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for I Broke Down

by eroburn

person sloth
schedule April 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
you did say we could cheat!:)
person sloth
schedule April 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i'll be checking for a new chapter everyday so hurry it up!
person rosiel
schedule April 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
opps! i forgot there had to be 7 words for each review! sorry!T_T now i made myself sad
person Laaerie
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I review! I review!!!! me cannot type slower!!! sorry ero, but you will have to deal with my fast typing forever... and ever... and ever... *snickers* I liked the cliffie!!! evil evil evil.... arrgghhh... medicine induced review! brainless hahahaha... HUGS!

Laaerie
person alexa87
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Finally Dude is going to find out that
Mark isn't really a 12 years old kid.

Man, the kiss was hot.
person Kiira
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Alright, I'll review you! ^.^ hehe, um, yes I'm glad you updated so thank you and finally the two of them kissed and finally; the dude said the thing about him thinking that Mark was 12! did that sentense make any sense? Oh well... YAY, bring us the next chap.
person rosiel
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
yay! thanks for updating:) plz hurry with next chapter. i can't wait to see mark reaction
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Shame on me, forgetting to review!!!!! well I am now!!!! YAY!!! I LOVE this story!!!!! OMG the kiss was sooooo hot!!!! I might go read it again!!!! I can't WAIT for more!!!!! PLEASE update soon!!!!!!!!!
person teeta
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh my ... sweetest cakes! And they say my Uri is oblivious!

Hahaha, the kiss scene is hot but I bet you read it in all the reviews above mine. What can I add to the things all thhose people said? Definitely that it has been very long, the waiting for it to happen. And maybe finally ... no, I don't believe that you make Mark say he is not 12. I bet he'll be shocked and keep quite about it! And Joe, like the lumbering idiot he is, will still think Mark is 12! This chapter was evil, evil I tell you. I read the kiss scene in the morning and had to stop myself from grinning like idiot for the entire day at work. Believe me, there is only so much biting the inside of your cheek can do! And now it's hurting like bitch. Oh, but my revenge will be great! You just wait and see for yourself! You just wait and see! Ha!

Ok, hurry up with the party scene and I would rather never read that one scene that is getting closer by every chapter. Poor Mark!
person Nekosune
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay! An update! *dances* Yamyams, cookies, and pocky for you, that was awsome! I really can't wait for chapter 14 now! Please update soon.