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for Saving me.

by Shippa

person Bounty
schedule February 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is the first time I've ever reviewed anything so you had better well review. Seriously, I'm dieing to know what happens next! Update!
person PyTerato
schedule February 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This sounds like a very interesting concept. Love the story idea and that Sasha sounds interesting as well.

My only problem was with the grammar. There were a few spelling mistakes - not all that many, actually - and you kept switching from present tense to past tense. Fix up those little problems and I suspect you will have a real keeper here. A good story. Good luck!

~C~
person Rorarin
schedule February 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
An interesting start. Please update!