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for Once A Slave II: Magewise

by KaticaLocke

schedule February 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I've loved this story from the beginning - but it's really so much better now that Lark and Naeven are 'friends'.

Just kinda makes the whole thing sparkle!
person Jenna T.
schedule February 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 18 - I'm going to review here and on fp when I get the chance. Tam is great. Definently my favorite character. She is just...absolutely crazy. I feel sorry for that Shadow guy. Life must suck while guarding her. But they'll probably fall in love and kill eachother.
person Aurani
schedule February 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey now we are getting somewhere ;-)

Nice chapter (liked the part with the hair, funny)

Keep it up
person Anon
schedule February 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well, this chapter certainly got the fires going, so to speak. And Naeven stepping on his hair was just too funny.^^ Over all, very interesting developments.
person CocoReed
schedule February 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 16

Hello! It has been getting frustrating, but you manage to put something into each chapter to distract me from the stalled story of Lark and Sactaren. As always, nicely written. I love Khas, interesting creature - I'd love to know what other animals you've come up with for the story. I enjoy the universe this is set in. I'm glad they didn't have sex in this chapter. After all the baggage I just didn't see Lark going all the way just yet. Interesting tale so far, can't wait to see what happens. Happy writing!
schedule February 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Lovely.

Maybe they could have thigh sex next time. That would get Lark pretty close to the final goal...
schedule February 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very well done, Katica.

It's so good to see Lark becoming a bit bolder. Sure hope Sactaren keeps his word.
person Mitts
schedule February 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mitts

A very apt named chapter...Magic... Because that is what this chapter truly was!

Yay, Lark finally admitted to Sactaren how badly he wants him...and I was totally surprised at Sactarens honesty, amazed even, that he didn't just give Lark the cup of tea and convince him it was a 'potion'...Mmmmm, seems the mage is becoming a new man, lol...But he is still pig-headed...He had a golden opportunity to show Lark just how much he cared for him, but rather than spend time coaching the shy, frightened youngster, he couldn't wait to race back up the stairs to his ready, eager and willing bed partner, lol...
okay, on to the next chapter now...Goodness, I have so much catching up to do!
person Sohym
schedule February 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Arrgh... need... to... read... next... chapter... >_<;;
Naeven's a tease. And you are too! darn, that was short... but really interesting. It's funny to compare the Lark from the beginning to the "new" Lark. He's a lot more daring and he's starting to control his fear (well... kinda?). Ahhhh... I wonder why Naeven is so... scared? of Lark. I mean... he looks scared of his love (?) or something. Did something happened in his past? I wonder how a chapter with Naeven's POV would look. It would be nice... *sigh*

I voted for you (of course!). Please, people, vote too!
person Anon
schedule February 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well it sure is interesting to see Lark doing the seducing for once. Seems to me like Naeven is the one being more nervous now. My eyebrows and ears are are standing at attention.