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Wow. Just like the last story, being in Oakes head, is simply awe-inspiringly amazing, like the noticiing eyes and then realizing you stared too long. That's only one example of many. Just the way he thinks, and how you've captured so much personality in so few paragraphs. How do you do that? You're good. Better than good. Great wouldn't be insulting, would it? ::grin:: So what if I have missing your other story angst going on. Just had to stop after two chapters to say all this. I'm content. This is promising to be as good as Doorways and Windows. Definitely.

Went to this story while waiting for wip update. Finished Ch 8, blowjob on the bus.
Sometimes I wish I was a guy. Or could be a guy for a while. There's the prostate, sure, but hey - I've got G-spots. Blow jobs however... on the bus... *guh*

My birthday is august 12th also...o.o

I love this story!

Your an amazing writer, I've only read this and 'Stage and a Bus' so far, but I'm ready to read your other stories...

Looking forward to more,

~Jesse

Okay this story wasn't what I expected, I read through it all in one sitting, and honestly I enjoyed it. You had me going there when he just up and disappeared. My heart was like pounding and aching at the same time. From their first meeting to there last words, it was all good.

I am so glad things worked out well. Very cool story.

I will not be able to give you an adequate review, because there is not enough time nor enough space in the universe. This was THE. BEST. THING. I. HAVE. EVER. READ.

I could have sworn that Aspen/Cai was an angel or something in those earlier chapters, sent to comfort Oakes. Then I kinda did think he was crazy. But I loved him anyway. I fell in love with both these characters so fast it made my head spin. I cried when Aspen had run off. I cried so damn hard! Like never-ending tears and I couldn't stop the mantra in my head that kept going 'there's still more chapters, he HAS to come back'. Also, the scene with Turin, was fucking HEART-BREAKING. I was terrified that you were going to turn Oakes into a masochist...which for a little while, I guess you did. Thank god it wasn't permanent.

Then you had him appearing in the auditorium and my heart almost exploded. In the next chapter, when Oakes leapt off the stage to go after Aspen, I was listening to some song, and right as the new chapter loaded, the song crescendoed and I fucking CHEERED! I was reading this in my bed and I sat straight up and yelled at the top of my lungs. I was so so soooo happy for Oakes and I would have been mad had you not made him chase after him.

I don't know what to say for the rest of the story. There's too much amazingness and my brain can't remember all of it. I wish I could like just record a short speech and send it to you, cause that would be so much easier. Lol, AFF.net should look into voice-recorded reviews.

Anyway, as a new slash writer, let me just say that I thought I was an okay writer, but after reading yours, I feel so fucking inadequate. But that's not a bad thing. It just means I'll have to keep working hard to improve my writing. So in a way, I thank you.

Sorry for the long review, but I know that when someone leaves me a short review like "Uh, that was gud, hot smex, keep going" I get so frustrated, cause I'm writing a fucking STORY and they can't spare more than a sentence. Oh well, I hope you like long reviews.

Also, for the summary of Blood Oranges, you should just write "This is the best fucking thing you'll ever read" but I understand that that's not exactly eloquent so nevermind. Lol, thank you for this story, and I am also reading your other stories as well, but I may not be able to review as well as this because after finishing it, I feel so emotionally drained. But that's a good thing. Your writing affects me so much that I can't think clearly! I wish I could do that.

Oh well, this is the end of the unnaturally long review, I just want to say keep writing or else I may go crazy. Also none of your ideas are cliche AT ALL. Like for "Doorways and Windows". I have NEVER seen that kind of plot. The people who say it's cliche are dumbasses who don't know what the word cliche means.

OH! Sorry, one more thing. You truely mastered the style of writing thoughts. Like the way you write how someone is thinking the second they think it and then you also incoporate their feelings, actions, and words into that? AMAZING! Okay, I'm done. You rock!

I just started reading your story "Blood Oranges" and it is pretty good. But, I have read to chapter fifteen and you have yet to describe what the main character looks like. I am forced to make my own mental picture. My suggestion to you is to describe the looks of your characters sooner so people will know what the characters look like.

Wonderful story!

Love your portrayal of Oakes
roiling emotions after so many trying
events.

Love your Aspen and his feelings.
Something about both of them takes me back
to my past and rings so true.

Thanks,
R

This was a lovely story. I haven't read such compelling and static characters in a long time. Most times the characters seem different at the end of the story than they were at the start in original fiction on sites such as these. But you showed true talent; the characters in your story only changed from the beginning to the end because they changed each other. I am deeply impressed. I had to read this in two sittings. Just as Oakes decides Aspen isn't getting away from him *this* time, I had to go to work. And I thought about your story while I was at work and couldn't wait to come back to it.
So thank you, for posting this, for being patient and persevering through to the end.
I, for one, appreciate it.

This was probably the single most erotic, beautiful, sad story I've ever read, and that's saying something. I always cry when mothers die, and this was not an exception. I think it may very well have been the first time I've cried when reading something like this, though.
I don't know how you're able to write such wonderfully sensuous scenes, but you are, and do I envy your ability! I'm going to send this link to everyone I know who might be interested in it.
It was a long time since something touched me like this. Thank you. Really.
xox

Loved it!