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have you ever though about making a side story for kaemon?
that would be an intresting story.
also what language were they speaking at first if both made an effort to learn the other's language.

Wow..this was wonderfully written..are you thinking of writing a side story about Yasunari and Kaemon? It would be would make a great story...well just curious. Anyways, thanks for writing this and sharing..i really liked it! 8D

Hey,

Loving your story but you can't leave the story like you have alot wasn't explained or told, you have left alot of secrets untold, please continue with this or add more to other chapter to explain about the abusive brothers and some kind of punishment for them.

Blaise

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. This story has truly touched me. The characters were wonderful. With each chapter I was completely captivated. From the bottom of my heart, I thank you for sharing. I hope to read more stories from you.

Wishing you the best,

rAiNwAtEr

Aw, I couldn't stop reading till the end. Well done, it was a brilliant read, I loved it. Full of angst and suffering, joy and happiness. Just how I like it, lol....

Good luck on your new work...I'll have to keep an eye out for it!

So you did have this story up before and re-posted, just wanted to say that I really enjoyed your story, I am so glad the two main characters were able to fall in love and I just wish Naruhito could make Brennen’s family pay for the way he was treated by them. But he is away from them and can now live happily ever after with him. Good story and I really enjoyed, I read all the chapters again in one sitting,thank you.
Jewel

Oh man poor kid. I thought the kid was hurting himself like the monk in the Da Vinci Code, boy was I wrong. No wonder he wants to be a monk! Oh you are doing a great job of making us feel for the kid. I hope somebody kicks some sibling ass.

what an f'd up family

Whoo hoo, you didn't mind me pointing out your errors. I always get a little afraid to do so, in case anyone thinks I'm flaming their story. I'm not. I just can't stop myself from helping when I come across a story that I love. If it does become annoying, please tell me....
Until then, lol....

Real love was rough, it was *suppose* (supposed) to hurt.

Uisdean had pulled him to him in a hug and that was the last (time?) he had tried to repay the kindness.

Last time he had fought, it had taken many *a moons* (either take away the 'a', or take away the 's' off the word 'moons') before he was able to sit,

and the time before that, they had whipped him so deep that Uisdean had been afraid there was going to have nerve damage in his back. He didn’t want to repeat the punishments. (This part of the sentence can be written in either of two ways...
Uisdean had been afraid there was going to be nerve damage in his back.......or
Uisdean had been afraid he was going to have nerve damage in his back

“Where are we going?” *He* (he) asked.

The hall opened into a *large* (larger?) hall. It was decorated with (a) painting of trees with pink blossoms caught in the wind.

“Wouldn’t a room be more comfortable?” *He* (he) asked,

With every step the back doors of the castle were getting further (away?).

“Aye,” he muttered, trying hard to keep from *shuttering*. (Do you mean, stuttering?)


Poor Breannan...he has some weird brothers! But, at least they seem to not be interested in his lower regions. I expect that's because they are too busy getting him to pleasure theirs? Where is the chamberlain when you need him? Hopefully, he is running off to go fetch Prince Naruhito....

another fantastic chapter! Thank you for this update!