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:( I hope you return to AFF soon. Your stories are always the best and I need another fix!

I feel like Tyrone Biggums here

*scratch, scratch, scratch*

Ah good! I’m starting to remember the particulars of the story and what character are what. It seems like were getting a deeper look into the girls’ relationship, I wonder what role they will play in the overall and what Mariko will do when she finds out what her boys are up to. I’m glad you are picking up with this one again and with more regularity. I know it has to be a pain at times, but we appreciate it!

Oh, do keep writing. I'm interested to see where you'll go with this. :) Just be careful to avoid purple prose. I noticed that just once or twice, when I read something like "piercing eyes of icy obsidian darkness" or something along those lines. A good rule of thumb is limiting your adjectives to one or two per sentence or avoiding vague descriptors like darkness. Using "dark," for example, to describe his eyes gives us a better picture. That's all I got for these first chapters. But good writing. Looking forward to reading more.

SHE LIVES! I stil can't wait to read 'Combustion.' I've read and heard so many great things about it. I hope chapters for both are quickly coming as I cannot wait to read 'em.

Usually I don’t do the: PLEAZE UPD8TE ! Style comments, but for you I will gladly beg.
I hope you find some time to continue in the near future, Kuzuremasu has been on my mind for too long, fortunately I’ve only heard of Combustion so it doesn’t torture me like this (but I can’t wait to read that one too *hint-hint*).
It’s like losing the most awesomest book I’ve ever read and not being able to find a replacement on Amazon. I know awesomest is not a word but your stuff really defies the established ones, great/excellent/superb doesn’t even begin to describe it. I’m still anxious to see what happens when she opens that bathroom door so please, please, please continue!

I was so excited that you update -- and may I add, that I am so happy (incredibly) that Naomi will be one man. You are an amazing writer. I love reading this story. So hot.

I'm so glad you're back!! I'm really looking forward to read more of this story and hope to see more updates soon.

I loved reading this story when you first posted it up. I'm glad that I clicked on it even though the author's name was different. Please, please, *begging you here* don't make her go to his friend (I don't mind the go, I do hate the "DO"). Of course you're the author though so you can make it anyway you want. I think I'm confusing you. Wait, I know I am.
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You're an amazing author. I absolutely love your work. I was so sad when you quit your first story -- or was that the first story I read.

Have you posted this fic already?