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I have to admit, the penguin joke got me.

So there are two muffins in the microwave, and one says, "Man, it's hot in here," and the other says, "HOLY SHIT! A TALKING MUFFIN!"

You've probably heard that one before.

I like the way this is written in Milo's casual tone. Few authors pull that off.

Lovely lovely, I'll be watching for updates.

I had to remind myself to come back to review this chapter 'cause I didn't have time after I read it, but I remembered. ^^ Lovely, hot stuff there; several kudos!

im going to keep reading this. its good. i like it. good job.

I started reading chapter five a week or two ago, and something about it seemed different, and I clicked out and meant to go back, but time... time... you know. I haven't forgotten the story. I also started a couple paragraphs of Blood Oranges, curiousity got me. I stopped, since the writing was as good as in this one, to go back and read it. All I will say, is I appreciate your work as up in the top couple percent on this site.

Chapter 5- I think what bothered me was how focused on himself Milo was, and how the nurses acted. I didn't want to not like him. I've been there, where he was, in a hospital waiting for word on someone injured and I sure didn't think about what they called me or what to do next, shake hands or wipe off germs. I think I forgot I existed at all and went through motions I don't even remember. But then, he and Luke aren't really close, either. So, ignore all that, I'm just explaining why I stopped reading. Memories... bad ones. Also, proffessionals have passed psych courses, they understand both sides even in horrible abuse cases, and don't alienate people who need help, not even the ones doing the abusing.

I didn't know what poirogs were, neither did hyperdictionary, meaning I still don't. Food. Close enough. God, I really didn't mean to pick this chapter apart. But damn, you write so well, that I guess I appointed myself mentor. You can fire those, btw. ^-^ And this is just a story you're posted for free, so corner cutting is allowed. I'll shut up about it.

All in all, I did like this chapter, I liked how Milo kept feeling guilty and responsible and I smirked at his explaination of how they're not gay....

But...ch 6-- I seriously loved. Too cute, these two. And I had this feeling Luke really needs help, and maybe Milo needs to be part of something again... and they can sort of rescue each other.

ch 7- What? I didn't say it! I'm concentrating on the story. Shit, that's big all right.

ch8- angst, she says. man, that's extreme maximum angst. I had goosebumps, no kidding. Wow. You did this so well, this breakdown of Milo's and its so real and understandable and like I thought in chapter six, this isn't just one pathetic kid, its two. Yet, this isn't kid stuff they're dealing with. You are so far past cliche. I got sucked out in chapter five, now I'm sucked in again.

Let me say again that you have real talent, especially with characterization and now I give you the angst award, too. Have I thanked you, lately?

ch9-- tucked in like a football...etc. dang, you're good. So, therapy. That should be interesting. Milo is really trying here. I really like him again. And he did get Luke talking. Was it his fear of the violence? Or that Milo needed him to? I hope its the latter. Milo is so real I can almost see him. Lukes still alittle hazy, bordering on surreal, but then again I haven't gotten to all he's been through yet. I just remember alittle about the letter coming up and it's bad. A very moving story so far, beautifully written. I think this is the one hundreth review. You deserve more. ^-^

Ch 10--Hmmm, you sure know a lot more about therapists offices than hospitals. Not to draw any conclusions from that. ^----^ Great chapter, touching as hell and very believable. I like Claire, how she stays calm. I like how Milo is still not putting any labels on himself or the relationship, he's taking it as it comes. He really isn't pathetic like I first thought, he's just traumatized. Luke seems to be grounding him and making him think. This keeps getting more interesting.

It's quite inside, one woman waiting with a magazine- that should be 'quiet' inside.

You asked for help with a new summary. I tried.

Milo's still grieving over the murder of his father, when he comes face to face with the guilt-ridden Luke, who happens to be the son of the murderer.

or...

How could the son of a serial killer and the son of one of his victims need each other? Or help each other...heal each other...or love each other?

Oh, wow! I just found this today and I am so pissed off at myself for not finding this sooner. I just read ALL 17 chapters and this is a "ABC" story:

A= AWESOME
B= BEAUTIFUL
C= CHARISMA(yes, this fic is extremely charming and I'm loving it!)

This is a deep, well-written, out-of-this-world ORIGINAL and I am completely spellbound by it. Please update soon.

Haaa... fantastic chapter. Milo is just awfully cute!
Thanks for the read. ^^

okay... um... you MUST update like... now... because that was the most amazing chapter ever. and i half wanted to cry and i half wanted to squeal with happiness. blah... UPDATE!

What a freakin' sweet guy!