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January 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'd just like to say that I am a (natural) size zero and do not appreciate the phrase "skinny whore". Would you ever use the phrase "fat whore"? When you put your own personal biases into your stories, then it not only turns off and offends your readers, but in this case makes your character seem like an insecure biatch.
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January 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow. What a twist. So she was in love with a teacher? and wait...So Melissa is in love with Brian and his uncle??
I looooove it. This story is really amazing. I really hope you write soon. Honestly when I looked at it, I thought I wouldn't like this story because it was first person and I usually don't like those types of stories, but you really have amazed me. A story hasn't caught my interest and curiosity in a really looooonnnng time. Keep it up. I like what you've got.
-Sayge
I looooove it. This story is really amazing. I really hope you write soon. Honestly when I looked at it, I thought I wouldn't like this story because it was first person and I usually don't like those types of stories, but you really have amazed me. A story hasn't caught my interest and curiosity in a really looooonnnng time. Keep it up. I like what you've got.
-Sayge
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January 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Huh...Well...
Suffice it to say that reading your last chapter was a delightful and refreshing slap in the face and had me somewhat speechless. Being a guy that's watched too many movies, read too many books and watched too much television, I tend to pick up...not clichés per se, but I tend to hypothesize what would happen next, and, eight to nine times out of ten, I tend to be right. Your latest chapter, however...it was pleasantly surprising.
I can understand cadence's feelings about Melissa (I happened to be victim of that as well back in my day), but I'm not really annoyed by her. Right now, I can relate to her perfectly. How, I really can't say, but let's just say I can sympathize with her right now.
Technical side of things, don't worry too much about it. I know you have a beta working as fast as he/she can on your work. I would love to beta your stuff, but there are too many factors blocking me from being a beta right now. Maybe if I had a laptop...
Keep up the great work! This has evolved so far from a one-shot, and it's growing beautifully. I would love to see how this turns out.
Suffice it to say that reading your last chapter was a delightful and refreshing slap in the face and had me somewhat speechless. Being a guy that's watched too many movies, read too many books and watched too much television, I tend to pick up...not clichés per se, but I tend to hypothesize what would happen next, and, eight to nine times out of ten, I tend to be right. Your latest chapter, however...it was pleasantly surprising.
I can understand cadence's feelings about Melissa (I happened to be victim of that as well back in my day), but I'm not really annoyed by her. Right now, I can relate to her perfectly. How, I really can't say, but let's just say I can sympathize with her right now.
Technical side of things, don't worry too much about it. I know you have a beta working as fast as he/she can on your work. I would love to beta your stuff, but there are too many factors blocking me from being a beta right now. Maybe if I had a laptop...
Keep up the great work! This has evolved so far from a one-shot, and it's growing beautifully. I would love to see how this turns out.
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January 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
What is Brian's uncle NINE??? or was Nine someone to bring Melissa closer to Brian? I'm a lil confuse but it makes it much more better to read the story when everything comes together. Great job. If you are still having writer block problems than I suggest you read a book call 'The Artist Way: A Spiritual Path to Higher Creativity' by Julia Cameron. It helped me alot when I was stuck in my own artist block. Anyways you know what I am about to suggest. Happy 2008!
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January 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
My toes are curled and im pretty much heperventalating on how anxious i am to read more. PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!
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August 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like this story! I have my suspicions to who nine is and i can't wait for them to be revealed! please update soon!
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August 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You almost got me crying on this chapter. I think everyone has gone through what Melissa has gone through and it is great to read. I don't know who Nine is yet because I want to be surprised. Thank you for writing such a wonderful story because of it hopes in love. I cannot wait to read the next chapter, I hope that you don't abandon this wonderful story.
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August 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
IT WAS ABOUT TIME YOU UPDATED...thank you thank you thank you...now when are you updating again????..please don't take to long!!!
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August 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Welcome back! I haven't heard from you in so long, I just figured you were busy with reality.
Grammar and spelling aside, it was still a good story. It also makes me wonder just HOW MUCH Brian knows about Nine, if he knows anything at all. I also wonder if Nine was the one to write that message on the boys' bathroom stall. It wouldn't be like him to make such a grand gesture...but I'm reading too much into things.
Sorry to hear that you've had Writer's Block, but I know how you feel. I've had really bad Writer's Block myself, and it was starting to become a chore just to get a chapter out. I've had inspiration to work on other stories, so I've been working on those to clear my mind and to keep the flow going in case I get inspiration for the more important writing projects.
That's the only advice I could give, but I can also offer you my support. Keep it up! I really want to see how this turns out!
Grammar and spelling aside, it was still a good story. It also makes me wonder just HOW MUCH Brian knows about Nine, if he knows anything at all. I also wonder if Nine was the one to write that message on the boys' bathroom stall. It wouldn't be like him to make such a grand gesture...but I'm reading too much into things.
Sorry to hear that you've had Writer's Block, but I know how you feel. I've had really bad Writer's Block myself, and it was starting to become a chore just to get a chapter out. I've had inspiration to work on other stories, so I've been working on those to clear my mind and to keep the flow going in case I get inspiration for the more important writing projects.
That's the only advice I could give, but I can also offer you my support. Keep it up! I really want to see how this turns out!
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August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey I was wondering when are going to update this story I reallly loved it, but you never came around to finishing it....please update it