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for Kings and Queens

by Aya

schedule December 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I feel for you, finding yourself unable to write. I, on the other hand, can only write easily when I'm depressed enough to want to kill myself. Then the writing sucks because I don't care enough to do a good job. I'm curious to see where this story is going, it reminds me of "Politically Correct Fairy Tales". The humor is similar. I'll keep checking back on your work, its fun to read.
person SunaoTsuji
schedule November 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Chapter one wasn't too bad. The coupling seemed rushed as was the events around it. Otherwise, I'd like to read more so that I know what I'll be reviewing about. :D
schedule November 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hahahaha! The second chapter was real funny. Especially the end since Peter and Lans were fighting and the weird lady came out of no where. The possessiveness of Lans over Peter was hilarious and the humor is appreciated.
schedule November 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Rofl. Wow the amount of "distractions" I missed. XD -rewinds- Wait.... I can't rewind. lol Maybe re-read? Haha. I can't wait to see what Peter will do. Oh the anticipation! :D
schedule November 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
lol i was wondering wat half and half was. made sense at the end of the chapter and it was funny how Peter was dumb founded at the end of it all. now how did Lans figure out tat the princess was for daddy only? unless he's been there before or has somehow known of the vulgar king's dirty secrets? -shurgs- still, i want to find out how Lans and Peter got away. so off to the next chapter!
schedule March 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Aw CUTENESS!

"not even voyeristic pixies" <- LOVE that.

HEART.
person Tifsuz
schedule March 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sequel! I look forward to seeing where this goes!
person PyTerato
schedule March 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Cute! Love it!

~C~
person PyTerato
schedule February 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That's adorable. I didn't find it corny at all. There's a thin line between corny and poetic and luckily I think this was more on the poetic side of the spectrum. Really sweet and the pixies added a nice magical touch to the beautifully painted scene. If I hadn't read the beginning note, I would have never guessed it hadn't been through a beta. I absolutely loved it!

~C~