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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh, write more. I want to see where this is going with Ryan and if that Brandon asshole is ever going to stop hating people. (He sounds like such a whore)
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June 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
another fast update ^_^ and the story just keeps getting better and better. I'm still half a sleep and so is my reviewing ability =_= But all I can say that I truly enjoy and this Ryan makes it more interesting; forsing Tim to open up more to the world. Can't wait for the next one! And this Michael person...hmm.. wonder what's gona happen when he's out.
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June 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi ^__^
No, I wouldn't like you to spoil your story! Never, much as I love spoilers (I start reading books from the end :P and pest Kolgrim to tell me what's going to happen next, hihihi). Anyway, no, I don't want you to tell me anything, I love guessing just as much! I can always check later how right or wrong I was ^__^
Ok, the review now. This chapter had three levels for me, representing three sides of Tim's life. First the school where he hides the fact that he's a genius (I should have guessed it, after all he did manage to keep up with his stalking! And made it almost unnoticable!) and tries to hide himself from everyone, Ryan included. An interesting tactics, nod. The second level, him and the therapist (and his mom, I suppose) who is trying to get him out of the cocoon he's trying to hide in. The first semi-honest conversation in months, wow ... The third, twisted level being Brandon who is like an axis for Tim's world. Tim's world does revolve around Brandon, it's visible in his attitude like when he imagines Brandon in a car and people watching and admiring him. Brandon is probably quite a regular guy but Tim looks at him through his admiration glasses and that's a very dangerous attitude. First off all, it leads to self-depreciation (idk if this is even a real word ^__^ ) and we have Tim-in-a-cocoon who thinks he's nothing compared to his god. Then we have a problem of lack of purpose when the said god shows he doesn't give a shit about his admirer (and it can lead to suicidal thought like in the last chapter). Thirdly, the protectiveness Tim still has for Brandon - and him wanting to hurt Michael for doing whatever to Brandon - that's a very dangerous attitude, in fact, possibly leadning to crime (and I believe with his genius' mind, Tim would be able to plan something nasty for Michael). Definitely, he needs to get rid of Brandon from his life, otherwise it's only going to get from bad to worse for Tim. That's why I'm cheering for Ryan and hoping he'll be persistent enough to get through to Tim, past his shell.
Ok, that's another philosophical review =_= but I enjoyed it ^__^ As usual, I can't wait to see where it goes and I'll be waiting for the next chapter with impatience! Thank you very much for this chapter and ... yup, I loved it very much ^__^ See you next time!
*hugs* teeta
No, I wouldn't like you to spoil your story! Never, much as I love spoilers (I start reading books from the end :P and pest Kolgrim to tell me what's going to happen next, hihihi). Anyway, no, I don't want you to tell me anything, I love guessing just as much! I can always check later how right or wrong I was ^__^
Ok, the review now. This chapter had three levels for me, representing three sides of Tim's life. First the school where he hides the fact that he's a genius (I should have guessed it, after all he did manage to keep up with his stalking! And made it almost unnoticable!) and tries to hide himself from everyone, Ryan included. An interesting tactics, nod. The second level, him and the therapist (and his mom, I suppose) who is trying to get him out of the cocoon he's trying to hide in. The first semi-honest conversation in months, wow ... The third, twisted level being Brandon who is like an axis for Tim's world. Tim's world does revolve around Brandon, it's visible in his attitude like when he imagines Brandon in a car and people watching and admiring him. Brandon is probably quite a regular guy but Tim looks at him through his admiration glasses and that's a very dangerous attitude. First off all, it leads to self-depreciation (idk if this is even a real word ^__^ ) and we have Tim-in-a-cocoon who thinks he's nothing compared to his god. Then we have a problem of lack of purpose when the said god shows he doesn't give a shit about his admirer (and it can lead to suicidal thought like in the last chapter). Thirdly, the protectiveness Tim still has for Brandon - and him wanting to hurt Michael for doing whatever to Brandon - that's a very dangerous attitude, in fact, possibly leadning to crime (and I believe with his genius' mind, Tim would be able to plan something nasty for Michael). Definitely, he needs to get rid of Brandon from his life, otherwise it's only going to get from bad to worse for Tim. That's why I'm cheering for Ryan and hoping he'll be persistent enough to get through to Tim, past his shell.
Ok, that's another philosophical review =_= but I enjoyed it ^__^ As usual, I can't wait to see where it goes and I'll be waiting for the next chapter with impatience! Thank you very much for this chapter and ... yup, I loved it very much ^__^ See you next time!
