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for Haunted

by ElfNight

person Bards Apprentice
schedule December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ahhh. finally some answers! ^_^
i like Amelia, she reminds me of my favorite aunt....lol

so MY theory is that Hiram was playing a little too rough with his favorite boy-toy...
yes? no?
post soon & let us know! ^_^
person Civako
schedule December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I Love this chapter! I'm really curious so you did a great job! Please continue to do so! thanx!
person Anno
schedule December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Still loving this! What a great chapter! Keep it going, can't wait to find out what HT did to Caleb...
person Jaklyn Toki
schedule December 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
CALEB!!! OH MY GAWD! Is he Tripper's bastard child? Ha. Or a boytoy maybe? I giggle. This is the best chapter yet, and anything that mentions Anne Rice is amazing! I love the old lady. That's what I want to be when I get old.

Update soon!!!
person beth
schedule December 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
aww that was somewhat disappointing, I was hoping it would be a longer chapter. Thats okay though, it was still awesome ^.^ Be waiting for the next chapter!
person Sekre
schedule December 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
One step closer to solving the mystery!
person Anno.
schedule December 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter! I'm anxious to learn more!
person jess
schedule December 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
yay for another update! i'm glad we should be learning more about caleb now. update soon.
person Bards Apprentice
schedule December 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ok. we're getting somewhere now! ^_^
the last few lines made me laugh. Caleb's such a cute little ditzy boy -& was that a perverted thought i saw there? ^_~
person Nathaniel
schedule December 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hello!

I really like it. I'm eager to know what happened to Caled and if there is a future in this world for him. Your style is appealing and nice to read :-)

Two things confuse me.
First thing is the different forms Caleb can transform into. There is a "invisible" form, a "grey" form (is this the blank form?), the white form and the "colored" form, right? Except from the "invisible" form Eric can see Caleb in every form. And you wrote that the "invisible" form needs concentration. So how comes it, that Eric can't see Caleb when he is in his blank form - or asked the other way around: Why does Caled has to concentrate to be seen by Eric?

Second: Why do you choose write you paragraphs in such a narrow space? I think it's more comfortable if you let the reader decide how wide they want the story to be diplayed. But that is only a small thing...

Anyway, please don't stop writing!
Nathaniel