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July 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Shit, I was so focused on the last parts of the chapter I forgot to tell you how hysterical reading about Tim throwing up Brandon's dirty clothes and jumping in them and throwing them on him like a pile of leaves was! Boy, that was a huge run-on-sentence!
Anyway, that whole scene was priceless. :)
Anyway, that whole scene was priceless. :)
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July 7, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Yes, it was all very solid and fluid, Timmy's transsformation, it really was like he jumped, and as rapidly and fast the fall was his transition between stalker - far away - adolescence to a cooler - obsessive - lover.
Liked the idea of forcing his way into Brandon's life - no pun intended - and how Michael in this chapter just now only seemed like the combination of horrible events. It's funny and amazing how everybody can be bad guy, good guy, except Brandon, determined to stay like this mess he is.
Great job! 'Till next time, kisses.
Liked the idea of forcing his way into Brandon's life - no pun intended - and how Michael in this chapter just now only seemed like the combination of horrible events. It's funny and amazing how everybody can be bad guy, good guy, except Brandon, determined to stay like this mess he is.
Great job! 'Till next time, kisses.
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July 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Just before my bedtime ;)
Nice chapter - a bit on the short side but I like that he is finding out more and more about Brandon
Nice chapter - a bit on the short side but I like that he is finding out more and more about Brandon
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July 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
ONCE AGAIN TIM YOU MADE ME LAUGH!!! Oh my gosh I cracked up so hard at him throwing Brandon's laundry in the air. That was great. \(OuO)/
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June 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter! I'm glad that Tim realized that Brandon did care for him in a way. Maybe he does have feelings for Timmy but we will find that out soon, right? Maybe next week?
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June 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Awesome chapter! I'm really glad with it, the waiting did a good job if you came up with this brilliancy! It's strange now, rereading all of those 29 previous chapter, how Tim's mood and character grew so much! It actually makes Liam's words true when confrontation takes you forward in life. I liked the strange-almost-not-there-tension between Ryan and the protagonist, he's really sweet and interesting.
But the "back off, asshole" theme was to die for!
Now there's a shift (a hot, dirty and meddlesome shift) in their power, but is great to see how Brandon can push that much among his space; love the wording in the text too: epicurean center? Ingenious!
But the "back off, asshole" theme was to die for!
Now there's a shift (a hot, dirty and meddlesome shift) in their power, but is great to see how Brandon can push that much among his space; love the wording in the text too: epicurean center? Ingenious!
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June 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I hope Tim will get through Brandon's defenses and rescue him. Isn't it strange, the awkward teenage stalker is the one left to save the gorgeous, perfectly in control, slut God. Being his lover doesn't seem to have a lasting effect. Being a friend maybe... Actually, Brandon already has a friend and he hasn't managed to really help him. I guess having a boyfriend would be the most novel thing possible, something to really shake Brandon up.
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June 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
That was wonderful, I cracked up when Tim thought about using Brandons bathroom. BRILLIANT PLAN. Ahahaha still smiling.
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June 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the update. I absolutely loved the end of chapter 30 - how Tim! I am cheering for Tim, who is the only one who is persistent enough to keep going through all the crappy behaviour Branden uses to protect herself.
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June 22, 2013 at 12:00 AM
darn, update right before bedtime... but on the other hand... just the right moment this time... That was hot ;)