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February 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Really like this story, can't wait for more. I know you are busy but don't forget about us.
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February 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE????????!!!!!!!!! PLEASE?!!!!!??????
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February 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
"Aside from that, I read this fic all in one go. The grammar is way off--- like seriously, you'd die with bad grammar grades in College English classes (take this from someone who's passed with nothing lower than 95's in all her english classes-- im not trying to be so damned mean, but it's true. You really need to work on your grammar). But the plot and story is really good. Good enough to the point where you have me hooked. And I really like Milo and Luke and I think you're doing a good job at the story... you just need to learn proper sentence structure, is all." -GOTD
I read that review and I just felt the need to say something about it. I think your sentence structure is great in this story. It may not be classroom appropriate, but it seems totally in character. The voice of Milo is awesome-- one of the biggest strengths of this story, I think. In creative writing it's not always important to be perfectly correct; just understood.
And I was an English major in college (specialized in Creative Writing). :P
I read that review and I just felt the need to say something about it. I think your sentence structure is great in this story. It may not be classroom appropriate, but it seems totally in character. The voice of Milo is awesome-- one of the biggest strengths of this story, I think. In creative writing it's not always important to be perfectly correct; just understood.
And I was an English major in college (specialized in Creative Writing). :P
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February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Bah, you want to know ONE thing that really annoyed me about this fic? ... At the end of EVERY damned chapter, we have an author's note complaining about ONE THING or the other. Seriously. O.O Stop that, its hella annoying. Just write that damned chapter. If you have something to comment on, then comment on it... don't complain so damned much. -Sigh-
Aside from that, I read this fic all in one go. The grammar is way off--- like seriously, you'd die with bad grammar grades in College English classes (take this from someone who's passed with nothing lower than 95's in all her english classes-- im not trying to be so damned mean, but it's true. You really need to work on your grammar). But the plot and story is really good. Good enough to the point where you have me hooked. And I really like Milo and Luke and I think you're doing a good job at the story... you just need to learn proper sentence structure, is all.
All in all, don't get mad or upset at this review. This isn't really an "omg you're doing great so so so so so so so damned great and im completely and totally in love with you now," review, but it's also not a "damned... you really really suck, I hope you die in hell for making me waste my time on this," kinda review either.
You're good, but you need work. And I will totally come back to read more when you update! :P
--- GOTD
Aside from that, I read this fic all in one go. The grammar is way off--- like seriously, you'd die with bad grammar grades in College English classes (take this from someone who's passed with nothing lower than 95's in all her english classes-- im not trying to be so damned mean, but it's true. You really need to work on your grammar). But the plot and story is really good. Good enough to the point where you have me hooked. And I really like Milo and Luke and I think you're doing a good job at the story... you just need to learn proper sentence structure, is all.
All in all, don't get mad or upset at this review. This isn't really an "omg you're doing great so so so so so so so damned great and im completely and totally in love with you now," review, but it's also not a "damned... you really really suck, I hope you die in hell for making me waste my time on this," kinda review either.
You're good, but you need work. And I will totally come back to read more when you update! :P
--- GOTD
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February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
BTWWWW! I forgot to tell you that Im a huge fan of your other fic. Blood Oranges. LOL Sorry... but I loved it... I figured I'd just let you know that so that I didn't come across as a complete asshole.
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February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
yeah he finally grew some balls!
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February 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I just wanted to say that this story is amazing. Seriously. Amazing. Your characters are very realistic. I can't wait to see how it turns out.
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February 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
My god... what to say? I love this story. Fuck, I love all your stories (I've been reading them for hours, you saved my day) because really, you are one fantastic author. Unfortunatly I'm too sick to think straight so this is all my poor head can come up with. I'll give you a better review next time hint-hint ;)
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February 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WOOT!! Awesome. Now more please : )
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February 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 29
It may have been the shortest chapter in all the history
of the AFF but, I SO NEEDED IT!!!!
Milo needed it!!! LUKE needed it!!! The the student body needed to
see it!!! HA!!
Thanks,
R
It may have been the shortest chapter in all the history
of the AFF but, I SO NEEDED IT!!!!
Milo needed it!!! LUKE needed it!!! The the student body needed to
see it!!! HA!!
Thanks,
R