schedule
August 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very nicely edited! Much more readable now. You are an excellent writer and I look forward to new stories.
schedule
February 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this is really hard to read with the paragraphs all bunched together like that... if you separated them into smaller paragraphs and double spaced it maybe, you'd have more reviews... cuz ur imagery is really good, actually. =)