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-blushes- W-well, I just like to tell others how I think about thier work. -blushes brighter- I didn't know that it would amke you blush, I am the one who usually blushes. -smiles- I really liked chapter 20. Again, I feel sorry for poor Shawn. He even asked for advice from the one he loves. I feel for him. To love someone who you know doesn't have a clue about your feelings for them...it can sometimes break a persons heart and soul, But..uh....it's not like I have ever felt that way -gives a sad smile- Sorry, I shouldn't have said that. I am looking forward to the next chapter and hope that Shawn gets his 'Unconscious' date with Uri. And to have your friends be angry with you for not telling them that you liked guys...I hope that I do not get a reaction like that from mine.

You spin a web of unfortunate truths, that will someday be unwoven into an unbreakable thread of certainty, Miss teeta -blushes and offers a shy smile- A little something that I think about when I read you story

Dayakara

Yeah, one sitting. It took me a few hours, but I just couldn't make myself leave the computer. Fortunately for me, I didn't have to be anywhere, but I did have a little trouble getting up in the morning. ^^; It was worth it, I tell you!

Awww... Shawn being worried was SO adorable. And he made Uri breakfast! Eep!

I nearly died laughing at Uri's suggestions to Shawn. Honestly, Uri is so oblivious. Poor, poor Shawn. I can't see Uri getting a clue unless Shawn does something REALLY obvious, but Shawn wouldn't do that unless he was extremely sure that Uri felt the same, and of course Uri isn't going to tell him... @-@ *Headache* They're impossible! I want to just hit them over the head and say, "He loves you, dammit! Kiss right this instant!" XD Ah, but that would be too easy. *Sigh*

I still like Rane, but he is kind of pissing me off right now. And as for Dan, I didn't get the homophobe vibe off of him... mostly he just seemed hurt that Uri hadn't said anything. Especially after those rumors started. I hope he and Uri work through this; Uri has enough to deal with. *Cuddles Uri* Ow, Shawn, don't hit me! It's purely platonic cuddling!

Oh, and one more thing. Whatever happened to Nate? He hasn't been around much lately.

Sorry, but I have to take a leaf out of Nomadic's book and review a review.

Chelsea:

More has happened than you might think. It might not seem like it, because most of the development has been inner as opposed to the kind that is physically apparent. Also, you have to keep in mind that it hasn't really been a long amount of time, despite the fact that there are 20 chapters. THIS IS A GOOD THING. It means that Teeta is being realistic. In a lot of stories, you would see the characters hook up in about four chapters. That is enjoyable, but highly unlikely to really happen. Also, it just means that when things ARE resolved, it will be even more enjoyable. We are also getting more insight into the characters this way; we're really getting to know them. And finally, I often find that stories lose my interest after the two main characters get together. Even if there's other conflicts going on, it's just not as thrilling. Although there are a few brilliant exceptions to that rule, and if Teeta plans to continue this after Uri is happily in love and involved, I'm willing to bet this story might be one of those exceptions. In summary, drawing this out is a VERY good thing.

That is all. ^^

Gods! I anxiously wait for an update. You're story always leaves me hanging on a cliff hanger!!!!!!

Oh my. I was just caosting the pages and found this astonishing fiction O_O I hope that this doesn't sound wierd but Rane reminds me of a friend of mine at school. He even acts that same way. Odd. -smiles- Oh! I'm sorry I don't mean to idle about that but I had to say it. This is my first time reviewing and reading your story and I really like it. -blushes- I find Uri's reaction somehow similar to something I am going through and well, I can't help be relate to him in a way. Sorry if I'm rambling. But I realy like it. My favorite character in the whole story so far is, I think Shawn. Sorry, I shouldn't think that. -blushes again- But I can picture him in my mind and I think he's pretty cute, for a bad boy anyways. Smooth, very smooth. You have the whole first person point of view thing down to a 'T' even though your not a boy yourself. (at least I don't think so? teeta doesn't sound like a boy's name but then again, I don't think Dayakara sounds like a boy's name either, so I have no ground to stand on ^_^) Oh, sorry I was rambling again. I can't wait until you write another chapter, I'm curious as to what Shawn will do know that he thinks Rane is Uri's boyfriend. I kinda feel sorry for Shawn. He seems like a really nice guy. But Rane is nice too. 9I'm still rooting for Shawn though, he's cuter) Opps, sorry again. Heh, I seem t obe saying sorry alot, oops, sorry again -laughs- Okay, I think I'll stop now before I embarrass myself any further. -smiles-

Hey teeta,

Thanks for pointing that out for me, I quess I really didn't make the whole "her giving me permission thing" clear enough, but i ifxed it. I just really liked that story and when she e-mailed me, telling me how much she missed writing and that Iraq sucked big time, I wanted to make her happy by continueing it and letting her have something to look forward to when her bad days in Iraq took it's toll on her. I have written about four more from her original chapters, and so far she has been very happy with what I have done with it(She says that I let her have good dreams when she goes to bed at night XD.) I hope that you and everyone who reads it are happy with the results as she is. Thanks for pointing that for me, again. ^_^ And I hope my disclaimer is better suited to your liking. ^_^

Always:JadenLeeFaye

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!
you cant leave it there. man you have me hooked... But why the cliff hanger? me want to know the reaction... *cries* i really hope you up date soon. Great work and keep it up... ^_^

this is the BEST chapter yet!!!!! XD
*cackling in glee* now things may really get moving! the Shawn-jealousy is tangible! ^_^

& u know me -mind's always working. so here's my train of thought while reading all this:
1st-Rane's "favor" is to Kyle (setting a trap or gathering information about Uri)
then for a while i thought: no, Rane's doing the favor for SHAWN! (gathering of information again mostly. i thought Shawn knew who Rane was because he used to go to school there too...)
now: i'm back to the Rane-Kyle thought process.....or Shawn's just a REALLY good actor ^_~

but either way, i think Uri's right to be nervous & slightly untrusting of this one....
update soon! ^_^

Oh....and I'm actually kind of hoping that Ui and Shawn are real brothers, because I love incest and I don't like those stories that end up with the the lovely couple finding out they aren't related after all *gasp* I'm not supposed to think like that @@

I meant Uri, sorry *stabs keyboard*