rate_review Reviews

Yes, there were a lot of errors. The most distracting for me was the run-on sentences, and the flow. The flow could use some work to make the story easier to follow.

Other than those little issues, it was good. Nathan was a rather interesting character and Alex was just plain hot. I was a little disappointed that everything was happy happy joy joy at the end, but I'm sure everyone else liked it so it's not really a problem. Good job!

~C~

IlOve it! I hope you will write other exciting story too!

I have to admit that I thouroughly enjoyed this little story. I've never seen the movie of which you speak, but as a plot bunny, even my roommate had to agree it would be a very interesting senario. I think he gave in a little quickly for the whole shebang, but when passion rules the heart, no one can predict how one may give in to it. Very nicely done.

I liked it, a great idea you adapted. I very much enjoyed finding this- a wonderful read !!!

Nice story, much hottness. But you might want to take a closer look at the spelling, either run spellcheck or have a reliable beta go over it, its full of spelling errors. At first it wasn't so noticable but it got pretty distracting towards the end. Running spellcheck and one more careful readthrough should take you about 20 minutes.

And yes, I think you could easily add at least one chapter, one more encore for these lovely men. And by the way, thanks for writing about men. As a fourty-year-old I really do get tired - if not icked out- reading about ansty teenagers.

Oh my goodness! I love this story... ummm you are REALLY leaving it as a one shot are you? *whines* I want more!!! You're a good writer.. I'm assuming hugh was supposed to be hug? Anyways I loved it!!

I really like this story. The idea of the auction was nice. It sort of leaves you wanting more.