rate_review Reviews

I stumbled across your story a couple of months ago, and even though school has got me going crazy, Ive been reading your story every chance Ive had. You're both exceptional writters, and I love the way you developed the characters. I liked your story so much that I wanted to review every chapter, but thought that would be excessive (besides, I couldnt stop reading!) Your story is by far the best original on AFF, and possibly the best original story Ive read on the web. Good luck writting the second book, Ill be reading for sure, and reviewing every chapter because you guys deserve it! In the meantime Im going to go and finally check out your site, which I know is fabulous.
Much love.
Peace.

ooookay...
I have to say that - the ending was the weakest part of the story.
Do not, please, EVER end the book with such a loooong, static, inner discussion of the main (or not) character. The whole book is supposed to give us an insight into intentions, thoughts, reflections, fears and desires. It is to late to put it all into the last chapter just because you feel there is so much you would explain or summarise...
When describing thoughts, try to construct more precise sentences expressing exactly what you mean, so that you don't have to use 100 words instead of 10.

Well, I was expecting really good, interesting finish and I feel disappointed :)

Thanks for your work, anyway, it was fun reading it. Good luck writing the next part ;)

I must congratulate you for finishing this great book, it's an impressive piece of work. I have loved reading it and I'm really looking forward to book two!

i think that was lo más chingón (who i also believe is sin's dad) that broke in. i don't believe he's dead because sin doesn't remember a lot about that time. i'm thinking lo más chingón wanted out and got really pissed off when he saw his son in the back of that van in monterray. yes it was an inside job - it was sin's dad. that's my story and i'm sticking to it. also, i think it was Gioia who got left behind because she was just a little to shocked at seeing sin's face when he held her in the tower. now the real question that's killing me is does vivianne know emilio? i can't wait for book 2 because it's getting real deep and there are so many questions surrounding sin that they have to be answered. great job guys!!!

Go Boyd Go!! :D I'm glad to see him doing something to help himself a bit. :)

*nods* Crazy, and still... considering how long every chapter is... and the quantity of chapters there are... O_O No one can really say we had to wait all that long to see book 1 finished.

"Book two will actually focus a lot on Sin"
*happy dance* (<-- Sin fangirl even if she also likes Boyd almost as much)

Oh, and since he's been mentioned, I have to confess, I find Emilio creepy. XDDDD Just for the record. :)

See you on next side-stories (or the Sin one I have yet to read) or in book 2!
Thanks a lot for Book One, it's been great reading!

Allrigt, after an half year of silent reading, I think I really should try to write a review^^
First of, you're story is amazing! It's definetly the most complicated, exhilarating and instructive story I ever read -seven years of english classes taught me less vocabulary than five of your chapters^^
I don't even know where to start with the praise... At first, I got hooked of because of Boyds shrewd way of thinking. He is a really fascinating person, calm but somehow inhuman in his idle manner. Later on, I got addicted to Sin -bad guy with a heart of... well, iron?- anyway, I love his sarcasm and the casualness with wich he treats everybody around him... in fact, all of your characters somehow manage to be so... real, it's hard to imagine one can come up with such difficult and nonetheless well-rounded ficional characters. Vivienne is such a mystery, impossible to figure out, Ryan is someone I would latch onto imeediately just for him being cute and even Connors in all his assholeness fits in percetly... although he's that kind of person you want to punch right in the face but never have the guts to actually do so -.-
Allright, before I start babbling too much... the story...
Honestly, what are your hobbies, breaking into the pentagon and reading classified mission reports? How can you two create such huge, twisted undercover-scenarios without being agents yourself? Creepy, honestly... ... uhm, well,what I wanted to say, your plot, the whole action is so unbelievable believable! (do I make any sense at all?) I really got hooked up after the first mission. It's never predictable, and you somehow manage to drop a bomb in almost every chapter... I was wailing when you made it look like Sin was dead... I was very close to murder someone myself! And I still wanna know who this mysterious smuggle-bandito was... and what he loooks like... anyways, I love your story, and I hope you will continue with writing about Sin and Boyd... they share such a fascinating relationship too! It's really hard to figure out what Sin actually feels for Boyd... I'm still wondering, as a fact, if it's just Boyd being the first he could trust or if Boyd's really the only one Sin can feel deeply for... I hope for the latter.
Hm, okay, I guess I said my part... forgot half of it, more likely, but whatever.

You guys rock!

i know ur prolly done checking these ive been reading this for almost aslong as uve been writing i think i started when u just put out cptr 15 but any way i realy like it its my fav story on this site and i think u guys should start writing and publishing for the old fasiond reading matirial yanno paper back i would buy them religously much like how i read ur up dates loves hugs and kisses Mo

Okay, first off, since this is a long time coming!, I want to say that I loved your story, and while I am sad to see the first book ending, it was a wonderful ending. I think it really gave Boyd closer and a new start! Bravo to you! I know that I should have reviewed over the last year, but I didn't cause I suck that way! lol. Actually it would take me half the night to read, and then I was so tired I forget and by the time I got back to it, you'd post a new chap and the whole viscous cycle would start again.

I look forward to reading the next book, and I recommended this story to everyone who will listen. I will also try to remember to review the chapter next time around! Anyways guys keep up the wonderful work and Congratulations on completing this epic tale!

This book is awesome. I have commented before, but I just had to comment again. Kudos to the authors!!!

woooow that was some intense chapter. Couldn´t stop reading even if I had 5million things waiting to be done. XDDDD
I wonder what will come next, who this people are, why this girl recognized Sin, if Boyd will know about Sin and MomyDearest not stopping Connor's death and how he will feel about it. He kinda is the most sentimental out of the 3 of them. Or, at least, the less frozen one (I they have feelings, but they're a lot harder). But Connors SHOULD be good news for them, even if Vivianne won´t win the "mother of the year" award even if she was the last woman left on earth.

Anyway... THANK YOU for another GREAT chapter!
I can´t wait to read the rest!