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April 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This chapter is hot. The daydream was steamy. I thought it was real. It gave me the same reaction that it gave to Uri. Then what is the deal with Shawn carrying Uri to his part of the bed? Maybe he is going to do what he did in his wet dream. ;) Keep up the great writing and please update when you can.
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April 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*BIG grin* Oh wow. lol. well, where to start?
u were right. i was a little surprised, but into the second paragraph of the daydream i figured he was either still in bed dreaming, or had fallen asleep on the counter for some reason. (maybe i thought he was really sleeping b/c i'm usually half-aware of my surroundngs when i'm daydreaming *shrug*) ^_^
as for the rest.....Uri just keeps AVOIDING things!!! >.<
it's PUBERTY for christ's sake!!! can't he just use the excuse that he's a growing boy?!!& leave out the part about Shawn causing it? -but, no. he can't. cause then he'd just have a bigger problem with Shawn. lol ^_~
& maybe i'm just a stupid American, but why are they still sharing a room at this age?
i'm just ranting. ^_^ u shouldn't change a thing!
i can't wait to see whether Rane's concerned that he missed school & what ELSE occured while he was at home... kids talk as i recall.....& how is Dan feeling now?
i foresee a reasonable climax ot the Shawn-beating-around-the-bush thing within the next 2 weeks.....*crossing fingers & rolling my lucky dice* ^_~
u were right. i was a little surprised, but into the second paragraph of the daydream i figured he was either still in bed dreaming, or had fallen asleep on the counter for some reason. (maybe i thought he was really sleeping b/c i'm usually half-aware of my surroundngs when i'm daydreaming *shrug*) ^_^
as for the rest.....Uri just keeps AVOIDING things!!! >.<
it's PUBERTY for christ's sake!!! can't he just use the excuse that he's a growing boy?!!& leave out the part about Shawn causing it? -but, no. he can't. cause then he'd just have a bigger problem with Shawn. lol ^_~
& maybe i'm just a stupid American, but why are they still sharing a room at this age?
i'm just ranting. ^_^ u shouldn't change a thing!
i can't wait to see whether Rane's concerned that he missed school & what ELSE occured while he was at home... kids talk as i recall.....& how is Dan feeling now?
i foresee a reasonable climax ot the Shawn-beating-around-the-bush thing within the next 2 weeks.....*crossing fingers & rolling my lucky dice* ^_~
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April 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE YAYYYYYY!!!!!!!!
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So close, yet so far.......(I'm gunna make pancakes now) T_T Much love~~
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So close, yet so far.......(I'm gunna make pancakes now) T_T Much love~~
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April 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 22
Wow Teeta!
You get an E for Exceeds Expectations and an O for outstanding! LOL
That was absolutely wonderful! I beleived that it was happening for real until maple syrup and a kiss. At that point it seemed to be a dream, because Shawn wouldn't be so forward. Exept, they were supposed to be in the kitchen eating pancakes... So, I had to go and check the previous chapter. They ARE in the kitchen, no mistake! At this point I decided that it was real and Shawn's plan was to get Uri IF and AFTER they declare mutual love. I am, like: wow, Teeta!!! So, I've read it as a real deal until the daydreaming explanation. Good job, Teeta *hugs*. That scene was so hot that my fingers holding the mouse are slightly burned now, hehe!
You did a very good job on writing that smut scene (which I have read twice by now, looking for the exact spot where Uri slipped into daydreaming) I like the fact that it is a combination of action and how they feel and think at the same time. Super hot! You need to do more of that sort of writing - for recearch and development purposes, of course *chukles*
How could Shawn not realize what was happening with Uri? It was in front of his nose, he could almost smell it in the air! This suspence is killing me. He is a good and caring brother, though, I'll give him that.
That part about the eggs was funny, especially when Shawn smeared them on Uri's head. Uri is a neat freak (in a good way, he does like his showers AND folds his clothes!) I just imagined his face, hahaha!
I sort of expected Rane to come later and check on his so-called boyfriend but no such luck. Did he even notice that Uri missed school?
Aww, Shawn carried him to the bedroom - to his own bed! That is the most evil cliffhanger ever, Teeta, how could you! Outstanding:-D
PS; I'd like to notice that it should probably be 'salesman' instead of 'canvasser'.
Thank you for the fast update!
Wow Teeta!
You get an E for Exceeds Expectations and an O for outstanding! LOL
That was absolutely wonderful! I beleived that it was happening for real until maple syrup and a kiss. At that point it seemed to be a dream, because Shawn wouldn't be so forward. Exept, they were supposed to be in the kitchen eating pancakes... So, I had to go and check the previous chapter. They ARE in the kitchen, no mistake! At this point I decided that it was real and Shawn's plan was to get Uri IF and AFTER they declare mutual love. I am, like: wow, Teeta!!! So, I've read it as a real deal until the daydreaming explanation. Good job, Teeta *hugs*. That scene was so hot that my fingers holding the mouse are slightly burned now, hehe!
