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for I Broke Down

by eroburn

person laaerie (insists)
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ah, I see the dilemma here... so it only allows me to post 5 with the same nick, huh? no problem!!! I've never been defeated by a system!!! closer to having to post than you thought, huh?

Laaerie #6
person laaerie (insists)
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You know, I was also wondering just how confident is DUDE with anything! He was planning to drop the 'kid' with someone for babysitting, when he does not even know much about him?! that's also messed up!

Laaerie... siete!
person laaerie (insists)
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ah... *evil grin* bueno, esta es en espanol, nomas por joder, si alguien entiende esto que bien, si no, busquen un traductor *laughs* ya pon el nuevo capitulo!

Laaerie ocho!
person laaerie (insists)
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ah, something I've forgotten to mention, is that every time Mark wants his knife, my whole body gets gosse-bumps!!! I'm a coward when it comes to self-infliction of pain, so... ugh... yep that's the only thing that makes me nervous of this!

Laaerie.... nove! see my reviews are not even repetitive! they are constructive!
person laaerie (insists)
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmmmm.... gonna have to change nick for next one!.... tomaranaiyo!!!! motto! motto! --- muaha!

Laaerie... onegaishimasu?! *bows* - jyu!
person laaerie (insists - still)
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Molto, molto ragazza scrivere!!! (I haven't used my Italian in centuries!) per favore, scrivere un fantastico novo capitolo!

Ma... sorridere

Laaerie... dieci... Oh, man I hope I'm annoying you...
person laaerie (insists - still)
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
scusi, prima che e undici, non dieci!

Laaerie... dodici..... my brain... about to die..... can you hear it hiccup?! are you typing yet?
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 13
He dropped him! Now the poor boy has a bruised ass; wasn't he hurt enough already? I was waiting for the Dude to find out Mark's real age, and you've made a cliffhanger out of it. Good job! I wonder if Joe will beleive him, though, hehe. Sixteen? Nah! Maybe Mark should show him his tatoo, hehe! (the kitten one:)
person ~~*N*~~
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hooray for chapter 13!!! Okay, so here's my attempt to help with the compilation of reviews...
person ~~*N*~~
schedule April 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The kiss was seriously killer, and it was a very welcome respite from the constant unresolved sexual tension between adorable little Mark and Joe. Plus, I was soooo proud that Mark initiated it -- I love Mark!