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March 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Took you long enough. i was going CRAZY waiting for your chapter.
I wanted Ran eto be all, "I like you." But Noooooooooooo.
This breaks my heart.
But OMG the one person Uri was terrified of coming out to was the first one to know. IRONY! (I hope he's jealous :-3)
I also hope he beats Rane up. That would be wa~y amusing.
I'm ranting.
*hugs*
MORE. NOW. Please. I love you.
I wanted Ran eto be all, "I like you." But Noooooooooooo.
This breaks my heart.
But OMG the one person Uri was terrified of coming out to was the first one to know. IRONY! (I hope he's jealous :-3)
I also hope he beats Rane up. That would be wa~y amusing.
I'm ranting.
*hugs*
MORE. NOW. Please. I love you.
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March 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ah, you are the devil, stopping right at that point. It's just not fair *pouts*
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March 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WHOO!
WHOO!
WHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
=)
You please me. Very much.
<3
WHOO!
WHOO!
WHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
=)
You please me. Very much.
<3
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March 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
So uh...I think you should update, pronto. Cause I favorited this story, and I'm checking every day. WAY TO KEEP ME ON EDGE. Recently I've been getting into the incest scene (still unknown by myself if I should be concerned or not...xD) and I'm addicted to this story! So keep it up! Please? I'll be your best friend, for life.
=]
=]
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March 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OH I WIN!!!! ^_^ i SO win!!!!!
i called the Rane lust! XD *fangirl dance*
*smirks & crosses arms smugly* let's just see how Shawn reacts to that. ^_~
...or Uri for that matter........i'm hoping he'll say yes -for just the protection & distraction from Shawn at least....& maybe for that green-eyed kiss. ^_~
& i'm still wondering if Rane truly is an ok guy....or if there's a REASON why Kyle's afraid of him..... & i recall Shawn reacting badly to the name too...or maybe i'm day-dreaming my own version of this between updates. ^_~ lol.
can't wait for the next bit. u've really hit some GOOD momentum here & the cliff-hangers are almost tangible! ^_^
i called the Rane lust! XD *fangirl dance*
*smirks & crosses arms smugly* let's just see how Shawn reacts to that. ^_~
...or Uri for that matter........i'm hoping he'll say yes -for just the protection & distraction from Shawn at least....& maybe for that green-eyed kiss. ^_~
& i'm still wondering if Rane truly is an ok guy....or if there's a REASON why Kyle's afraid of him..... & i recall Shawn reacting badly to the name too...or maybe i'm day-dreaming my own version of this between updates. ^_~ lol.
can't wait for the next bit. u've really hit some GOOD momentum here & the cliff-hangers are almost tangible! ^_^
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March 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Four Review
Awwww! this was such a cute chapter and i loved everything about it. The only thing you seem to be struggling with is just minor grammar but your vocabulary is superb! I really wish i could write as excellent as you. And your misstakes have decreased, so obviously you are getting much better! here are the few minor follies i have found:
but it makes me feel more the important part of the family - try this - but it makes me feel 'as if I was' the more important part of the family
Just opposite the study there is - should be - just opposite 'to' the study, there is (yes, I added a comma)
“As you want,” - should either be - "As you wish," or "If you want,"
there is no way he leaves you alone. - should be - there is no way he will leave you alone
Awwww! this was such a cute chapter and i loved everything about it. The only thing you seem to be struggling with is just minor grammar but your vocabulary is superb! I really wish i could write as excellent as you. And your misstakes have decreased, so obviously you are getting much better! here are the few minor follies i have found:
but it makes me feel more the important part of the family - try this - but it makes me feel 'as if I was' the more important part of the family
Just opposite the study there is - should be - just opposite 'to' the study, there is (yes, I added a comma)
“As you want,” - should either be - "As you wish," or "If you want,"
there is no way he leaves you alone. - should be - there is no way he will leave you alone
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March 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*sighs*
feel like I just ate a very good cake...
happy, satisfied.....
I like Rane, you know that......
and I'll probably declare my love for a different character each week, but that's just because I like them ALL....they're totally lovable little charas.....
poor kyle though.....but if I had a little brother, I wouldn't give him to kyle, so.......
and when I said I couldn't figure out Rane...well I knew that he was interested in Uri.....I just espected him to express this interest a bit earlier...more obvious.....
and now it's out and it's all very sudden and I guess you could say that my cake was thrown at me....
but I still love it
(and you seem to love cliffhangers)
wanna share my chocolate cake?
cohe
feel like I just ate a very good cake...
happy, satisfied.....
I like Rane, you know that......
and I'll probably declare my love for a different character each week, but that's just because I like them ALL....they're totally lovable little charas.....
poor kyle though.....but if I had a little brother, I wouldn't give him to kyle, so.......
and when I said I couldn't figure out Rane...well I knew that he was interested in Uri.....I just espected him to express this interest a bit earlier...more obvious.....
and now it's out and it's all very sudden and I guess you could say that my cake was thrown at me....
but I still love it
(and you seem to love cliffhangers)
wanna share my chocolate cake?
cohe
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March 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I luuuv your story. I have to confess for a very long time I havent fully read fiction of any sort on the Internet (much less made a review), just skim-read them. After skim reading your first chapter I decided to read the whole story word by word, but I had to print it cuz after five chapters my head started to hurt from staring at the pc. Heres the funny part - I broke our printer and my dad wanted to know what was i trying to print and yeah well..I said it was homework but he wasn’t very convinced. T_T
I love Uri I really do he is adorable, i love the way you have portrait him. My favourite chapters are 1 and 14 so far. I can’t wait for the update! I recommended your story to a friend so she will be reading it too soon ^_^
Good luck with your writing
MaryBell
I love Uri I really do he is adorable, i love the way you have portrait him. My favourite chapters are 1 and 14 so far. I can’t wait for the update! I recommended your story to a friend so she will be reading it too soon ^_^
Good luck with your writing
MaryBell
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March 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I've just been realizing how much I've neglected reviewing the stories I read! I really like your story and can't wait to see more! Uri is so incredibly adorable, though it sucks how often he throws up! :oP Again, I can't wait to see more!
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March 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hello there...lovely story you have here...I'm enamored already ;)
I'll be watching for updates, my dear...I'm a new adultfanfiction addict because of you
I'll be watching for updates, my dear...I'm a new adultfanfiction addict because of you