You did a very good job on writing that smut scene (which I have read twice by now, looking for the exact spot where Uri slipped into daydreaming) I like the fact that it is a combination of action and how they feel and think at the same time. Super hot! You need to do more of that sort of writing - for recearch and development purposes, of course *chukles*
How could Shawn not realize what was happening with Uri? It was in front of his nose, he could almost smell it in the air! This suspence is killing me. He is a good and caring brother, though, I'll give him that.
That part about the eggs was funny, especially when Shawn smeared them on Uri's head. Uri is a neat freak (in a good way, he does like his showers AND folds his clothes!) I just imagined his face, hahaha!
I sort of expected Rane to come later and check on his so-called boyfriend but no such luck. Did he even notice that Uri missed school?
Aww, Shawn carried him to the bedroom - to his own bed! That is the most evil cliffhanger ever, Teeta, how could you! Outstanding:-D
PS; I'd like to notice that it should probably be 'salesman' instead of 'canvasser'.
Thank you for the fast update!
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April 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WOW... WOW... WOW...
Man, oh man, lovely chapter *licks lips feeling a sweet after taste* That has got to be the most funny / sensual / erotic / twisted / pleasurable chapter I have read. And it didn`t even include SMEX.... LOL Imagine what a chapter, having that would do to me?.... *snicker*
I totally loved this chapter. The sensual, sweet, arousing kiss Uri and Rane shared. The whole scene was just so cute. Ok, so Kyle was a bit mean and very much teasing but that just added to the pains Uri was feeling and going through afterwards when he was trying to prove to Kyle that he and Rane had a stable relationship. And it was just so endearing to see Rane help Uri like that (how the poor boy must have suffered *giggle*). Uri was all frantic that he was going to make a fool of himself and here comes Rane with a most passionate kiss. I would have wanted a second kiss...but Uri is just so shy *stick tongue out*... and as soon as I saw the title I thought of Kyle making some suggestions... XD
I noticed some details here in there that seem familiar *wide grin* Excellent idea with the painting. And to make it even more...stimulating make it be a nude... ok, maybe Uri won`t go for that...but make him show some skin..and they`re out in the field. No one around... the rain starts...they run for cover, Uri forgets his shirt...has to cuddle with Shawn for warmth...Whoa... getting ahead of myself... see what happens when you don`t insert SMEX :P
The whole scene when Shawn was showing Uri how to solve the exercise was such a torn on. The way Uri smelt Shawn`s cologne and then leaned on him easily and felt comforted by his voice....Ahhh... *my heart felt so warm at that scene* That was the moment for a kiss. No wonder poor Shawn was so distressed. Never in his wildest dreams would he have imagined that his tactics would work so well as to have Uri doing something like that. I think it was an unconscious payback from Uri. For the nose kiss. That one took me by surprise too LOL And it is clear why it took Uri half an hour to regain his control. I mean that innocent sign of affection turned him on far more than Rane`s kiss had and that was a good kiss too.
I can understand Dan`s reaction. He was shocked at finding the truth so all of a sudden and not from Uri directly. Well, it was direct but the manner should have been a different one LOL I hope he won`t stay mad at Uri because the boy is going to need all the help he can get. With so many things changing I can predict bad weather for the poor kid coming his way soon. Though the supportive girl was a nice welcome. I guess he did need an outsider to help clarify some of his thoughts, gave him a new perspective. I wonder if she`s going to stay?
What next? The last sentence (Teeta has become so good at cliffhangers *sticks tongue out*) was definitely a little bomb in itself. How will Uri react to that? Take it as something light or find a deeper meaning to it? And what was the threat Rane made? How will Rane behave once he comes to Uri`s house? So many questions left unanswered. I want an Update! FAST!