*hugs* teeta
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June 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story is too good to stop now!!!
i will go crazy if I don't get more.....XO
i will go crazy if I don't get more.....XO
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June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
it would be interesting if he got some action from michael :P so he could atleast know what sex with a guy really is like :P
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June 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ohh I loved this chapter ^__^ Funny that he should meet Ryan, and that his mother saw him too! Great twist, I couldn't help but to wonder if Ryan had this crush on Tim or something, hihi, yes my mind is silly sometimes, but seriously; does he? Ok, Ok, I just continue reading, hoping you are fast to update again :)
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June 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this is soooo shallow of me...haha but it's like when i read Whinesburg Ohio (good book btw), I can't get a complete picture of the main character! hahaah I appreciate this fact as an amazing literarry effort on your part, but it also puts me on pins and needles to figure out what Tim looks like! haha Like, is he really not attractive? All i got is short hair that could be curly, really pretty eyes, and possible issues with acne. :( haha any hints you could give? Oh I like Ryan by the way!! :) nice boy! (i feel like Tim's mother there haha..oops). Great story!
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, very heartbreaking.
Tim is a very... mixed character. On one hand, he's, well, a creepy stalker. But on the other hand, you've done a terrific job making him a sympathetic character. I can easily relate to his social anxiety, the desire to be invisible to avoid humiliation. And you've had him walk a fine line, in that he's fully grounded in reality, aware that a relationship with Brandon isn't in his future. He's aware of the lines between reality and fantasy.
Excellent story, and I like the irony that Ryan seems to be crushing on him. Very cool.
Tim is a very... mixed character. On one hand, he's, well, a creepy stalker. But on the other hand, you've done a terrific job making him a sympathetic character. I can easily relate to his social anxiety, the desire to be invisible to avoid humiliation. And you've had him walk a fine line, in that he's fully grounded in reality, aware that a relationship with Brandon isn't in his future. He's aware of the lines between reality and fantasy.
Excellent story, and I like the irony that Ryan seems to be crushing on him. Very cool.
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Uhhh, I hate this thing! No, not your chap, my stupid computer which ate my long, long review! Uhh!!!
Ok, I'll try to reconstruct that review ...
First of all, you're welcome ^__^ and I'm glad Tim's dad won't do anything funny to his son. Somehow I can't stomach parents/children incest =_= So thank you for the answer to my second review.
Next thing - Tim's thoughts of suicide are no surprise to me. His world - and I mean the WHOLE world has been crushed by this bug, Brandon. I know that when young, you tend to dramatize and make everything more serious than it really is but Brandon did hurt Tim. So the suicide idea is not at all strange to me in this context.
Yet ... there is the real Ryan who Tim used as his explanation for being heart-broken. You gave us just a glimpse of him but he does seem to be pretty decent and obviously wants to become friends with Tim (taking into the consideration the oets conversation and walking Tim out ... I would even say he's more interested in Tim than it meets the eye). And I think this could be the answer to Tim's problems - someone normal, not god-like as Brandon was. Plus, you can't build a relationship based on an unconditional admiration and THAT was what Ti feels for Brandon. I don't think he realizes it's not love.
Who's going to love whom unconditionally? Now thinking about it, it seems to me that it's not Tim loving Brandon but someone else loving Tim ... loving unconditionally, despite his imperfections. Will it be Ryan? I don't know, probably. Maybe this is a too far-fetched guess, maybe I'm seeing too much into this but somehow Tim and Brandon don't make sense together now.
Ok, rambling, rambling ... But actually THIS review is longer than the previous one ^__^
Loved this chapter very much and anxiously waiting for the next one. Oh, I forgot to thank you for such a quick update so ... thank you *hugs*
Till the next time,
teeta
Ok, I'll try to reconstruct that review ...
First of all, you're welcome ^__^ and I'm glad Tim's dad won't do anything funny to his son. Somehow I can't stomach parents/children incest =_= So thank you for the answer to my second review.
Next thing - Tim's thoughts of suicide are no surprise to me. His world - and I mean the WHOLE world has been crushed by this bug, Brandon. I know that when young, you tend to dramatize and make everything more serious than it really is but Brandon did hurt Tim. So the suicide idea is not at all strange to me in this context.
Yet ... there is the real Ryan who Tim used as his explanation for being heart-broken. You gave us just a glimpse of him but he does seem to be pretty decent and obviously wants to become friends with Tim (taking into the consideration the oets conversation and walking Tim out ... I would even say he's more interested in Tim than it meets the eye). And I think this could be the answer to Tim's problems - someone normal, not god-like as Brandon was. Plus, you can't build a relationship based on an unconditional admiration and THAT was what Ti feels for Brandon. I don't think he realizes it's not love.
Who's going to love whom unconditionally? Now thinking about it, it seems to me that it's not Tim loving Brandon but someone else loving Tim ... loving unconditionally, despite his imperfections. Will it be Ryan? I don't know, probably. Maybe this is a too far-fetched guess, maybe I'm seeing too much into this but somehow Tim and Brandon don't make sense together now.
Ok, rambling, rambling ... But actually THIS review is longer than the previous one ^__^
Loved this chapter very much and anxiously waiting for the next one. Oh, I forgot to thank you for such a quick update so ... thank you *hugs*
Till the next time,
teeta
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
dis story is really interesting...i cant help but feel sorry for tim...
update soon!
update soon!