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I very rarely read on the site, but one of my admins recommended your stories to another user and I came to scan your list. The concept for this story struck me as interesting and I had to take a moment to read it. I have to say, I'm finding myself wishing there was more. Not having read any of your other works, I don't have a point of reference for the character, so I'm enjoying watching this unfold. I hope at some point you return to the site and to this story as I would love to see how it ends.

LOL -- So what are you trying to say Kanashii? You mean you would be more than a little intimidated if Laurence Martel were to show up at your doorstep looking for a past? :D
I love the premise for this and I thought you were wonderfully creative about it too.

Martel is actually quite scary in the beginning. Without a core, he is heartless and I get the feeling that is why he kills the girl in the beginning. It is because he longs to feel something, anything, because he has nothing to go on and the emptiness is driving him crazy. The only thing he knows, is how to kill, so that is what he does. It’s a frightening idea, yet very provocative. Excellent writing really!

Sara’s feelings for him are so ambivalent too. She is scared of him, knowing full well what he is capable of, yet she cannot help but love her creation. After all, he was the reason she was writing in the first place. I love all the deep-seated emotions and psychological undertow that is traveling through this story. Truly it is fascinating.

The only thing that concerns me is Sarah’s lack of emotions and feeling for her ex-boyfriend Christopher. I mean, she seems to take it all in stride, like it’s no big deal that a man she has had a long relationship with, is being chopped up in her bathroom. I mean, if it was a stranger or an intruder it would be one thing. I also could understand if she really disliked Christopher and wanted him out of her life and was afraid. I didn’t get that sense though, even though he was abusive.

I love how Sarah and Laurence are becoming closer though. The love scene in chapter ten was beautifully written. I can understand Sarah’s hesitation in letting Martel brand her and giggled when she fretted about not being as masochistic in real life as her heroines. She let him do it anyway, which was a true gesture of trust. I hope this is a good thing, since Martel is rather dark. Yet with each chapter she writes, she is giving him more of a soul, so hopefully he will turn into the man she needs. :D

Lovely story Kanashii! I hope you continue it. :D

You haven't updated in a while. I'm really interested to see what kind of man she turns our "hero" into, if not a blood thirsty sociopath.

I finally got around to reading this, and I have to say that I really enjoyed it -- even did the big pout and sigh thing when I reached the last chapter and realized that there wasn't any more left to read. But I really like where you've taken this story so far. I've seen this scenario taken on a few times before, and I've definitely pondered it myself, the what-ifs and implications of my muse coming to life and tracking me down (I only wish...), but I love the twist that you've taken with it, with Martello having virtually no memory of his life or his former self. I think it's particularly touching watching him evolve, and seeing his desire to leave behind his life of cruelty and violence, even though he is capable of it. The repititions of "I want to live," too, are really moving -- I love the way you capture the varying degrees of emotion and vulnerability in his tone. And, of course, having Sara write the memories and create Lawrence's life is also fantastic, so different and imaginative than other tales that I've seen. I look forward to an update!

Oh, and glad to see that you've got an LJ. I've been pondering getting one myself, but I shall def check out your entries.

I am very much in love with this story. Some of the things you write just resonate with what every writer (no matter how professional they deem themselves) feels when writing about characters. I have a similar situation in that I have two characters who have been with me for what feels forever. I couldn't imagine not knowing them.

Wow, it's getting hot! I can't wait to see what craziness is in store for those two! :P

Hey, I really love your fanfics! :D
I think maybe making one of your female leads a virgin would be really interesting!

i need more, what did he do to her? I'm dying to know!!

Moremoremoremore!^^

Whew-ee!