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for Birth of the Minotaur

by JustS

person gamu
schedule August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow. You did a great job with this and I think it was a good call for you to take liberties with the masturbation scene and by bringing in just a table and not a wooden cow suit for her. ^_^
person Wolfgurl
schedule May 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
pretty good.
person Jacob Ryder
schedule February 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Brilliant story. I'd love to see more by you.
schedule January 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You need to continue this. I mean it. ^__^ So goodluck with that! I'll be watching for you! And waiting to review!
schedule January 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Interesting story. Like what you're doing with the myth. Can't wait to see the next chapter.

Would you consider more paragraphs, and double spacing them? It just makes it easier to read.
person Agaib
schedule January 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very impressive, I wasn't disappointed. No real serious grammatical errors that I could notice. On the topic of improvement I would only suggest practice. Your flow is impressive as it is, but like all skills, it can be improved. Good work.