of course. I still like him. He was right when he mentioned him and William being good when together. While Liam changes him to the better, they are like a minefield. You never know where to step and when the next one is going to explode. The brothers have to be very careful around them.

Poor Sex. That's the problem with crime and blood. Once started, you have no choice but to dig deeper and deeper into in. Whatever good intensions you may have, they are tainted and that's the reason why the world is runned by fire not whisdom. In the end the victors write the history books and Sex, being a vampire, may live long enough to see the chapter about him being an amicable one. I hope he gets a happy ending but first a nice lunch with X's lady and Princess Sarah-Elizabeth.

Good luck with your computer! I'm glad you didn't lost your writing spirit. Go on!