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for Not supposed to

by teeta

person Aoi Hana
schedule March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Poor Uri... I feel sorry for him. But now I know that his hair are dark brown:) Are they darker than Shawn's?
person Kolgrim
schedule March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Poor Uri, this is all so confusing to him! I liked the Shawn and Rane bit, lol, and feel sorry for Shawn, it must have felt really bad hearing Uri has a boyfriend, to hear it like like that; so suddenly after worrying about his savety.

And that breakfast scene was so cute! It seemed to me that Shawn was trying to follow Uri's advice of how to approach his crush, little does Uri know that the "girl" is actually him!

And now Uri's friend knows that he's gay. I hope that Dan and Nate accept him, Uri has it hard as it is already!

Loved this chapter, thank you for updating: reading it made me happy ^.^
person Ching
schedule March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh boy, I fell off my chair laughing when I got to the "Well isn't it my boyfriend" part. Well done as always.
person Chelsea
schedule March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I understand that you want to build suspence and draw out the story, but I'm just getting frustrated that nothing is actually happening. I mean, it's been almost flat lined. I love the story, and can't wait to see where your going with it, but it just doesn't seem to be going anywhere fast.
person leanne
schedule March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I only found this story last night and i read all of it.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE continue it through to its conclusion.
I am addicted.
Its amazing....i feel so sorry for Shawn...

I am eagerly awaiting another update.
person WinghsZ
schedule March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
^_^ so happy!!!! Update soon please! *fangirly scream*
person sade483
schedule March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This update was amazing! I had a feeling that Rane was going to turn the whole situation into a joke. It would've been way to soon and easy for it to have come out that way. And seriously, where's the fun in that! It was hilarious seeing Shawn use the tips Uri gave him on Uri himself. You can tell that Shawn is definitely feeling threatened by Rane trespassing on his turf:) Rane is just so cool and collected most of the time, no wonder Uri thinks he's insane! I hope Dan pulls his head out of his ass cause Uri really needs a friend he can count on right now. I wonder what will happen for the rest of the school day; it certainly started off on an interesting foot. Anyway, just love your work! Keep up the good work and UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
schedule March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hm... Rane is kinda more touble than his worth, first with Shawn and now with Dan... And how sweet of Shawn to make brekky for Uri, gosh and Uri, everything is soo obvious!! But then again I reckon if Shawn did come right out and said that he liked him, he'd let his conscience get in the way and deny everything... Anyways great update!
schedule March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I've been waiting for this chapter for so long and I'm glad that I finally got to read it. It didn't disappoint, either.

The tension between all of the characters is amazing.

I see that Shawn's finally realizing that Uri's not going to be free forever. That's a good development. I love his almost slip up in the kitchen, and I'm curious to know if all of the family besides Uri knows that Shawn's gay. I've been wondering that for a long time, actually, but I don't think that I ever mentioned it in my reviews. If so then discovering that Uri is gay will come as quite a shock to his parents and they'd probably also be very disappointed, huh? Ugghhh... talk about drama and pain when that time comes.

Dan's a homophobe?! I hope that he can get over his reservations and I hope that Nate's not the same way. Uri needs friends to support him in the hard time that he's having.

I love Demyx too! That, RikuSora, Akuroku, AxelDem (to a point), and when I'm watching my brother play the games: SoKai and RoxasNamine. None of this counting the Final Fantasy couples that I like in the game.

Awesome chapter, teeta! ^^ I await your next genius chapter anxiously.
person Meleth
schedule March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I am so hoping Shawn will just come out and say something to Uri, or Uri to him. Their love for one another is so obvious...but males are so dense!!! I have read this from the beginning and have been waiting with bated breath for every chapter. Please, please let them confess to one another soon. Forget Rane, foreget everyone else....just Shawn and Uri...alone at home....Let Shawn tell him FINALLY!!! They are so frustrated that they are frustrating me!

Good story telling and bravo for keeping me on the edge of my seat. I just want to kick Shawn's ass into gear. He needs to tell Uri everything...the truth!!

*hugs*