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for I Broke Down

by eroburn

person LoveJoy
schedule December 18, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Please PLEASE!! I love this story Ill take anything you've got! Just give me more <3 <3 <3 Im begging you! 

schedule October 10, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Omg! Where is the rest? !  I admit that it could use some good editing, but the bones of the story ate good and I'm dying to know what happens next!  Can you email me if you have more our need editing help?  Xoxo Robin

person icassop
schedule January 18, 2015 at 12:00 AM
It is revealed! That was very good. Now I'm curious what Joe's mom has to say that seems pretty important.

And yes, please keep the chapters coming, even if it's only a rough version. Unless you don't feel comfortable with the unedited versions being made public. But thank you so much. Can't wait for the next chapter =D
schedule January 10, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Only just found this and I really like it - I could easily become addicted to this story :)
person icassop
schedule January 9, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I'm so happy you're back with this story! Love it and I especially like Mark's rather unconventional thought processes. Very entertaining! I do hope though that the age thing will finally get resolved. I'm very curious about Joe's reaction.

Thanks again and I can't wait for the rest of the story.
Happy New Year btw ;)
person Knave
schedule December 13, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I love the dynamic in your story, the dream sequences are a nice beak in the reality of what mark is going through. I keep wondering when joe will finally figure out how old mark really is what he will do. I hope you will upload more soon. Thanks for such a great story.
person Anon
schedule May 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Bit of a different story. Takes a lot of attention to follow some of it. But I like some of the sheer randomness of Mark's thoughts and Joe in this protective mother hen mode. Good story so far.
person Azrael
schedule May 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM
You do a superb job of conveying the feelings of depression in your writing. I really experience the emotions of the characters when I'm reading. When is Joe going to become aware of Marks real age? Keep writing, I want more.
person m_kren2
schedule April 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
i love the story but is a sad sad story, and is make me cry a river
person TabFan
schedule April 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I'm loving this story! I can't wait to find out what happens when Mark's dad comes back! Will Joe ever realize Mark's in his school? Do they not have any classes together? Love to get hidden chapters e-mailed to me! In case aff.net hides my e-mail, its tabjancar @ gmail.com. Remove the spaces.