rate_review Reviews

Sorry I didn't review the second chapter. That was a lovely little short story! Cute ending. And you did well for English not being your first language. One thing, though, besides some grammar mistakes and such, was the paragraphs' running together in Chapter 3. I'm guessing you know how to do HTML since the other chapters had that done, but if you put a

at the beginning of every paragraph and a

at the end of every paragraph, that will separate them. That's just my little piece of advice! Keep writing! Practice makes perfect. :o)

This story has an interesting start. Both of the characters are oh-so-cute and innocent. I like the way the story is developing, though it's sometimes a little hard to follow with the switching point of view. Good start, though, and I'd like to read more!