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May 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
...and I just reviewed twice. I realised I forgot a couple of words, so I fixed it, but I wasn't logged in when I reviewd the first time, so I don't think I can remove it. Sorry!
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May 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
...Wow.
You had me totally FLOORED with this chapter. It was VERY intense (worth the '++' addition, I might add), VERY descriptive, it had that touch of realism that added some extra spice...
...Really. FLOORED.
To be honest, I saw that you had updated, and I told myself that I'd read after a few hours of sleep. Unfortunately, that update turned out to be a Siren's call that could not be ignored. Darn you for keeping me awake and making me read this beautiful installment of your work when I should be sleeping! XD
One more chapter to go. What more can be revealed? By the way, exquisite job!
You had me totally FLOORED with this chapter. It was VERY intense (worth the '++' addition, I might add), VERY descriptive, it had that touch of realism that added some extra spice...
...Really. FLOORED.
To be honest, I saw that you had updated, and I told myself that I'd read after a few hours of sleep. Unfortunately, that update turned out to be a Siren's call that could not be ignored. Darn you for keeping me awake and making me read this beautiful installment of your work when I should be sleeping! XD
One more chapter to go. What more can be revealed? By the way, exquisite job!
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May 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg!! this chapter was so good!!! i am so happy they finally got together.. good job. i love this story!!
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May 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
As per usual, your latest chapter is wonderful and a real delight to read - seriously, you're making me sound like a broken record here!!
I think this one was your most descriptive chapter yet, and I felt that you brought the relationship between Leif and Catlyn to a more intense level. Also, the fact that you smoothly married the humour from the very start of the chapter with the gravity and tension at the end - well, that's obviously another testament to your writing abilities. I loved how you ended the chapter quite simply, and I can't wait for the next installment!
Regarding your concern about 'Acquiescence' being a sequel... well, while I've obviously read 'Revelations' beforehand, I believe that you've written 'Acquiescence' in such a manner that it stands distinctive, largely because of the perspective change, but also because 'Acquiescence' has its own personality - I'm not sure how to explain it without sounding like a rambling idiot, but to me, I feel that the fact that Catlyn, Leif and Rion have aged is reflected in the overall feel of the story. And for what it's worth, if I HADN'T read 'Revelations', this story of yours would still be extremely enjoyable AND followable. Brilliant through and through. ^_^
I'd really like to know what's the deal with the therapist - is it still just some mundane visit thing Catlyn's got going on, or is it a continuous foreshadowing of how things eventually end?? And while I'm eagerly waiting to see how 'Acquiescence' concludes, I've got to admit that I was pretty bummed when I read that you were planning only two more chapters... *sigh* I guess that saying is true then - all good things must come to an end. Though in your case, I'd definitely substitute 'good' with 'great', 'wonderful', 'excellent', and... well, you get the drift.
Hope you update soon.
x Annie
P.S. Hehe, I stand by my 'promising' comment in my last review. In my opinion, your plot is promising in that: a) it's appears it's going to satisfy all of us Leif/Catlyn fans out there!, b) it's cohesive - not random events strung together for no apparent reason whatsoever, and c) it's shaping up to be a warm and a thoroughly enjoyable read.
I think this one was your most descriptive chapter yet, and I felt that you brought the relationship between Leif and Catlyn to a more intense level. Also, the fact that you smoothly married the humour from the very start of the chapter with the gravity and tension at the end - well, that's obviously another testament to your writing abilities. I loved how you ended the chapter quite simply, and I can't wait for the next installment!
Regarding your concern about 'Acquiescence' being a sequel... well, while I've obviously read 'Revelations' beforehand, I believe that you've written 'Acquiescence' in such a manner that it stands distinctive, largely because of the perspective change, but also because 'Acquiescence' has its own personality - I'm not sure how to explain it without sounding like a rambling idiot, but to me, I feel that the fact that Catlyn, Leif and Rion have aged is reflected in the overall feel of the story. And for what it's worth, if I HADN'T read 'Revelations', this story of yours would still be extremely enjoyable AND followable. Brilliant through and through. ^_^
I'd really like to know what's the deal with the therapist - is it still just some mundane visit thing Catlyn's got going on, or is it a continuous foreshadowing of how things eventually end?? And while I'm eagerly waiting to see how 'Acquiescence' concludes, I've got to admit that I was pretty bummed when I read that you were planning only two more chapters... *sigh* I guess that saying is true then - all good things must come to an end. Though in your case, I'd definitely substitute 'good' with 'great', 'wonderful', 'excellent', and... well, you get the drift.