Loved the chapter. Write more!!!!!! *kisses cheek and hugs tightly*
Man, oh man, lovely chapter *licks lips feeling a sweet after taste* That has got to be the most funny / sensual / erotic / twisted / pleasurable chapter I have read. And it didn`t even include SMEX.... LOL Imagine what a chapter, having that would do to me?.... *snicker*
I totally loved this chapter. The sensual, sweet, arousing kiss Uri and Rane shared. The whole scene was just so cute. Ok, so Kyle was a bit mean and very much teasing but that just added to the pains Uri was feeling and going through afterwards when he was trying to prove to Kyle that he and Rane had a stable relationship. And it was just so endearing to see Rane help Uri like that (how the poor boy must have suffered *giggle*). Uri was all frantic that he was going to make a fool of himself and here comes Rane with a most passionate kiss. I would have wanted a second kiss...but Uri is just so shy *stick tongue out*... and as soon as I saw the title I thought of Kyle making some suggestions... XD
I noticed some details here in there that seem familiar *wide grin* Excellent idea with the painting. And to make it even more...stimulating make it be a nude... ok, maybe Uri won`t go for that...but make him show some skin..and they`re out in the field. No one around... the rain starts...they run for cover, Uri forgets his shirt...has to cuddle with Shawn for warmth...Whoa... getting ahead of myself... see what happens when you don`t insert SMEX :P
The whole scene when Shawn was showing Uri how to solve the exercise was such a torn on. The way Uri smelt Shawn`s cologne and then leaned on him easily and felt comforted by his voice....Ahhh... *my heart felt so warm at that scene* That was the moment for a kiss. No wonder poor Shawn was so distressed. Never in his wildest dreams would he have imagined that his tactics would work so well as to have Uri doing something like that. I think it was an unconscious payback from Uri. For the nose kiss. That one took me by surprise too LOL And it is clear why it took Uri half an hour to regain his control. I mean that innocent sign of affection turned him on far more than Rane`s kiss had and that was a good kiss too.
I can understand Dan`s reaction. He was shocked at finding the truth so all of a sudden and not from Uri directly. Well, it was direct but the manner should have been a different one LOL I hope he won`t stay mad at Uri because the boy is going to need all the help he can get. With so many things changing I can predict bad weather for the poor kid coming his way soon. Though the supportive girl was a nice welcome. I guess he did need an outsider to help clarify some of his thoughts, gave him a new perspective. I wonder if she`s going to stay?
What next? The last sentence (Teeta has become so good at cliffhangers *sticks tongue out*) was definitely a little bomb in itself. How will Uri react to that? Take it as something light or find a deeper meaning to it? And what was the threat Rane made? How will Rane behave once he comes to Uri`s house? So many questions left unanswered. I want an Update! FAST!
Loved the chapter. Write more!!!!!! *kisses cheek and hugs tightly*
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April 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hehe! I'm so happy the storm woke me up! now I can see what others review for this chappie!!! HUGS Teeta... you know I loved it *evil grin*
Laaerie
Laaerie
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April 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, yeah, yeah... Surprise, surprise. I'm angry at myself, now. I really wanted my prize. Maybe I should brace my head so it can't happen next time. It was the syrup and him feeding the bite to Uri personally that did it. You didn't even have to put the kiss and it still worked. Anger and frustration, that's what I have at the moment.
I am thoroughly satisfied until sex, at least. I can look back at this chapter and have everything I need, even if it was a dream.
I was expecting some sort of interaction, and there was that voice in the back of my head that told me it would be dream, just because that's how you are. It was too soon for it to really happen. Looks like Uri is coming a little bit more to terms with it, and that's good. The sooner he does that, the sooner they can get to the good parts.
Next chapter? Umm... I have no idea. I haven't had enough time to think too much about it. Most likely some spooning, and maybe Shawn asking more advice about this mystery "person" that he's in love with; who I'm sure we all think is Uri... Or some other guy. Definitely not a girl, though, but maybe the Uri thing is just my hopes talking.
Long enough? I hope so. I feel weird now... >.>
I am thoroughly satisfied until sex, at least. I can look back at this chapter and have everything I need, even if it was a dream.
I was expecting some sort of interaction, and there was that voice in the back of my head that told me it would be dream, just because that's how you are. It was too soon for it to really happen. Looks like Uri is coming a little bit more to terms with it, and that's good. The sooner he does that, the sooner they can get to the good parts.
Next chapter? Umm... I have no idea. I haven't had enough time to think too much about it. Most likely some spooning, and maybe Shawn asking more advice about this mystery "person" that he's in love with; who I'm sure we all think is Uri... Or some other guy. Definitely not a girl, though, but maybe the Uri thing is just my hopes talking.
Long enough? I hope so. I feel weird now... >.>
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April 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh. My. Gosh.
You are so amazing. I wasn't expecting an update this quickly, but I'm definately not complaining! This chapter was infinately awesome, and I love you for giving it to us.
I am so grateful, and I don't mean to seem rude, but you better update soon with the continuation of that nasty cliffie of yours!
Best wishes,
LJ
You are so amazing. I wasn't expecting an update this quickly, but I'm definately not complaining! This chapter was infinately awesome, and I love you for giving it to us.
I am so grateful, and I don't mean to seem rude, but you better update soon with the continuation of that nasty cliffie of yours!
Best wishes,
LJ
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April 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YOU ARE EVIL, girl!!! But I loved it even if it was a daydream! And then you leave us with an evil cliffie!!! MORE!!!!
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April 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow ! Another great chapter ! the lemon part is very hot ! (I think I need a cold shower ^__^)
I hope Uri's dream is going to become reality !
It's true, you always suprise your readers... More please...
I hope Uri's dream is going to become reality !
It's true, you always suprise your readers... More please...