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muy linda y no esta completa, verdad?, espero muy pronto proximos capitulos, ana maria

awww! that's so sad!

Excellent work! Keep it updated and true!

O.o Hmm a good nice update ther and alot of information was gained from both sides. I like this fic it gots some good tuff in here...Still I gotta see more then I'll know whats up. Good job though.

As a newcomer to your fic, i would just like to say that it is BLODDY BRILLIANT so far lol, you are a good writer...very expresive! I look forward to more updates. *R* xx

good story, keep up

Well, it's a decent start. There's not a lot of depth to these characters, they seem particularily 2D. How does he know she's his soul mate? Did he just realize it out of the blue, I mean you dont usually fall in love with someone who tells you they hate you from the moment they meet you. More character background would be nice and help justify the actions of the characters. Everything seems a little sporatic. Also, her reaction after he tells her he loves her seems a little unrealisitic. The idea that she suddenly feels ok with being with him seems strange and too soon. There should be more of a realization period to make it more realisitic.

I like where you're going, it just needs a bit of work =)
If you'd like any help feel free to email. I'd like to see this story really go somewhere.

Very interesting story. You got me hooked already. Mind you, I usually don't come on to AFF. I usually go to the regular Fictionpress.com. But today I decided to come here just to check it out cuz I never come here. Then I read this and now I'm hooked! Keep it up :)

Very interesting story, I can't wait to see how this is going to come out. I find the fact that they both have the same birthdays very creepy. What have you got brewing to explaine that! I can't wait.

Good luck with chapter 3!