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March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey there, I recently found this story and just finshed chapter 14, the letter.
You shouldn't put yourself down about short updates, not getting on with the story etc. An update is an update and I think you've done a great job of keeping the flow of the story. There's nothing in there that feels unnecessary. I'm happy that I'm a latecomer so I don't have to wait for each new part (yet), though, because I'm terrible with wips. Guess this story still is a wip so I can only hope you'll finish it soon, because I really really enjoy it. Good language, good pace, I'm shamelessly soaking up the plentiful angst and h/c, and while the serial killer scenario and the two sons falling in love maybe isn't the most "real" or likely one, this is fic after all. It doesn't all need to all that likely and we read it because it let's us go someplace we'd never see otherwise. Your characters are their own, interesting persons, and Milo's POV I can believe - the way he sees and handles things as a 16 year old put in extreme circumstances. Thanks for the read!
You shouldn't put yourself down about short updates, not getting on with the story etc. An update is an update and I think you've done a great job of keeping the flow of the story. There's nothing in there that feels unnecessary. I'm happy that I'm a latecomer so I don't have to wait for each new part (yet), though, because I'm terrible with wips. Guess this story still is a wip so I can only hope you'll finish it soon, because I really really enjoy it. Good language, good pace, I'm shamelessly soaking up the plentiful angst and h/c, and while the serial killer scenario and the two sons falling in love maybe isn't the most "real" or likely one, this is fic after all. It doesn't all need to all that likely and we read it because it let's us go someplace we'd never see otherwise. Your characters are their own, interesting persons, and Milo's POV I can believe - the way he sees and handles things as a 16 year old put in extreme circumstances. Thanks for the read!
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March 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Don't tell me that's the ending, please please keep going!
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March 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
W00T!!! Awesome update!!! But man, that was a mean cliffi!! ;;
I wonder if Milo really asked to put Luke's father to death?!? O___O
He looked shocked.... hummm I can't wait to see how things will turn out! Things Seems to be getting better! :p witch I think is a good thing! ^^
Plz update again asap!!! I can't wait to read more! *hugsX3*
I wonder if Milo really asked to put Luke's father to death?!? O___O
He looked shocked.... hummm I can't wait to see how things will turn out! Things Seems to be getting better! :p witch I think is a good thing! ^^
Plz update again asap!!! I can't wait to read more! *hugsX3*
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March 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
"Milo?"
Nothing.
"Milo...did you ask them to kill my dad?"
Holy crap. I choked on my pepsi when I read that.
Very good chapter. This explains a lot of the hang-ups I had with Luke's development.
Nothing.
"Milo...did you ask them to kill my dad?"
Holy crap. I choked on my pepsi when I read that.
Very good chapter. This explains a lot of the hang-ups I had with Luke's development.
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March 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 30
You better believe it :) All hits and reviews are well deserved because this is a one awesome story. I like the plot very much and the execution of the plot is excellent. Another thing I like is a very naturally flowing dialogue; also you have just a right amount of character's thoughts and feelings mixed in.
You better believe it :) All hits and reviews are well deserved because this is a one awesome story. I like the plot very much and the execution of the plot is excellent. Another thing I like is a very naturally flowing dialogue; also you have just a right amount of character's thoughts and feelings mixed in.
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March 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
No, no. Thank YOU.
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March 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow. That's all I have to say. *dies waiting for next chapter*
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March 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 30: milo didn't ask them to kill his dad! he just didn't!!!!! UPDATE SOON PLEASE!!!
ASOTA
ASOTA
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March 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh shit, that is one hell of a cliff hanger lol. Luke is sooo incredibly amazing, I dont know what Milo would do without him. Did I mention that I love your stlye of writing, your voice for the story? Its so fucking original I cant see to get my head around it lol. Thanks for writing like that :). Great chapter, update soon please!!!
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March 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 30
Very satifying chapter.
Coming out is HARD!!! Loving and caring and learning how
to love and care is damn hard!!! I completely understand
Milo's actions during his previous dilemma, and his subsequent
actions showed his true feelings. Luckily for him Luke is trying
really hard too, at everything!! Wonderful chapter!
You get an A+++ from me dude!!! HA!!
And I've NEVER given one of those before!!!
(Everyone could use a beta, AKA, someone to read behind you to clean up the
obvious and then question other ideas/thoughts/sentences.)
But writing like yours is to be cherished as sometimes it's absolute poetry. Really.
That's how I feel and that's what I will testify to in a court of law!!!
Thanks,
R
Very satifying chapter.
Coming out is HARD!!! Loving and caring and learning how
to love and care is damn hard!!! I completely understand
Milo's actions during his previous dilemma, and his subsequent
actions showed his true feelings. Luckily for him Luke is trying
really hard too, at everything!! Wonderful chapter!
You get an A+++ from me dude!!! HA!!
And I've NEVER given one of those before!!!
(Everyone could use a beta, AKA, someone to read behind you to clean up the
obvious and then question other ideas/thoughts/sentences.)
But writing like yours is to be cherished as sometimes it's absolute poetry. Really.
That's how I feel and that's what I will testify to in a court of law!!!
Thanks,
R