rate_review Reviews

Nice. An update would be welcome.

Dude -- get a beta. Your dialogue is practically stale. It has no flavor to it, it's just dull. And also work on your spelling, and your description. Your summary looked like it could be a great story, but everything else is so off that I had to give up reading it after the second chapter. And that's a real shame, because I thought that it could have been interesting to read if it wasn't so hard on my eyes and brain.

nother good chapter. Good work update soon :)

This is realy good so far cant wate for more :)

Oh now the fun will begin.

This is looking to be good. Abusive boyfriend.. baby to start apocalypse... I'd say you have a great set up here.

Your story is breaking the "show not tell" rule. Instead of spelling out everything, space out the revelations and allow your characters' actions to speak for themselves. Finally, get a beta to help with the dialogue--it's really bland right now.