rate_review Reviews

This was really well written. Liked it a lot!

Short but intense.

One of the best.

poor hans ;___;

Well, this is my first review...ever...haha but I really wanted to give you some feedback. I have read quite a few of your stories, and with each one I have become more and more impressed with your writing skills. This "short" story was a wonderful read for me. You have an amazing talent, especially when it comes to slavery stories. You have a way of reeling your readers in and hooking them with a titanium line to your characters. I really liked the way you switched from the "master" to the "slave" with each chapter. It gave the story even more depth, delving into the subconcious and exploring the thoughts and feelings of both characters, shaping a story that captured my heart and brought tears to my eyes. Another thing I thought was very well written was the ending. I know from personal experience that endings are one of the hardest things to write in a story -- basically the ending makes or breaks the story. Without a good ending, even the best plot and the most amazingly formed characters become dull and meaningless. This story was ended just at the right place; the conflict being solved, but the plot still had room to breathe, if that makes sense.
Well congrats on another well written masterpiece and I very much look forward to reading more of your works!

Another excellent story, I truly love and admire your style.

Personally, I liked the Alan/Cedric dynamic best. The way Cedric dropped down before him like he had done it a thousand times was wonderfully done and I liked the feet/leg kissing. :3 Think you'll ever write a one-shot for those two? ...though I think I liked them because they were both adults at this point. XD

this so beautiful!!!!!!!

is like a neverending story!!! in time HANS will take Alan place!!! And the cercel will start again. i hope you will write a squel!!!

This was definitely another poignant piece. Definitely felt the empathy and private redemption through the characterization. I feel that the Brother story takes this further... and I'm excited to see where it goes.

I was just starting to get into this story...I hope this isn't the end for Hans and Cedric, it seems like only the beginning. Thanks for the great writing!

Ooooooh, short and good :)
Kudos!!

~Spiritxx