Hope you update soon.
x Annie
P.S. Hehe, I stand by my 'promising' comment in my last review. In my opinion, your plot is promising in that: a) it's appears it's going to satisfy all of us Leif/Catlyn fans out there!, b) it's cohesive - not random events strung together for no apparent reason whatsoever, and c) it's shaping up to be a warm and a thoroughly enjoyable read.
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May 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm sorry....I didn't mean for it to sound snobbish or anything, its just usually when I'm on this site I normally find the really bad fiction.
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May 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*WARNING! WARNING! LONG WINDED AND IN-DEPTH REVIEW AHEAD!!!*
It's been a while since I've seen this updated, and I must say, I'm pleasantly surprised.
Where the beginning of the story is concerned, worry not. Looking back on the other chapters, I find that the therapist character is what gives your story the ability to stand apart from 'Revelations'. The interaction between the therapist and Catlyn make it seem like "Revelations" has long past, and that it was a part of Catlyn's life that was forever closed. The reason why it doesn't seem to stand apart, to my observations, is that your readers who have read this story more than likely have read "Revelations". I read this story over again, and it does stand apart from "Revelations". The latter just seems more like the figurative springboard for this story.
Morning afters are always fun to write, and yours was enjoyable to read because of the tension that you'd have to use a jackhammer to get through.
I must say once more that your grasp of characters (not to mention how to use them effectively) is fantastic. Leif, who I feel I know less about now than after "Revelations" (refer to point above), is a lot more mysterious, and is great at frustrating Catlyn, which adds more internal tension for her and really shows off her character. Delphina and Preston are great mood-lifters, though they'd pretty much have to literally slap Catlyn in the face to get her to realize what's going on in her head (they're doing a great job of slapping her in the face figuratively, I might add). Rion adds just a little touch of the past into Catlyn's current life, which either adds tension, relieves tension, or both. He did both in this chapter (which did little to redeem Catlyn's image in Del and Preston's eyes), which was quite a laugh.
The last section of the chapter was...shocking, to say the least. I could actually feel the worry Catlyn had and the need to be around Leif. It was cliché, though it worked out extremely well, VERY emotionally charged, VERY tense, and EXTREMELY descriptive and well-written (I can't even say that without sounding fake, it REALLY was that good). I had to say it was probably the strongest point in the story, in my opinion, a milestone in their relationship.
Now that there are two chapters to go, I wonder how everyting will come together. I have to say, though...
Welcome back, great chapter, and keep at it! I'll be waiting patiently for your next installment, and keep on truckin'! You're doing a great job!
It's been a while since I've seen this updated, and I must say, I'm pleasantly surprised.
Where the beginning of the story is concerned, worry not. Looking back on the other chapters, I find that the therapist character is what gives your story the ability to stand apart from 'Revelations'. The interaction between the therapist and Catlyn make it seem like "Revelations" has long past, and that it was a part of Catlyn's life that was forever closed. The reason why it doesn't seem to stand apart, to my observations, is that your readers who have read this story more than likely have read "Revelations". I read this story over again, and it does stand apart from "Revelations". The latter just seems more like the figurative springboard for this story.
Morning afters are always fun to write, and yours was enjoyable to read because of the tension that you'd have to use a jackhammer to get through.
I must say once more that your grasp of characters (not to mention how to use them effectively) is fantastic. Leif, who I feel I know less about now than after "Revelations" (refer to point above), is a lot more mysterious, and is great at frustrating Catlyn, which adds more internal tension for her and really shows off her character. Delphina and Preston are great mood-lifters, though they'd pretty much have to literally slap Catlyn in the face to get her to realize what's going on in her head (they're doing a great job of slapping her in the face figuratively, I might add). Rion adds just a little touch of the past into Catlyn's current life, which either adds tension, relieves tension, or both. He did both in this chapter (which did little to redeem Catlyn's image in Del and Preston's eyes), which was quite a laugh.
