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hi teeta..
just wanna check if you're still alive...
not trying to put you under pressure....
noooooo.....

oh, damn it- where is the next chapter?

OMG, that was a seriously hot chapter! XD I can't wait for the next chapter--I want to see what's going to come for Uri in Shawn's bed. Maybe a bit of molestation? >D I loved the fact that this chapter was all about Uri and Shawn. I really enjoy the other characters, but whenever Shawn and Uri have chapters all to themselves, it's very enjoyable. And boy, is it hot in here or what? *fans herself*

Anyway, I'm sorry that it took me so long to get over here to read this chapter--I've been sick. Blegh, sickness sucks.

Nope, I've never run across a CloudxReno fic in my life, but I'd love links. :P

Anyway, I'm off to read that oneshot of yours. (Love always for Shawn and Uri! <333)

Love you teeta!
~Endless

EEK!!!!!!! cute!! haha did you take the 'FUCKITY FUCK' from south park??

XDDDDDDDDD That was brilliant! XDDDD Evil but brilliant.

I'm starting to feel so sorry for the both of them... So much frustration! really... how long will everyone keep secrets? >_< Gaaah! And Shawn... didn't he realize that Uri thinks they do ARE brothers and kinda impossibilitates his plans to woo Uri? *decides they aren't brothers and it's all the fault of stupid over-protective familly*

Okay, I must say, this story is tease. It took me days to reach the end but I made it. I thought at first, with so many chapters, I'd be seeing loads of hot incestuous sex. But no, far from it! But it didn't dissuade me. Oh no. It makes me want to see this through! Personally, I like Rane. Even though the fact that he's nasal is a slight turn off for me... Shawn seems to be like sex in a can. Blatantly interested sex in a can! And Uri is oblivious cute in a can. I realise I sound very weird. Sorry for rambling. PLEASE UPDATE SOON!PLEASE! *weeps*

You EVIL writer you!!!!! I hate you for stopping there. I want Moreee!!!

The climax scene in the kitchen. I knew it wasn`t real. It seemed to sudden. And all the time Uri was getting all hot and bothered with Shawn I was saying to myself..ok...is Uri dreaming? Is this a twisted game of Shwan`s? I just knew that couldn`t be reality. (meanness coming) Somehow I know you will not write about a sex scene between them... probably not till the end (if you decide to have them together) or none at all. Which is sad, because no matter how hot Rane is, I still want Shawn to make love to Uri (notice the verb I used...:P) And you just won`t give us that (End meanness)

I really enjoyed the way Uri came... hm, that came out wrong. I mean I liked that he finally came. Urgh.. wrong phrasing again... I liked the fact that Shawn caused such an overwhelming reaction in Uri that the poor boy couldn`t help but climax. And the fact that Uri came again in the bathroom just because of Shawn`s voice should tell him (Uri) how futile it is to fight against such strong emotions. But then again, Uri is so clueless...

I laughed my ass off whenever Uri tried to grab a pair of boxers. I think Shawn knew he wasn`t wearing any and just wanted to tease him and leave Uri in commando... LOL I mean, every time Uri had the intention to get dressed, in hopped Shawn LOL I really wanted Shawn to strip Uri...I did not fail to see that the thought of stripping Uri crossed Shawn`t mind more than once... any hopes of that happening in the future? (I never lose hope)

And Shawn`s... masturbation? Was that for real? Was he faking it just because he knew Uri was awake and wanted to see his reaction? Too bad Uri fled the room before we got to see Shawn finish... LOL Things would have been so interesting.

Ohh and that is by no means a cliffhanger. I know you too well to know nothing is going to happen in the next chapter between the two...and in Shawn`s bed no less. Shawn will at the very least drop Uri in his bed and let him sleep there. Maybe even sleep beside him. At most he might try a touch or two... but that seems unlikely, since Shawn knows only to make innuendos and leave small suggesting hints but nothing that major as to try and feel Uri, while the boy is sleeping. So there...

What you got for us next?

I was thinking, whoa, its happening, but then discover you have tricked us. To coin a phrase of bad english dubbing a la dragonball z, 'darn you!'

This chapter was really good. All of it set between the two brothers. Uri's imagination getting the better of him. Shawns subtle flirting. Uri in the bathroom. Priceless.

Keep it up. I have this on my internet favs so I can easily checkfor updates. (Thats right, Rie has become your official stalker!)

Right, gotta go. Keep up the good work

Rie
xx

teeta....hell...what you're doing.....
I'm in the middle of chapter 22, right at the point where we notice that THIS lovely scene....you know which one...is just part of uris imagination.....somehow you're into kinky scenes right now, remember the kiss in the pervious chapter....
which I actually wanted to review, but couldn't...
I spend the holidays at my mums and her laptop was restricted, so I had to copy that chapter at a friends and read it later without being able to review....
I'm sorry....
but that's actually why I just stopped reading...
to tell you everything I had on my mind before I started reading this chapter, for I think, when I'm finished with it I have to say something completly different, or at least forget parts...
actually I have problems of recalling my exact ideas to chapter 21, but I'll give it a try and you a summary....
I've actually went back to the first scene rane appears in (can I tell you, that I love Rane just too much....I'm always fond of characters, but I usually try to see their place and role in the story, so that I often appreaciate characters like kyle where everybody else hates him....and I also try not to have favourites, but now it's offically done....I adore Rane....he's just too cool to be true....I love every single detail about him....so when the story is actually finished you could consider putting him in a bus to berlin, so I can have him as my boyfriend)....and noticed something really important....when Kyle makes his move on uri, it's purley because of rane...right,, we figured that out before, but I kind of thought kyle was interested in uri, which he is definitley not....regard the looks the shoots uri...kyle doesn't like uri...but still advances upon him and that just because of rane....I really wanna know what's going on there....
and I know I've told you nothing new....it was plainly obvious, but I was just too blind.....
just wanted to say: now, I've got it....
right....
all seemd a bit clearer a week ago.....
I'll go back to reading...
you'll get another review for that chapter anyway

....oh...teeta....
now I know what I get out off reviewing you.....your answers....to be honest, first thing when I open a new chapter is looking for your answer....now I couldn't review and I feel so sad scrolling trough the reviewreplypart without finding my name there....
anyway....
nice chapter...
I actually don't want to make any comments on it...
nothing left to comment....it's all so clear...
and so much more action than usual....
I hope you're gonna slow down in the next few chapters....
though I must comment your writing skills.....that was hot....
me, being the being ranefan I outed myself as, I was, of course, waiting for rane to come and visit uri, to see what's up......would have been a nice situation.......
but we had a lot of raneaction lately and if it's not meant to be....
sometime I think that rane only became my fabourite chara, because he's all-present (like almighty...ha).....and shawn is not....
anyway....
don't think that I'll change sites, just because you give us more shawn....actually I'm getting kind of frustrated with the ranelack and of course I blame it on shawn...
but don't worry......I'm old enough to know, that it's only my twisted mind, so I won't keep a grudge on shawn....
but give us rane
(have I ever written such a meaningless review before)....
by the way, you are friendly invited to visit my in berlin towards the end of the year or the following....
I don't think you're gonna do it, but it's still an offer.....

in chapter 20 you told somebody that you were waiting since oct.2006 for a story to be updated.....that's not spontanety by lilias, is it???????

you know, I'm sitting here, trying desperatly to think of something meaningfull to write you, but I just can't.....somewhere in the back of my mind sits something I can't get hold off and that little something got it's own ideas and opinions......
It would be really cool if there could be a not supposed to forum where you can actually talk to other fans about it.....it just gives me soooo much to think about and sure enough there are other people out there as well....