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are you dead?

I was wondering if you had died. I am glad to see the story continued.

intensity is the felling this one is left with my Queen

I had not seen the update earlier. Who is the 'he' that calls the boy 'Syn'? Is it the same he as the 'broken doll' he? Is it Alexis? I do anticipate your updates eagerly.

Interesting so far. I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this. I'm wondering who you might setup to eventually be Alexis love interest (assuming you're planning on that). Not really wanting to see him wind up with Endaris, and Allusion seems a bit too superficial. Alexis also seems to be a very 'glass half empty' negative kind of person, self-deprecating and generally unhappy with everything. Hopefully we'll see him slowly overcome this part of his psyche and emerge a healed person.

Well-constructed sentences; supernatural. Just read the first chapter, will read the rest. Good start.

I love the morbidness of this story. My hair actually raise up as I read. It reminds me of a book I read: The Christmas Killer. My mind jumps ahead and makes conclusions, I constantly see dark settings. There is no lifelike light or happiness. I am still confused as to Mother, you had a capital M, and what she made Alex do. I hope you delve more into Endrias and Alex's relationship, they don't seem like a normal couple. And who was the killer and who killed him? Many questions spring. I hope you update very quickly.

I didn't feel like the chapter was a 'filler' - it explained a lot about Alex's life and and people who are important to him.

I'm really enjoying the plot-line and all the strange events. (And looking forward to getting answers about them.)

I was angry when I got to the end of this chapter. My words were "Why the hell aren't there any more chapter?" all angry and stuff. I got angry. I wanna know what happens. This is writen like a book. A good book. A book that I would read.

whoa, i was NOT expecting that development with the captain. interesting! and he sounds so damned intimidating with his height and build, it makes me wonder if someone like alex, who's probably way smaller than him, ever gets nervous about pissing him off. i'm also wondering if they ever get nervous about being seen together in public? between them, they must have a lot of co-workers and acquaintances, not to mention people from the media and those they've arrested and put into prison before.

your style of writing really works. it's obvious you're building up to something, and the way you draw out alex's routine, alone in his apartment, makes the atmosphere formidable and expectant, especially with the doll in his presence. i'm very intrigued at what's behind it and who killed the pedophile.

the only very minor suggestion i have is to look out for comma splices- i spotted two or three sentences where a comma was unnecessary.

i'm eagerly awaiting an update! :)