The last section of the chapter was...shocking, to say the least. I could actually feel the worry Catlyn had and the need to be around Leif. It was cliché, though it worked out extremely well, VERY emotionally charged, VERY tense, and EXTREMELY descriptive and well-written (I can't even say that without sounding fake, it REALLY was that good). I had to say it was probably the strongest point in the story, in my opinion, a milestone in their relationship.
Now that there are two chapters to go, I wonder how everyting will come together. I have to say, though...
Welcome back, great chapter, and keep at it! I'll be waiting patiently for your next installment, and keep on truckin'! You're doing a great job!
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May 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It's been a while since I've hopped on this site - but despite the time, this remains one of my favourite fics out there. I'm really enjoying what you've done. Ignore my earlier doubts... the past chapters have more than demonstrated the brilliance of this fic! Yes, it's not stylistically like 'Revelations', but the new structure/format you've adopted is every bit as enjoyable - and 'Acquiescence' has its own kind of charm to it.
Besides your fic's well-developed characterisation, great dialogue and deliciously promising storyline, I think that what is most appealing about your writing is its honesty. You don't make fuss or pull out unnecessary party tricks. You write simply, insightfully and most of all, humanly.
I thought this chapter was a riot, and a drunken Catlyn was fascinating to read about because it revealed another side to her character. And as always, you’ve used the dialogue and social exchange between characters (e.g. Leif and Rion; Leif, Preston and Cat) to effectively develop and give insight into the various relationships between said characters.
If I have one criticism at all, it would be that you haven’t updated in a while!!! ^_^ A story like this deserves to be told, read, enjoyed and praised – so please continue to update!
x Annie
Besides your fic's well-developed characterisation, great dialogue and deliciously promising storyline, I think that what is most appealing about your writing is its honesty. You don't make fuss or pull out unnecessary party tricks. You write simply, insightfully and most of all, humanly.
I thought this chapter was a riot, and a drunken Catlyn was fascinating to read about because it revealed another side to her character. And as always, you’ve used the dialogue and social exchange between characters (e.g. Leif and Rion; Leif, Preston and Cat) to effectively develop and give insight into the various relationships between said characters.
If I have one criticism at all, it would be that you haven’t updated in a while!!! ^_^ A story like this deserves to be told, read, enjoyed and praised – so please continue to update!
x Annie
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April 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I just need you to know that I absoluetly adore this fic. It just exceeds all of my expectations!!!!! I cant wait for more.
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April 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
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Hope you're not leaving Catlyn and Leif for long! I adore their story. Can't wait for you to tell it.
<3you!
Hope you're not leaving Catlyn and Leif for long! I adore their story. Can't wait for you to tell it.
<3you!
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April 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh, don't be nervous! You're very talented, and your sense of perspective is amazing. Your characters have a lot of personality (Delphina and Preston, especially. They have as much character as your leads), and your dialogue is realistic and down to earth, not to mention Catlyn's internal thoughts. I'm sure everyone at one point or another has had a conversation to themselves like that.
Another great chapter, I might add. It's not every day we see Catlyn letting herself go like that, not to mention the short-and-civil-though-highly-charged interaction between Leif and Rion during the party. Preston and Del are always good for a laugh, especially the way those two nearly went Pavlov's Dog on Leif. It's good that you mingle a bit of comfortable laughter with the high tension between the triangle that Catlyn denies is there.
Keep it up, and don't lose heart! You've got something great going here, and nothing can tell you or I different!
Another great chapter, I might add. It's not every day we see Catlyn letting herself go like that, not to mention the short-and-civil-though-highly-charged interaction between Leif and Rion during the party. Preston and Del are always good for a laugh, especially the way those two nearly went Pavlov's Dog on Leif. It's good that you mingle a bit of comfortable laughter with the high tension between the triangle that Catlyn denies is there.
Keep it up, and don't lose heart! You've got something great going here, and nothing can tell you or I different!