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ch19- great in bringing out the differences between Milo and Luke. Luke is insecure and changes as his trust develops. His sense of self is lacking- as it should be after what he went through. Milo is much more stable, doesn't change so fast, more secure and all- and change knocks him over. Again, well done. As usual.


(Look, I'm not about to hang a rainbow manner outside my house or anything, -should be rainbow banner?)

HEY. I read that review from bambi4real, and er, well...er, she's right. Except I'm not a 'she' - She (i assume?) did help me with my story, so I won't get my feeling hurt too badly. ::grin::

I absolutely love this story, you did an excellent job on it! I read this all in one sitting, and your characters are so original and believable at the same time. Great chapter, update soon please!!!

I never did comment on the last three chapters, I meant to, but ::hangs head:: forgot until I saw you posted a new story. I was thinking that Milo needs to go easier on Luke, you know respect what he wants more, and then... you made him think just what I was thinking. Not to let him get all meek. And the equal thing. I was really impressed with your insights into their minds, and had no concrit to offer. It was real and Milo is a caring, if fucked up guy and Luke is right on too. The way you left it, no welivedhappilyeverafter, but we will keep trying our best cuz we love each other enough to try... warmed my heart. (a way not to say the word touching again)

Here's what I see, your story is very good, your writing is great and you are introspective - and I think the people in your RL are lucky to have you. Now, on to another story while I have time. Oh, and ch 19 - soon? Love-M

Chapter 18

Love the honesty in your characters!!!
The way you portray the internal thought
process is so right on!!! The pain mixed in
with blame/shame is hard to read but you balance it
well with caring and affection (And touching! Which I
love!)

Thanks,
R

Hey, how'm I supposed to catch up if you keep updating? No, I'm not complaining! Oh and I'm so glad to have helped with the summary. You made me happy that you used one of my ideas. So, chapter 11, first, just to mention that what makes you such a good writer is the small touches, that draw readers in. Not many people would think to really look at Luke sleeping, they would be writing the next scene in their heads, but you stop and notice how normal he looks. Bringing attention to just how messed up and scared and sad he usually is. Kudos for this. I hope you realize how rare that is in writing. I will actually try to copy that about your style. If I can. The whole chapter was this way. It was excellent. They seemed so real. Even Luke is sort of taking shape now. Great chapter, with the two of them, I guess I have to use the word 'touching' again. But it was. Very touching.

and when in chapter 12 Luke said he was sick of crying, I liked him alot more. I don't know why. It also hit me that Luke may have already been crushing on Milo way back in court. He's so calm about how he feels, which is about he's calm about.

"I have to! They'll like...repossess you or something if I don't!" -- all that angst, and then this sentence had me spitting blueberry soda on the screen. 'gay' 'sixteen' ::smirk::

Jess is one of those people I love and hate. Since I'm never sure in those kinds of situations (groups I don't know) if I want to be invisible, or want someone to sort of share my plight with. Anyway, I think Milo's a trooper for even going to that meeting, and I understand why Luke thanked him. Very well done.

Touching, touching, touching. I'll have us both sick of that word. But its true. You have me wanting them to be happy and secure, but that letters coming. So, on to the next chapter.

That sick ass bastard!! Now that I've read the story, I understand this letter more. Poor Luke to put it mildly. That is one of the cruelest things I ever read. That's saying alot, too, considering what I write about. So, I went to chapter 15. And almost cried. I don't cry much, either, but when Luke was trying to leave...well, I came close. I was ' hurry up, Milo, and tell him its okay!!" God, I freaked worse than your characters did. But then, when you turned the tables, and had Luke comforting Milo for a change, I thought, they're gonna make it. Yup. Sex or not. I'm glad you made them wait. There is such thing as grief sex. I don't remember much about it, though.

Oh and uh... just to add to your old, snicker worthy one line joke reviews, two guys come upon a dog licking his balls, one says 'wish I could do that' the other says 'you probably could, but you should pet him first.'

be back. Thanks.

the ending to this chapter was amazing and adorable and everything warm and fuzzy. keep it up! i love this story!!!!

I love these boys!

Well, you had me at "A Stage and a Bus,"
but this story is crazy good!!!

As messed up as these two are you've got their feelings
just right! Caring, listening, touching, eye contact, all
contribute to a real sense of their pain and their
relationship. Luke and Milo's characters are wonderful,
in a really new, and painful way. Shrink scenes make me shrink
myself, you did a terrific job keeping it real.
Great writing!

Thanks,
R

It was kind of funny - I read your story a long time ago and then sort of drifted from AFF. I came back yesterday and read all the updated chapters (it was one of my favourite original slash fics) but never had an account to review. And of course, the one author I read since my return is the one that reviews me... bahaha.

I know, I know. I don't reivew as much as I should.

But, just to recap: I love your story and your characters. My favourite part of it all would be the realism of Milo's tone. And, I also really like your pen-name... haha.