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December 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
So far so good! I hope to learn more about Caleb's past as the story progresses - I wonder why he reacted so badly to the house-builder's name in the first chapter? I also love Eric's characterisation - in the first chapter I was a little worried he might be a one-dimensional "teenage tearaway" character, but the second chapterquickly cleared that up.
Keep up the good work!
Keep up the good work!
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December 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
DUDE!! this story kicks ass so far! ^_^
poor Caleb, already making stupid, un-loved, lonely person assumptions -like "i don't want to hurt him, i should stay away."
good thing for him, he seems to be kind of a ditz (the windchime incident) ^_~ so i figure he won't be able to stay away from Eric. XD
....wondering how u're going to deal with the whole non-corporeal bit when it comes to physical intimacy. *eye-brow raise* i await your brillance.
poor Caleb, already making stupid, un-loved, lonely person assumptions -like "i don't want to hurt him, i should stay away."
good thing for him, he seems to be kind of a ditz (the windchime incident) ^_~ so i figure he won't be able to stay away from Eric. XD
....wondering how u're going to deal with the whole non-corporeal bit when it comes to physical intimacy. *eye-brow raise* i await your brillance.
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December 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oops is right. Haha! He's so cute. I am now compelled to talk to clocks. ^_^ Well, not really...
I officially love Pete. And hate Sally. She's evil. I also love CALEB! Love the name, too. What time period is he from? Early 1800s? That's pretty sexy.
Can't wait for the thrid installment!
Loyally, Jaklyn Toki
I officially love Pete. And hate Sally. She's evil. I also love CALEB! Love the name, too. What time period is he from? Early 1800s? That's pretty sexy.
Can't wait for the thrid installment!
Loyally, Jaklyn Toki
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December 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is one of the best Original AFF.net stories ive read in a very, very long time, i'd love to see more in the future. Congrats you got me hooked.
~Boogie.
~Boogie.
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December 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
quite an intriguing story you got there! will be waiting for updates^^
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December 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Again, really loveing this so far. Keep it up :D
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December 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very nice !!
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December 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, Calab made a guy faint on his first word....that has to be some sort of record, lol xP Poor Eric, I would've fainted too. And aaahhhh, Sally sounds like one of those ladies that are hard to like, but not a bad person.
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December 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. Please continue!
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December 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great start. Funny, interesting and well written. Update soon.
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