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Wow won't Joe feel bad about putting soap in his mouth when he finds out that Mark's father makes him eat soap. Are you trying to tell us something with the dreams cause they are getting more and more detailed.
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WOW, OH WOW, OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW, OH WOW, OH WOW, OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW. sorry, it was somethin done by mozart or betoveen or somebody like that. hey, maybe if you breath at every comma you'll remember which one im talkin about! ^_^ hehe! :P golly jeepeers creepers. YOU KNOW WHAT HAPPENED TODAY? SOME GIRL HAD TOLD ME SHE HAD LIKED MY SHIRT LAST WEEK AND SHE WENT AND BOUGHT IT OVER THE WEEKEND AND WORE IT TODAY!!!! SHE'S LIKE, STOP COPYIN MY LOOKS I WAS JUST LIKE, SHOVE IT UP YOURS! lol, sorry for the crudeness ^_^ EXCUSE MY FRENCH! IM SO MAD! WE COULDN'T DECIDE WHAT TO WRITE A BOOK ON IN MY CLASS AND GUESS WHAT? I HAVE TO WRITE ABOUT A WHITE GIRL WHO IS STEALING GUMDROPS FOR HER BANK FROM JEWISH ELVES WHILE A LEPRECHAN IS STALKING HER! HOW THE HECK DID WE COME UP WITH THAT?!?!?! I DUNNO. :P WELL, MY MOM MADE US SOME SOUPIE AND IMA GO EAT SOME! WHILE IM GONE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE? YOU SHALL SELL YOUR LIFE TO ME IF YOU DON'T UPDATE IN THE NEXT DAY! IM SERIOUS! AND SINCE IM GIVIN YOU SO LONG, YOU HAVE TIME TO REACT! :P WELL, ANYWHO, I HAVE LOTS OF IDEAS FLIPPO, AND ONE OF THEM INCLUDES YOU, IN A SANDBOX, BURIED IN SAND, WITH ROX, AND TOILET PAPER, SQUISHED INTO OBLIVION, MAKING YOU WRITE A STORY FOR ALL TO HEAR! WHILE I POUR MUSTARD ON YOUR HEAD AND MAKE YOU LISTEN TO A YODELING SONG! OR MAYBE A SPANISH OR JAPANESE... JAPANESE! THERE WE GOO!! AND ALL YOU COULD MOVE IS YOUR FINGERS BECAUSE A BUNCH OF THOSE NEEDLES ARE POKING INTO YOU! (I CAN'T RECALL WHAT THEY'RE FOR OR WHAT THEIR NAMES ARE)BUT BASICALLY, LOTS OF PPL DO IT, BUT YOU MUST TYPE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AND! I SHALL PUT A SPORK IN THE MIDDLE AND WAVE AN AMERICAN FLAG FROM IT! :P SO UPDATE!

Hey, you! Update!! Bye, bye!!!

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww....... *sad*. One thing, the last couple of chapter seem to have been very identical. I don't know if you're just trying to establish their world or if there is any significance to it. I love the story... it really tears at the heart... very good writing! But I'm waiting for something exciting to happen... like, when will Joe find out that Mark is gay? When will Joe find out that Mark is actually older? What's the rest of the week going to be like and what is Joe going to do at the party?

Look forward to the next update!

CHAPTER 9
Hi, eroburn ,
This is my first review on this fic. I like the story and it is well written. I've read a few about an abused little Goth kid being rescued by a rich boy, but you put this original twist on a story. So, the abused kid is a rich one! That creates so many problems and I just like it a lot:)

The innerworkings of Mark's mind are well done, he is so detached, even his dreams are out of this world. It was so sad when he walked to the plate of food, like a zombi, and just took in and enhaled the food. Very descriptive, I could really see that, sort of.

Pretty cool story

Thank you

Yay, you took it out! I wanted to review so bad and it made me sad that I couldnt! :) Me happy now! Anyways, in case I didnt type it write, its papisgirl_always@earthlink.net. Great chapter, update soon please!!!!!

Mmm...Keep it coming.

Hey I really like this story. Mark's disconnectedness (is that even a real word?) makes me want to laugh and cry at the same time sometimes. Keep it coming.

I would have reviewed sooner but my laptop went freaking crazy. Apparently I got the ONE out of a billion with the bad OS. ><;; As soon as I get the printer/scanner/fax machine [xD] I'll scan in that art. [Right now I wish I was more comp savvy.]

You always say un-beta'd but it's never bad. xD I don't even notice any errors. I like the war paint metaphor. ^^ Dude/Joe seems like he would be a good hospice worker. x_x I'm such a weirdo. That's the first thing I think of.

Ahh another good chapter. xD I'm never disappointed with your story. ^^

Ugh.. why does it keep doing that?!?! It always cuts off my review. Okay:: Real review::

I would have reviewed sooner but my laptop went freaking crazy. Apparently I got the ONE out of a billion with the bad OS. >_<;; As soon as I get the printer/scanner/fax machine [xD] I'll scan in that art. [Right now I wish I was more comp savvy.]

You always say un-beta'd but it's never bad. xD I don't even notice any errors. I like the war paint metaphor. ^^ Dude/Joe seems like he would be a good hospice worker. x_x I'm such a weirdo. That's the first thing I think of.

Ahh another good chapter. xD I'm never disappointed with your story. ^-^