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ha....
one thing I was thinking about was that if uri would actually go counseling the story would have been over after chapter 5, because a shrink would figure that stuff out....

Awww...cute! I like the way this is painfully slow...It makes me wonder even more about what's gonna happen when he tells Shawn--Which he'd beter do at some point...TT.0...Also, it makes me wonder if the family knows that Shawn likes him, because the all go quiet(In earlier chapters) when Uri says something about Shawn's "girlfriend"-- not that i'm necessarily right...keep it up anyway, thanks for the fast updates!!--Youssii

oh my gawd! I absolutely adored this chapter...and it was mistake free! YAY!
aww, I just hope they eventually get together and have some...fun...if you know what I mean ; )
with the way I picture them...they seem to be so cute for each other. And Shawn knows how to cook?!
But it's cute how he 'pretended' that he didn't know how. lol...I wanna make my little man cook for me as well.

...wahhhsh, I can't believe how many chapters you have up now! I only have two in my crudelis fatum story...
and you're so tallented with your wording! especially when Uriel was telling the readers how sad he felt, and that he sort of came to realization of his wanting for his brother. It's so romantic! If you ever get this published as a book, I totally want to buy it!!

Anyway, it's late..and this was a nice chapter to read before going to sleep.

by the way...the mistake free chapter I reviewed was chapter seven..(I just forgot to say that! gomen na sai!)

Awwwwww....... How Cuteeeeeeeeee......... That was ritch! I love You and Your story! Unnn... I have one question, if it's Your and Uri's little sweet secret then fine, but what is Uri's penis like ? Does he has a lot of pubic hair ?

OMFG EVIL! :O I JUST KNEW IT WAS A DREAM!

Poor Uri! He needs a hug...or to get laid...FOR REAL! *cough*

Gosh, this reminds me of fighting over the idea of either putting Riku with Sora or Sora with Roxas~! In the end, I have a nasty habit of just sticking all three of them together (OMG That fic will come out soon...as soon as I get off my lazy ass and write it~!)

Though, I still seriously think Shawn has the hots for Uri too. But, it's cute either way you go about it. And, no matter who Uri ends up with *waves ShawnUri banners, only to have split personality ripe them apart and wave RaneUri banners* I'll still fangirl horrible over them, just cause Uri is so damned cute!

Likey. Most definitely.
And this is one of the cliff hangers I was talking about! That's so evil... BUT I know it'll be worth the wait ^^
Awww... I love this story! You really have a talent to tell it and make it unpredictable, most importantly.
Shawn is so cute! And I feel a little sorry for him. Everytime he's being a bit more straight forward with his comments, Uri needs to run to the bathroom XD I wonder what Shawn would have done if he had found Uri's boxers... hehe
Sometimes I really wonder what Shwan is thinking, but I like it that you only write about Uri's feelings. That makes it so suspense-packed ^^

Oh and... the day dream... *thumbs up* (^_________^)

I've been following this story for a long time, and I really love it. You've developed your characters very well, something I've never managed to do with original characters. They feel like real people to me, with their own clearly defined personalities. I also like the twists in your plot, with Uri slowly realizing that he's gay and everyone at school knowing even before he did. I only have one tiny bit of criticism. This may just be me, but it feels kind of like the suspense is being stretched out just a little bit too long. The incidents between Uri and Shawn just seem like they're getting a bit repetitive, you know? I mean, stretching out the suspense is good, but there comes a point when it's just not believable to continue keeping them both oblivious to the other's feelings. The situations between them just seem to be repeating themselves now, to me. I'm still very, very into the story, because you're an awesome writer and I love your plot and characters, but with the newer chapters, I find myself thinking, "This is happening AGAIN?" in reference to the interaction between Uri and Shawn. Granted, the situations differ slightly, but it's still Shawn saying or doing vaguely suggestive things and Uri being completely oblivious, or them touching and Uri getting aroused and embarassed, etc. I'm probably the only one who feels this way, but I just had to point this out for my own piece of mind. xD I guess what I'm trying to ask is: when are these crazy boys gonna figure each other out, already?

Again, I hope that you don't take this the wrong way. I'm only impatient because I really love your characters and plot, and you've developed both so well. Uri and Shawn's circumstances really draw in your readers, and that takes talent! Anyway, great work, and I can't wait for your next chapter!

Hi again, I just wanted to tell you that my roommate not only literally had a nosebleed last night but really. 10 minutes after I told her the new chapter. ^^

Whoa so much unexpected hotness! loved it. I never believed it was happening for real though, well almost but I couldn't help but scroll down to see if Uri was dreaming it and he did. I can hardly tell how much I like your vivid descriptions. ^^ And I'm glad it was all a product of Uri's imagination. You found a good way to increase his torment, and I would like to see Rane get a little more fun and Shawn get a little more torment before the brothers finally realise their attraction is mutual. Somehow Uri's fantasy reveals that he suspects Shawn wants him too though. Especially the 'welcome to my private hell' part. But I guess that's something subconscious?

Why yes, the smutty part made my teeth water again, and I very much enjoyed this chapter in general, especially the egg fight. Covering each other in slimey goo. I could really picture that... So lovely ^^ *snickers*